Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct verb forms and pronouns.

Example: I prefer happy music because it gives me energy and boosts my mood. For example, when I feel stressed after a difficult day, I listen to upbeat pop songs to lift my spirits and regain focus.

Suggestion: Provide a concise direct answer, avoid hesitations and unclear phrases. Use a linking phrase to explain when and why, and give a specific example or effect. Correct word choice and pronunciation issues in content (e.g., “feel frustrated”, “boost my energy”).

Example: Yes. When I feel frustrated or overwhelmed, I usually play lively songs because they quickly boost my energy and help me relax. For instance, listening to upbeat electronic tracks after a stressful meeting helps me feel more positive.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear timeline and use correct grammar (verb tense, singular/plural). Keep it within a few sentences and add a specific detail about what you learned to enrich the response.

Example: Yes, I started music classes when I was six because my primary school required them. In those lessons we learned basic singing techniques and how to play simple instruments like the recorder and hand drums, which helped me enjoy music early on.

Suggestion: Good content and relevance. Improve by making sentences grammatical and concise, use linking words to explain reasons, and add a specific example of the type of music you use and its effect on concentration.

Example: Yes, I usually play soft instrumental or lo-fi music while I study or conduct experiments. As a biology student, I spend long hours in the lab, so calm background music helps me stay focused and makes repetitive tasks less tedious.

× I prefer happy music because it always give me energy and make me feel powerful.

✓ I prefer happy music because it always gives me energy and makes me feel powerful.

Subject 'it' refers to 'happy music' (singular), so verbs need third person singular '-s' form: 'gives' and 'makes'. Use consistent subject-verb agreement.

× After I feel frustrated every time I got a little bit adversity, I will try to listen to the happy music to cheer me myself up.

✓ After I feel frustrated or when I encounter a little adversity, I try to listen to happy music to cheer myself up.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'got' (past) conflicts with present 'feel' and future 'will'. Use present simple for habitual actions: 'I feel... I try'. 'Got a little bit adversity' is ungrammatical: use 'encounter a little adversity' or 'have a little adversity'. 'Cheer me myself up' duplicates pronouns; correct is 'cheer myself up'.

× Yes, of course, I often listen to the happy music after I face a fresh feel frustrated or face a big umm, sit back at that time, listen to the happy music like some pure music will help me to fool with energy.

✓ Yes, of course, I often listen to happy music after I feel frustrated or have a hard day; at that time, listening to uplifting music helps me feel energetic.

Original contains awkward adjective/noun choices ('fresh feel frustrated', 'pure music', 'fool with energy') and sentence structure errors. Use appropriate adjectives: 'frustrated', 'a hard day', and verbs: 'listening... helps me feel energetic'. 'Helps me feel' is correct collocation.

× Yes, since I was only 6 year old in my primary school, the school required all the student have to have music class and in this class we only have two things to do is to listen to how to sing a song and how to play different instruments.

✓ Yes, since I was only six years old in primary school, the school required all the students to take music classes, and in those classes we only did two things: learn how to sing songs and how to play different instruments.

Multiple issues: number and article forms ('6 year old' -> 'six years old'), plural agreement ('student' -> 'students'), incorrect verb pattern 'have to have music class' -> 'required ... to take music classes', and bad clause construction 'we only have two things to do is' -> use past tense 'we only did two things: learn...'. Use correct infinitive and plural nouns.

× So this is my first music class.

✓ So that was my first music class.

Context is past (speaking about first class in primary school). Use past tense 'was' instead of present 'is' to match temporal context.

× Yes, I often listen to music as a background sound when I am doing my experiments or do some study stuff.

✓ Yes, I often listen to music as background sound when I am doing experiments or studying.

Parallel structure: use consistent verb forms ('doing my experiments or studying') rather than mixing 'am doing' with 'do'. 'Study stuff' is informal; use 'studying' or 'study tasks'.

× As a biology student, I have a lot of experiments to do every day and I need to study for a long time.

✓ As a biology student, I have many experiments to do every day and I need to study for long periods of time.

'A lot of' is acceptable but 'many' fits countable 'experiments'. 'Study for a long time' is awkward; 'study for long periods of time' is clearer. Tense is present habitual so keep present simple.

× It's boring to do that alone, so listen to music.

✓ It's boring to do that alone, so I listen to music.

Missing subject in second clause: imperative-like 'listen to music' should be 'I listen to music' to match the sentence subject and maintain correct sentence structure.