Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be slightly more concise and add a brief reason with a linking word. Avoid repeating similar ideas (dancing and singing are related). Use one clear example to show preference.

Example: I prefer happy music because upbeat songs lift my energy and make me want to move. For example, I often listen to EDM or pop when I’m cleaning or getting ready, since the strong beat helps me stay motivated.

Suggestion: Combine short repeated sentences and use linking words to make it more fluent. Reduce repetition (“it makes me excited” twice) and give one specific effect or example of how it helps you.

Example: Yes, it definitely does because upbeat tracks boost my energy and focus. For instance, when I’m training capoeira or at the gym, music helps me keep a faster pace and stay motivated throughout the session.

Suggestion: Provide a clearer structure: state the direct answer, then briefly explain and give a supporting detail. Avoid self-deprecating labels like “tone deaf” without context; instead describe what you enjoy or any informal practice.

Example: No, I haven’t had formal lessons, but I enjoy singing for fun. For example, I often practice singing along to OPM songs at home to improve my rhythm and confidence despite not having professional training.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence and then give two specific situations with a linking word. Avoid repetition (‘just’ used twice) and correct minor word errors (Capoeira). Add a brief reason why it helps you in each situation.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things because it helps me concentrate and relax. For example, I play upbeat tracks when I’m training capoeira to keep my rhythm, and I listen to mellow pop while working to stay focused without getting distracted.

× I do enjoy when the music has a lot of beats and I can dance and sing to it.

✓ I do enjoy it when the music has a lot of beats and I can dance and sing to it.

Missing object pronoun 'it' after 'enjoy'. The verb 'enjoy' requires a noun or gerund phrase as its object. Add 'it' to make the sentence complete and natural. Suggestion: use 'enjoy it' or 'enjoy dancing and singing to it.'

× I like listening to music wherever I'm doing something.

✓ I like listening to music whenever I'm doing something.

Using 'wherever' is awkward here; 'whenever' better matches time contexts. Also 'I'm doing something' is acceptable but 'whenever I'm doing something' is more natural for habitual present. Suggestion: use 'whenever' for repeated time events.

× Whenever I'm working, going to the gym, training capoeira.

✓ Whenever I'm working, going to the gym, or training capoeira, I listen to music.

The sentence fragment lacks a main verb or independent clause. Add an independent clause (for example 'I listen to music') to complete the sentence. Also include 'or' between list items for clarity.

× I haven't taken any music classes or been to a proper music training, but I do like to sing.

✓ I haven't taken any music classes or been to proper music training, but I do like to sing.

'A proper music training' is incorrect because 'training' in this context is an uncountable noun; do not use the indefinite article 'a'. Remove 'a' to correct singular/plural and article usage. Suggestion: use 'proper music training' or 'a proper music course'.

× I like listening to Opms and I can sing to it.

✓ I like listening to OPM and I can sing along to it.

'Opms' is incorrect pluralization; OPM (Original Pilipino Music) is treated as a mass noun or genre (uncountable). Use 'OPM' without 's'. Also 'sing to it' is awkward; 'sing along to it' is idiomatic for singing with recorded music.

× I'm tone deaf but I still enjoy singing.

✓ I'm tone-deaf, but I still enjoy singing.

Grammar is acceptable but add hyphen in 'tone-deaf' for correct adjective form and include comma before 'but' in compound sentence. Suggestion: hyphenate compound adjective and punctuate compound sentence.

× I listen to music when I'm working, walking, going to the gym, training Apoira.

✓ I listen to music when I'm working, walking, going to the gym, or training capoeira.

List lacks parallelism and contains a misspelling 'Apoira' for 'capoeira'. Add 'or' before final item for correct list structure and correct the spelling. Ensure verbs are parallel gerunds.

× I enjoy listening to something, so I put on my headset and just casually forget about the outside world and just listen to the music and vibe with it.

✓ I enjoy listening to music, so I put on my headset and casually forget about the outside world and just listen to the music and vibe with it.

'Listening to something' is vague; use 'listening to music' for clarity. Also remove the duplicated 'just' to avoid redundancy; keep adverb placement natural ('casually forget'). Suggestion: use concise, clear phrasing and avoid repetition.