Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more precise and natural: give a clear topic sentence, explain why you like sad music with specific reasons, avoid repetition and vague phrasing. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas and keep it under five sentences.

Example: I prefer sad music, especially artists like Olivia Rodrigo, because her songs feel emotionally honest and relatable. For example, her lyrics often describe personal heartbreak in a way that helps me process my own feelings. Because of that emotional connection, I find sad songs comforting rather than depressing.

Suggestion: Expand slightly with specific examples and use linking words to connect cause and effect. Replace vague words (‘gives me more productivity’) with clearer expressions and keep it concise.

Example: Yes, happy music, such as upbeat K-pop, definitely makes me feel more excited. It brightens my mood and, as a result, helps me concentrate better when I’m studying or doing chores. For instance, lively songs with strong rhythms motivate me to work faster and more efficiently.

Suggestion: Organize your answer: state a clear topic sentence, then give a reason and an alternative activity. Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement, word order) and avoid redundancy. Use linking words such as ‘because’ and ‘however’.

Example: No, I haven’t taken formal music classes because they are quite expensive in the Philippines and only wealthier families can usually afford them. However, I still learn by watching YouTube tutorials and practicing with the instruments I have at home.

Suggestion: Make your response more natural and specific: state when and why you listen to music, give concrete examples, correct grammar and avoid redundancy (e.g., ‘music’ repeated). Use a linking word to explain purpose.

Example: Yes, I usually listen to music while I do household chores such as washing dishes or cleaning the backyard. I find that music makes the tasks feel less boring and helps me keep a steady pace, so I finish faster.

× I love Olivia Rodrigo and her genre is about this sad little little girl and I believe I love that genre.

✓ I love Olivia Rodrigo, and her music is about a sad little girl, which I really like.

The sentence has redundancy ('little little') and awkward phrasing ('her genre is about this sad little little girl'). Replace 'genre' with 'music' and remove duplicate word. Use a relative clause to express preference. Suggestion: avoid repeating words, choose the correct noun (music rather than genre) and connect clauses with commas and 'which' for clarity.

× Yes, I love happy music just like K pop.

✓ Yes, I love happy music, just like K-pop.

'K pop' should be written as 'K-pop' (hyphenated) and a comma improves sentence flow. This is mainly orthographic and article usage is fine; ensure correct styling for proper nouns.

× It really brightens up the mood and gives me more productivity throughout.

✓ It really brightens my mood and makes me more productive throughout the day.

'Brightens up the mood' is acceptable but 'the mood' is less natural than 'my mood.' 'Gives me more productivity' is incorrect; use adjective 'productive' with 'makes me' or noun 'increases my productivity.' Also add 'throughout the day' to clarify timeframe.

× No I haven't actually.

✓ No, I haven't, actually.

Comma placement improves natural speech punctuation. No modal error; this is punctuation to reflect hesitancy. Keep contraction 'haven't' for spoken style.

× Music classes here in the Philippines are quite expensive and only though so are privileged are able to afford such.

✓ Music classes here in the Philippines are quite expensive, and only those who are privileged can afford them.

Multiple issues: word order and word choice are incorrect ('only though so are privileged' is ungrammatical). Use 'only those who are privileged' and modal 'can afford' for ability. Replace 'such' with the pronoun 'them' referring to classes.

× But still I have I watch YouTube and make the use of what I have.

✓ But I still watch YouTube and make use of what I have.

Extra 'I have' creates redundancy and incorrect word order. Use 'I still watch YouTube' and idiom 'make use of' without 'the.' This fixes subject-verb order and removes duplication.

× Yes, I listen to musics music most of the time while I am cleaning, washing the dishes and cleaning my backyard.

✓ Yes, I listen to music most of the time while I am cleaning, washing the dishes, or working in my backyard.

'Musics' is incorrect plural; 'music' is uncountable. Also avoid repeating 'cleaning' twice; use 'working in my backyard' or 'cleaning my backyard.' Use commas and 'or' for listing activities.

× I tend to turn on the music to somehow make the work more easy to work on.

✓ I tend to turn on music to make the work easier to do.

Awkward and redundant phrasing: 'more easy to work on' and repeating 'work' twice. Use comparative adjective 'easier' and idiomatic 'to do.' Remove 'somehow' unless necessary; it can be kept for nuance.