Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., "an uplifting uplifting moments beats on", "a soulful music", "those emotion"). Use linking words like "however" or "otherwise" to contrast moods.

Example: I prefer music that matches my mood. For example, when I’m happy I choose upbeat, energetic songs that make me want to dance; however, when I’m sad I listen to slow, soulful music to help me reflect and calm down.

Suggestion: Use a direct topic sentence and fewer vague phrases. Correct verb forms and word choices (e.g., "music does magic on me" → "music works like magic for me", "compound" → "amplify", "listening a music" → "listening to music"). Give one clear example and link cause and effect with words like "because" or "so".

Example: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because it amplifies my positive emotions. For instance, when I listen to upbeat songs while preparing for a presentation, I feel more confident and energetic, so I perform better.

Suggestion: Answer directly then give specific reasons. Fix grammar and phrasing ("I'm living in small cities" → "I live in a small town", "hectic cleaning hours" is unclear — say "a busy schedule at home"). Keep sentences concise and coherent using linking words like "because" or "so".

Example: No, I haven't taken formal music classes because I live in a small town with few local options. I tried online lessons, but my busy household schedule made it difficult to attend. However, I encourage my children to take online classes because they enjoy them and it improves their mood.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and give two brief, specific examples using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid incomplete phrases (e.g., "make me" should finish the idea: "make me feel more energetic"). Use ordinal links like "first" and "second" properly.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities. For example, I play lively music while cooking to make the repetitive tasks more enjoyable, and I listen to upbeat tracks during workouts because they boost my energy and help me exercise longer.

× It depends upon my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

Use the correct preposition: 'depend on' is the standard collocation in English, not 'depend upon' in this conversational context. Replace 'upon' with 'on' for natural usage.

× When I am cheerful and delighted as well as over the moon on special occasion, I always prefer an uplifting uplifting moments beats on.

✓ When I am cheerful, delighted, or over the moon on a special occasion, I prefer uplifting, upbeat music.

Multiple issues: word choice and redundancy ('uplifting uplifting' repeated; 'moments beats on' is ungrammatical). Also missing article before 'special occasion' and incorrect noun form. Correct by using adjectives separated by commas, adding 'a' before 'special occasion', using 'prefer' without 'always' duplication, and choosing 'uplifting, upbeat music' for natural expression.

× Conversely, when I'm feeling down, I always listen a soulful music to process those emotion.

✓ Conversely, when I'm feeling down, I always listen to soulful music to process those emotions.

Use 'listen to' (verb + preposition) and uncountable noun 'music' without 'a'. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match 'those' and plural context.

× Definitely, music does magic on me.

✓ Definitely, music works like magic on me.

'Does magic on me' is unnatural; use idiomatic 'works like magic on me'. Keeps adverb 'definitely' at start for emphasis.

× I think it just compound all the emotion that I'm feeling, especially the positive ones.

✓ I think it just compounds all the emotions that I'm feeling, especially the positive ones.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires third-person singular verb 'compounds' (Grammar problem type 2/27). Also 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match 'all the'.

× For example, if I am very much enthusiastic and courageous while performing a particular task, listening a music also increase the level of my emotion.

✓ For example, if I am very enthusiastic and courageous while performing a particular task, listening to music also increases the level of my emotions.

Remove unnecessary 'much' after 'very' and use 'very enthusiastic' idiomatically. Use 'listening to music' (verb + preposition) and third-person singular verb 'increases' to agree with gerund subject. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions'.

× Not really, I'm living in small cities and music classes as well as music school are not available in my area.

✓ Not really. I live in small cities, and music classes and music schools are not available in my area.

Use simple present 'I live' rather than present continuous for a general state. Make nouns plural consistently ('music schools') and use 'and' rather than 'as well as' for parallel subjects.

× Though I tried some music classes online but I couldn't schedule with them due to having hectic cleaning hours.

✓ I tried some online music classes, but I couldn't schedule them because I had hectic cleaning duties.

Do not combine 'though' and 'but' together. Use 'but' or 'although'. Use 'schedule them' (not 'schedule with them') and 'because I had' for clearer cause; 'cleaning duties' is more natural than 'cleaning hours'.

× But I always appreciate my kids to participate in online classes so they can lift their mood and process.

✓ But I always encourage my kids to participate in online classes so they can lift their mood and cope.

'Appreciate my kids to participate' is incorrect; use 'encourage' or 'ask' followed by infinitive. 'Process' alone is incomplete; use 'cope' or 'process their emotions'.

× Definitely there are several task when I am listening music while performing those.

✓ Definitely, there are several tasks I do while listening to music.

Use plural 'tasks' and natural word order: subject-verb then clause. Use 'listening to music' and remove awkward 'performing those'.

× First, I always listen music while I'm doing cooking because it helps me to deal with boredom and monotonous process of cooking and 2nd, when I do workout sometime I feel exhausted but having an uplifting music make me.

✓ First, I always listen to music while I'm cooking because it helps me deal with boredom and the monotony of cooking. Second, when I work out sometimes I feel exhausted, but uplifting music helps me.

Use 'listen to music' (verb + preposition) and 'cooking' without 'doing'. 'Helps me deal with' is idiomatic; 'monotonous process of cooking' replaced by 'the monotony of cooking'. Use 'work out' (phrasal verb) and correct verb agreement: 'uplifting music helps me'.