Part 1
Examiner
Do you prefer sad or happy music?
Candidate
I prefer coffee music because my Google become happy when I listening update music and also it is very good when I do training because I always go to gym after classes so it made me refreshing.
Examiner
Does happy music make you feel more excited?
Candidate
Yeah, definitely. I'm excited even if when I feel sick. So it was very helpful when I was their breath. So music helped me to motivate good condition for me.
Examiner
Have you taken any music classes?
Candidate
Yes, when I watch elementary school students, I took BM lessons once a week, but at the time I don't like playing the piano. But now I usually play the piano on holidays with my sisters and she always like the music, especially playing the drums, so I do it.
Examiner
Do you listen to music while doing other things?
Candidate
Yeah, when I do holsters such as washing dishes or doing the laundry, uh, you always listen to music. I don't like house dress, but with music I can do this with Happy Wedding and it makes me more efficient.
Do you prefer sad or happy music?
Score: 42.0Suggestion: 回答は主題(私が好む音楽の種類)に直接触れていますが、内容が不明瞭で文法や語彙の誤りが多く、論理のつながりも弱いです。まず「coffee music」「my Google become happy」「listening update music」など不自然な表現を修正しましょう。構成としてはトピック文で好みを述べ、その後に1〜2の具体的な理由(例:気分が明るくなる、運動中に集中できる)を簡潔に述べ、接続詞(because / so / which)でつなげると良いです。発音練習では動詞の時制と主語一致(I listen, it makes me feel)を意識してください。
Example: I prefer happy music. For example, upbeat songs make me feel refreshed and more energetic, so I often listen to them while going to the gym after classes. They help lift my mood and improve my focus during workouts.
Does happy music make you feel more excited?
Score: 38.0Suggestion: 短く肯定している点は良いですが、内容が曖昧で文法も崩れています('even if when I feel sick', 'their breath'など)。まずは明確なトピック文を作り、その後に一つか二つの具体例や理由をつなげる練習をしましょう。接続詞(although / so / because)を正しく使い、主語と時制を整えることを心がけてください。例を挙げると説得力が増します。発音では短縮形に頼りすぎず、語句をはっきり発音しましょう。
Example: Yes, definitely. Even when I'm feeling tired or unwell, cheerful music usually cheers me up. For instance, listening to energetic songs during a short walk can make me feel more awake and motivated.
Have you taken any music classes?
Score: 44.0Suggestion: 答えは経験に触れており具体性がありますが、時制の混同や不自然な語句('when I watch elementary school students', 'BM lessons')が目立ちます。過去の経験と現在の状況を明確に区別して述べ、'used to'や過去形/現在形を正しく使いましょう。また家族について述べる際は代名詞の一致(my sisters — they)に注意してください。接続語(however / but / now)で対比を明確にすると良いです。
Example: Yes. I used to take music lessons once a week when I was in elementary school, although I didn't enjoy playing the piano back then. Now I often play the piano on holidays with my sisters, and we sometimes play the drums together for fun.
Do you listen to music while doing other things?
Score: 36.0Suggestion: 質問には肯定的に答えていますが、多くの語彙ミス('holsters','house dress','Happy Wedding')や代名詞の誤用('you always listen')があり意味が取りにくいです。まずはシンプルな構成で、主題文→具体例(掃除、洗濯)→効果(時間が早く感じる、効率が上がる)という流れを意識しましょう。具体的な曲やジャンルを挙げると説得力が増します。また口語のフィラー(uh)を減らし、文を短く明確にする練習をしてください。
Example: Yes, I often listen to music while doing chores like washing dishes or laundry. Listening to upbeat songs makes these tasks feel less boring and helps me work faster and more efficiently.
× I prefer coffee music because my Google become happy when I listening update music and also it is very good when I do training because I always go to gym after classes so it made me refreshing.
✓ I prefer upbeat music because my mood becomes happy when I listen to new music, and it is very good when I exercise because I always go to the gym after classes, so it makes me feel refreshed.
この文は動詞の形と語彙の選択に複数の誤りがあります。 1) 'coffee music' は文脈に合わないため 'upbeat music' など適切な語に変更しました。 2) 'my Google become happy' は主語と動詞の一致の問題および語の誤用で、'my mood becomes happy' に訂正しました(Grammar problem type IDs 1と27に関係)。 3) 'when I listening update music' は動名詞/基礎形の誤用と語順の問題で、'when I listen to new music' に直しました(Grammar problem type 8)。 4) 'when I do training' は自然な英語で 'when I exercise' に変更しました(語彙の選択)。 5) 'go to gym' には冠詞が必要で 'go to the gym' に直しました(Grammar problem type 17/22)。 6) 'so it made me refreshing' は時制と形容詞/分詞の誤用で、'so it makes me feel refreshed' にしました(Grammar problem type 6と13)。 改善方法: 主語と動詞の一致を意識し、動詞の基本形/現在形/過去形の使い分けを練習すること。よく使う表現(listen to, go to the gym, feel refreshed)を反復して覚えてください.
× Yeah, definitely. I'm excited even if when I feel sick.
✓ Yeah, definitely. I'm excited even when I feel sick.
'even if when' は冗長で不自然です。ここでは条件を表す接続詞として 'even when' を使うのが正しいです(Grammar problem type 6)。 改善方法: 'even if' と 'even when' の違いを学び、文脈に合う方を使う練習をしてください.
× So it was very helpful when I was their breath.
✓ So it was very helpful when I was out of breath.
原文の 'their breath' は文脈に合わない誤った語選択です。正しくは 'out of breath'(息切れしている)であり、'when I was out of breath' が自然な表現です(Grammar problem type 26と12)。 改善方法: イディオム表現は個別に覚え、文脈での使い方を確認してください.
× So music helped me to motivate good condition for me.
✓ So music helped me get into a better mood/condition.
'helped me to motivate good condition for me' は不自然な語順と語選択です。'helped me get into a better mood' または 'helped me feel better' のように簡潔に表現します(Grammar problem type 8と13)。 改善方法: 'help someone do something' の構文と、'get into a better mood/feel better' といった自然な表現を練習してください.
× Yes, when I watch elementary school students, I took BM lessons once a week, but at the time I don't like playing the piano.
✓ Yes, when I was in elementary school, I took BM lessons once a week, but at that time I didn't like playing the piano.
時制と表現の誤りがあります。'when I watch elementary school students' は意味不明で、おそらく 'when I was in elementary school' が正しいです。過去の事柄なので 'don't like' を過去形の 'didn't like' に直しました(Grammar problem type 5と26)。 改善方法: 時を表す表現に合わせて動詞の時制を一致させる練習を行ってください.
× But now I usually play the piano on holidays with my sisters and she always like the music, especially playing the drums, so I do it.
✓ But now I usually play the piano on holidays with my sisters; they always like music, and I especially enjoy playing the drums, so I do it.
代名詞の一致と動詞の人称一致の問題があります。複数の 'sisters' に対しては 'she' ではなく 'they' を使い、'she always like' は三人称単数現在の語形変化が必要ですが複数なので 'they always like' に修正しました。また 'especially playing the drums' の主語が不明瞭なので 'I especially enjoy playing the drums' としました(Grammar problem type 12と2)。 改善方法: 代名詞が何を指すかを明確にし、主語と動詞の一致を常に確認してください.
× Yeah, when I do holsters such as washing dishes or doing the laundry, uh, you always listen to music.
✓ Yeah, when I do housework such as washing dishes or doing the laundry, I always listen to music.
'holsters' は誤字で 'housework' が正しく、'you always listen' は一人称の話者について述べているので 'I always listen' にする必要があります(Grammar problem type 8と12)。 改善方法: 単語のスペルを確認し、話者が 'I' の場合は動詞も一人称に合わせてください.
× I don't like house dress, but with music I can do this with Happy Wedding and it makes me more efficient.
✓ I don't like housework, but with music I can do it happily and it makes me more efficient.
'house dress' は誤った語彙で 'housework' (家事)が適切です。'do this with Happy Wedding' は意味不明で、文脈から 'do it happily'(楽しくそれをする)と解釈しました。'Happy Wedding' は固有名詞でなければ不適切です。副詞の位置も調整しました(Grammar problem type 13と11)。 改善方法: 適切な語彙を選び、形容詞と副詞の使い分け(happily vs happy)を学んでください.