Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g. "if my days are not going well" and "if I am overwhelmed" convey the same idea). Use correct articles and simplify phrasing ("sad music" not "a sad music").

Example: I usually choose music based on my mood. For example, when I’m stressed or having a bad day I prefer slow, sad songs because they help me process my feelings; when I’ve had a good day I listen to upbeat, happy music to celebrate and relax.

Suggestion: Clarify the connection between excitement and relaxation and avoid awkward phrasing. Use linking words (for example, because, and, so) and give one concrete example of how lyrics affect you. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more energetic because I focus on the catchy lyrics and imagine the singer’s story. For example, when I hear an upbeat song about success I picture myself achieving goals, which motivates and relaxes me at the same time.

Suggestion: Provide a clearer structure: a direct answer, then reasons. Avoid negative self-judgments like "I am not that capable"—instead say you haven't tried or you find it challenging. Correct grammar: "listen to music," "concentration" and "play instruments."

Example: No, I haven’t taken any formal music classes. I enjoy listening to music, but I find learning an instrument challenging because it requires a lot of focused practice and coordination, so I haven’t started lessons yet.

Suggestion: Make the topic sentence direct and correct common errors: say "listen to music" and use clearer expressions ("it makes time pass more quickly"). Explain one or two specific benefits and use linking words for coherence.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while doing chores because it makes the time pass more quickly. For instance, upbeat songs help me stay focused and energetic, so I’m more productive and finish my tasks faster.

× It depends upon in which mood I am.

✓ It depends on which mood I am in.

Use the correct preposition combination: 'depend on' and place 'in' at the end for the phrase 'which mood I am in'. The original 'depends upon in' is redundant and ungrammatical. Suggestion: learn common verb+preposition collocations like 'depend on'.

× If my days are not going well, if I am overwhelmed then I prefer a sad music and if my days are going very well, if I complete my tasks very well, then I will prefer happy music.

✓ If my days are not going well and I feel overwhelmed, I prefer sad music; if my days are going very well and I complete my tasks successfully, I prefer happy music.

Do not use the article 'a' before uncountable noun 'music'. Also simplify repeated clauses and match tenses. Replace 'then I will prefer' with present 'I prefer' for habitual preference. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles before uncountable nouns and use consistent tense for habits.

× Yes, it does make me excited as I do go deep into the lyrics of that specific music and I put myself in the same situations as of the singer and I feel relaxed at that time.

✓ Yes, it does make me excited because I go deep into the lyrics of the music, put myself in the singer's situation, and feel relaxed.

Avoid unnecessary auxiliary 'do' in affirmative present simple ('I go' not 'I do go'). Use 'music' without 'that specific' (optional) and correct possessive with 'singer's situation' rather than 'situations as of the singer'. Also shorten and parallelize verbs. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and proper possessive forms.

× No, I have not taken any music classes.

✓ No, I have not taken any music classes.

Sentence is grammatically correct. 'Any music classes' is acceptable. No change needed.

× Though I love to listen music, I think I am not that capable to learn how to play the instruments as it requires more concentrations and strength to play the instruments.

✓ Although I love listening to music, I don't think I am capable of learning to play instruments because it requires more concentration and strength.

Use 'listen to' (verb + preposition) and the gerund 'listening'. Use 'capable of' not 'capable to'. Remove unnecessary article 'the' before plural 'instruments'. Use uncountable 'concentration' not 'concentrations'. Simplify 'learn how to play' to 'learn to play'. Suggestion: study common verb-preposition patterns and countable/uncountable noun use.

× I love to listen music while doing other chores because it realize me that my time is passing easily.

✓ I love listening to music while doing other chores because it makes me feel that time passes more easily.

Use 'listening to music' not 'listen music'. 'Realize me' is incorrect; use 'makes me feel' or 'helps me realize'. Use 'time passes more easily' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: learn verbs that take 'to' after them and common causative patterns like 'make someone feel'.

× While listening music, I feel like I am more focusing on my work and trying to finish my work on time.

✓ While listening to music, I feel like I am more focused on my work and try to finish it on time.

Use 'listening to music' and 'focused' (adjective) rather than 'more focusing'. Also keep verb tense consistent: 'try' instead of 'trying' in coordinated clause. Avoid repeating 'my work' twice; use 'it'. Suggestion: use correct participle/adjective forms and maintain parallel structure in clauses.