Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), and use correct tense and grammar. Use one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because / so) and a brief example. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Example: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me cope with stress. For example, when I feel overwhelmed after a long day, upbeat songs make me feel more energetic and positive, so I can relax and refocus.

Suggestion: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words (not only... but also; for example) and correct verb forms. Avoid repeating ideas and reduce filler words. Give one concrete example of how happy music affects you.

Example: Yes, happy music makes me feel excited and more optimistic. Not only does it improve my mood, but it also makes me want to move — for example, I often start dancing while cooking, which boosts my energy and helps me feel less stressed.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first, then add clear, concise reasons and future plans. Correct grammar (e.g., I wish I had attended / I will enroll) and avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases. State specific types of classes you want and why.

Example: No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I would like to in the future. I plan to enroll in a beginner guitar course because I enjoy singing, and I also want to take an art-drawing class to develop my creativity.

Suggestion: Answer directly and provide a brief structured list of activities. Use linking words (for example, when / while / so) and one sentence about why you do this. Remove filler words and avoid repeating phrases.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while doing chores such as cooking, cleaning, and tidying my clothes. I also play music when I plan my week because it helps me concentrate and makes routine tasks more enjoyable.

× because it's, uh, helped me to elevate like my emotion.

✓ because it has helped me to elevate my emotions.

The student used 'helped' after 'it's' (it is), which is incorrect. The intended meaning requires the present perfect 'has helped' (auxiliary have + past participle) to show an effect from the past continuing to now. Also 'emotion' should be plural as a general state. Suggestion: use 'it has helped me to elevate my emotions' or 'it has helped elevate my mood.'

× And also it's, uh, helped me to defeat my stressful condition because I'm going through a lot of things and, umm, listening to sad music, it would affect me a lot and it would decrease my emotions.

✓ And also it has helped me to overcome stress because I'm going through a lot of things, and listening to sad music affects me a lot and lowers my mood.

Again 'it's helped' should be 'it has helped' (present perfect). 'Defeat my stressful condition' is unnatural; use 'overcome stress' or 'reduce my stress.' 'It would affect' is wrong here: use simple present 'affects' for general truths. 'Decrease my emotions' is incorrect collocation; use 'lowers my mood.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use natural collocations like 'lower my mood.'

× Yes, of course it's not just excited, but also optimistic and uh make me think about the positive thing and the good thing and also make my mood like so good and uh be like more stable rather than just be like I said, listening to sad music and also it's making me like dance, moving my body.

✓ Yes, of course; it does not just make me excited, but also optimistic and makes me think about positive things and improves my mood, making it more stable. Unlike sad music, it also makes me want to dance and move my body.

The student mixed verb forms and omitted third-person -s. After 'it' use 'makes' or 'does not just make.' Use plural 'things' and correct phrase 'improves my mood' rather than 'make my mood like so good.' Keep verbs consistent: 'makes me want to dance.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with 'it' and use parallel structures for clarity.

× So all of those kind of things it's uh increase adrenaline and also.

✓ So all of those kinds of things increase adrenaline.

'It's increase' is incorrect; use simple present 'increase' to describe general effects. Also use plural 'kinds' in 'all of those kinds of things.' Remove trailing 'and also' or complete the thought. Suggestion: use 'increase adrenaline' or 'raise adrenaline levels.'

× No, I wish I had like, uh, attend an uh, music classes, but no.

✓ No, I wish I had attended music classes, but I have not.

After 'I wish I had' the verb should be the past participle 'attended' (past perfect structure). 'Attend' (base form) is wrong. Also 'music classes' does not need 'an' before it. Suggestion: use 'I wish I had attended music classes' to express regret about the past.

× But maybe in the future I will try to, uh, enroll in one of the classes and not just music, I'm in love.

✓ But maybe in the future I will try to enroll in one of the classes; I'm not only in love with music.

The original phrasing is confusing. 'Not just music, I'm in love' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to clarify meaning: 'not only music' and connect ideas properly. Also use a semicolon or conjunction. Suggestion: say 'I'm not only in love with music; I also love art.'

× Also in art. So maybe like uh, art drawing, uh, palette was kind of St. thing. Umm, so in office.

✓ I also like art, such as drawing and painting. Maybe I could take a painting class at the art studio.

The student used unclear pronouns and fragments; phrases like 'palette was kind of St. thing' and 'so in office' are incomplete and unclear. Replace fragments with complete sentences and clear noun phrases. Suggestion: use concrete nouns and full clauses: 'I also like art, for example drawing and painting.'

× Yes, I listen to music while cooking, while cleaning my house, also while, uh, tidying my clothes.

✓ Yes, I listen to music while cooking, cleaning my house, and tidying my clothes.

The sentence is mostly correct but repetitive 'while' can be reduced. Using parallel -ing forms after 'while' improves fluency: 'while cooking, cleaning... and tidying...' Suggestion: keep verbs in parallel gerund form for smooth speech.

× So I'm listening to music all the time. Even when I prepare my schedule for the week, I listen to it.

✓ So I listen to music all the time. Even when I prepare my schedule for the week, I listen to it.

'I'm listening to music all the time' is acceptable, but simple present 'I listen' better expresses a habitual action. Ensure tense consistency when describing routine activities. Suggestion: use simple present for habits.