Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar and coherence: use correct verb forms and prepositions, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus supporting details. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid redundancy. Add specific vocabulary (e.g., ‘instrumental’, ‘melancholic’) and a linking phrase to connect the reason and the example.

Example: I prefer sad, mellow music because it helps me relieve study-related stress and negative feelings. For example, after studying for an hour I usually listen to about 30 minutes of instrumental, melancholic tracks to calm my mind. This routine helps me feel refreshed and more focused when I return to work.

Suggestion: Work on grammar (subject–verb agreement), fluency and completing ideas. Start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘therefore’), and give one concise, specific example. Avoid hesitation fillers and finish your sentence.

Example: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more energetic and motivated because upbeat rhythms increase my concentration and mood. For instance, when I study for lighter tasks I play lively pop songs, which helps me stay focused and cheerful.

Suggestion: Provide a direct, complete response and explain briefly with clear supporting details. Correct unclear phrases (e.g., ‘formerly professionally’ is confusing). Use linking words like ‘however’ or ‘instead’ and avoid self-contradiction. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: No, I haven't taken formal music classes because I'm not interested in learning instruments or professional singing. Instead, I enjoy listening to music and sometimes sing casually at home for pleasure.

Suggestion: Make your answer grammatically correct and expand slightly with a specific detail. Start with a topic sentence, use a linking word if adding detail, and choose more precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘commute’, ‘tranquil’). Keep it concise and natural.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music during my commute on the MRT. While listening, I like to look at the scenery outside because the combination of music and views gives me a tranquil and pleasant start to the day.

× I prefer sad music because it help me to release my study stress and also negative emotions.

✓ I prefer sad music because it helps me to release my study stress and also negative emotions.

Subject-verb agreement: 'help' should be 'helps' because subject 'it' (referring to 'sad music') is third person singular in present tense; use 'helps'. Also 'release my study stress' is acceptable; consider 'relieve' as improvement.

× For example I will after one hour of study I will play around 30 minutes off set track to release my study burden.

✓ For example, after one hour of study I play a set of tracks for around 30 minutes to release my study burden.

Redundant auxiliary and incorrect word order: original repeats 'I will' and misorders time expression. Use simple present 'I play' for habitual actions. 'off set track' is incorrect; use 'a set of tracks' or 'an offset track' depending on meaning. Also add commas for clarity.

× Of course it do. So happy music such as upbeat music usually motivates me to do something more concentrate and more, umm, happy.

✓ Of course it does. So happy music, such as upbeat music, usually motivates me to be more focused and happier.

Third person singular: 'it do' should be 'it does'. Word choice and form: 'more concentrate' is incorrect; use adjective 'more concentrated' or better 'more focused'. Use comparative 'happier' rather than 'more happy'. Add commas around the example phrase.

× So when I need to, when I.

✓ So when I need to, I start listening to happy music.

Incomplete sentence / fragment: original stops mid-thought. Provide a complete clause to express intended meaning; maintain tense consistency by using present simple for habitual behavior.

× Not really, I'm not interested in playing instruments or singing. Formerly professionally. Professionally so, but I prefer umm, listen to music and sing some.

✓ Not really. I'm not interested in playing instruments or singing professionally; I just prefer to listen to music and sing a little.

Fragment and adverb placement: 'Formerly professionally' is unclear and fragmented. 'Professionally so' is incorrect order. Use 'singing professionally' or 'professionally' after the verb. Use 'prefer to listen' instead of 'prefer listen' and 'sing a little' rather than 'sing some'.

× I listen to music when I go to school by MRT. Yeah, I will also see the scenery outside. It gave me a sense of peaceful.

✓ I listen to music when I go to school by MRT. I also look at the scenery outside. It gives me a sense of peace.

Tense consistency: use present simple 'I also look' and 'It gives' for habitual actions. 'I will also see' is wrong here. 'It gave me a sense of peaceful' has adjective/noun error: use noun 'peace' or adjective 'peaceful' with different structure; correct phrase is 'a sense of peace'.