Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid phrases like "adds up to my personality" which sound unnatural.

Example: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and makes me feel more positive. For example, upbeat pop songs help me start the day with energy and confidence.

Suggestion: Correct grammar and be specific: use subject-verb agreement and avoid vague statements like "I feel me." Give a linked reason and a short example to illustrate how it excites you.

Example: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited because its fast tempo and lively rhythm boost my energy. For example, when I listen to dance tracks I feel motivated to move and I become more focused on my tasks.

Suggestion: Make the response more natural and concise: use correct phrasing ("when I was at school") and add a brief specific detail about what you learned to enrich the answer.

Example: Yes. When I was at school music was compulsory until Year 8, and I continued it as an optional subject until Year 10, where I learned basic singing techniques and how to read simple musical notation.

Suggestion: Avoid listing too many activities; keep it concise and use linking words. Be specific about how music helps you in different activities (e.g., concentration vs energy).

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while studying and doing chores because mellow instrumentals help me concentrate, while upbeat songs give me energy when I’m cleaning or exercising.

× I prefer happy music because I feel like that helps me lift my mood and it also adds up to my personality.

✓ I prefer happy music because I feel that it helps lift my mood and it also adds to my personality.

Original sentence has two issues: subject-verb agreement with 'that helps' is OK but 'feel like that helps' is informal and awkward; 'adds up to my personality' is incorrect preposition/verb choice. Correction: remove 'like' after 'feel' to make the clause 'I feel that it helps'; use 'adds to' rather than 'adds up to' to correctly express contribution. Also remove the extra 'me' after 'helps' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'I feel that' for formal statements and pair 'adds to' with 'personality'.

× Indeed, happy music make me feel more excited because it makes me energetic and I feel happy.

✓ Indeed, happy music makes me feel more excited because it makes me energetic and happy.

The subject 'happy music' is singular, so the verb must be 'makes' not 'make' (subject-verb agreement). Also the phrase 'and I feel happy' is wordy; combining to 'and happy' is more natural. Suggest checking singular/plural forms to match verbs.

× I feel me while listening to the happy music.

✓ I feel like myself while listening to happy music.

Original uses incorrect pronoun 'me' and lacks the idiomatic expression. The correct idiom is 'feel like myself' to mean one's normal self. Also 'the happy music' is overly specific; use 'happy music' generally. Suggest learning common idiomatic verbs with 'feel' such as 'feel like myself'.

× Yes, during my school times, music was compulsory for the students up to class 8 and I took music as my additional subject even up to my 10th class.

✓ Yes, during my school years, music was compulsory for students up to class 8, and I took music as an additional subject up to class 10.

Several issues: 'school times' is incorrect collocation; use 'school years'. 'the students' unnecessary definite article before 'students'—use general 'students'. 'my additional subject' is incorrect article and phrasing; use 'an additional subject'. 'even up to my 10th class' is redundant and awkward; use 'up to class 10'. Also comma needed for clarity. Suggest using standard phrases 'school years' and 'class 10'.

× Yes, I like to listen to music while doing things like studying, completing my homework, cleaning, dancing, bathing and many other things because it helps me concentrate and also makes me more energetic.

✓ Yes, I like to listen to music while doing things like studying, doing my homework, cleaning, dancing, and bathing, because it helps me concentrate and makes me more energetic.

Original is mostly correct but has minor style issues: 'completing my homework' is fine but 'doing my homework' matches parallel -ing forms better; list needs a comma before 'and' (Oxford comma optional) and remove redundant 'and many other things'. Also 'helps me concentrate and also makes me more energetic' repetition of 'me' can be streamlined. Suggest keeping parallel structure in lists and avoiding redundancy.