Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason with an example. Reduce hesitations and avoid vague phrases like "I'm related to them." Use linking words for clarity.

Example: I prefer sad music because its themes feel more realistic to me. For example, I often listen to acoustic ballads when I want to reflect on personal experiences, as the lyrics and slow tempo help me process my feelings.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer and two concise, coherent reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "I just want to test while listening to."

Example: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited, and it also helps me relax. For instance, upbeat pop songs lift my mood during a workout, while mellow cheerful tunes help me unwind after a long day.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give a clear reason with one brief supporting detail. Avoid uncertain phrasing and fragmented sentences; correct grammar (e.g., "my voice is not good enough").

Example: No, I haven't taken any music classes because I'm not very interested in singing or instruments. Also, I don't think my voice is strong enough to sing formally, so I prefer to enjoy music as a listener.

Suggestion: Start with a direct yes/no, then provide two specific situations and a clear reason. Use linking words and correct collocations (e.g., "while studying" and "on public transport").

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things, especially while studying and on public transport. Listening to instrumental playlists helps me concentrate when I study, and upbeat songs make commuting more enjoyable.

× Actually I prefer sad music because, uh, I feel like those are realistic, more realistic and I'm related to them.

✓ Actually I prefer sad music because I feel like it is more realistic and I can relate to it.

Original uses plural pronouns 'those' and 'them' referring to 'sad music' (singular or uncountable), causing pronoun agreement errors. Change to 'it' to match the singular/uncountable noun 'music'. Also combine 'realistic, more realistic' into 'more realistic' for clarity and remove filler words. Suggestion: match pronouns to the noun they refer to and simplify comparison phrases.

× Of course, yeah, happy music make me feel more excited, uh, not only excited, but also it make me feel, uh, more relaxed and I enjoy listening to them because I I just want to test while listening to.

✓ Of course, happy music makes me feel more excited; not only excited, but it also makes me feel more relaxed, and I enjoy listening to it because I just want to rest while listening.

Verbs referring to 'happy music' require third person singular form 'makes' not 'make'. Pronoun 'them' should be 'it' for uncountable 'music'. Also 'it make me' should be 'it also makes me'. 'test' seems unintended; use 'rest'. Remove repeated filler 'I I'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with third person singular subjects, use correct pronoun for uncountable nouns, and avoid unnecessary fillers.

× Uh, no, because I don't, I'm not interested in like singing music or instrumental because, uh, I don't get my advice is also good enough for singing.

✓ No, because I'm not interested in singing or playing instruments; I don't think my voice is good enough for singing.

Original mixes contractions and fragments causing tense and clarity issues. 'Singing music or instrumental' is awkward; use 'singing or playing instruments'. 'I don't get my advice is also good enough' is ungrammatical—likely intended 'I don't think my voice is good enough'. Suggestion: use clear present simple statements for preferences and beliefs, and choose appropriate nouns ('voice').

× And yeah, I always listen to music, uh, especially when I'm on studying, uh, Jan transportation, umm, because, uh, it makes me feel more comfortable.

✓ Yes, I always listen to music, especially when I'm studying or taking public transportation, because it makes me feel more comfortable.

Phrases like 'I'm on studying' and 'Jan transportation' are incorrect. Use 'when I'm studying' (present continuous for ongoing activities) and 'taking public transportation' or 'on public transport'. Remove filler sounds. Suggestion: use standard collocations ('studying', 'taking public transportation') and the present continuous for activities occurring at the moment of speaking.