Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and supporting detail. To improve, make one edit to increase fluency and correctness: avoid repeating words (e.g., 'uplift my mood and unwind myself' is slightly redundant) and reduce a formal connector ('therefore') to a simpler link. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use a precise phrasal verb.

Example: I prefer happy music because it really affects my mood. When I feel stressed, I usually play cheerful songs to lift my spirits and help me relax.

Suggestion: Good direct answer with an example, but there are grammatical errors and a slight lack of cohesion. Improve by correcting verb forms and using a linking phrase to connect cause and effect. Replace 'make me more concentrate' with 'help me concentrate more' and shorten the response to two sentences.

Example: Yes, it does. For example, when I lack motivation, I put on upbeat songs because they help me concentrate more and give me the energy to complete tasks.

Suggestion: The answer is clear and gives future plans, but there are hesitations (‘uh’), slight awkward phrasing ('in this summer'), and a redundant conjunction. Improve by removing fillers, using correct time expression ('this summer'), and choosing more natural phrases ('improve my technique' and 'read music faster'). Keep it to two sentences.

Example: No, I haven't, but I enjoy playing the piano. This summer I plan to sign up for a piano class to improve my technique and learn to read music more quickly.

Suggestion: Strong and detailed answer with contrast. Improve by fixing small grammar issues and using smoother linking words: use consistent verb forms ('going for a walk', 'doing housework'), replace 'make me be more motivated' with 'make me more motivated', and use 'to concentrate' instead of 'to be more concentrated'. Keep it within three sentences.

Example: Yes. When I do tedious tasks like going for a walk or doing housework, I play energetic songs to feel more motivated and productive. However, I prefer silence when I'm studying so I can concentrate better.

× music does affect my feeling.

✓ music does affect my feelings.

The noun 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' when referring to general emotional states. Use plural to match the general sense: 'my feelings'. Suggestion: Use 'my feelings' when talking about emotions in general.

× Therefore whenever I feel stressed, I will turn on some cheerful songs to uplift my mood and unwind myself.

✓ Therefore, whenever I feel stressed, I turn on some cheerful songs to uplift my mood and unwind.

Using 'will' here is acceptable but simple present ('turn on') is more natural for habitual actions. Also 'unwind myself' is redundant; 'unwind' alone is correct. Suggestion: Use simple present for habits and avoid redundant reflexive pronouns.

× to make me more concentrate and give me the motivation to do those tasks.

✓ to help me concentrate more and give me the motivation to do those tasks.

After 'make' you need an adjective ('concentrated') or use 'help' + base verb. The original 'more concentrate' is incorrect. 'Help me concentrate more' or 'make me more concentrated' are correct. Suggestion: Use 'help me concentrate more' for natural phrasing.

× No, I haven't taken any music classes. However, I do like playing the piano. Therefore, in this summer I am planning to sign up for a piano class to help me improve my techniques as well as, uh, read notes faster.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes. However, I do like playing the piano. This summer I am planning to sign up for a piano class to help me improve my technique as well as read notes faster.

Use 'This summer' rather than 'in this summer'. 'Techniques' is better as uncountable 'technique' when referring to musical skill in general. Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Say 'This summer' and 'improve my technique'.

× Whenever I do some tedious things such as go for a walk or doing housework, I will put on energetic songs to make me be more motivated and productive.

✓ Whenever I do some tedious things such as going for a walk or doing housework, I put on energetic songs to make myself more motivated and productive.

Parallel structure requires both verbs in the same form: use 'going for a walk' to match 'doing housework'. 'Make me be' is unnatural; use 'make myself' or 'make me'. Also change 'I will put on' to simple present 'I put on' for habitual actions. Suggestion: Keep verb forms parallel and use 'myself' for reflexive action.

× However, I prefer silence when I am studying to be more concentrated on my work.

✓ However, I prefer silence when I study so I can concentrate more on my work.

Use simple present 'study' for habitual action. 'To be more concentrated' is awkward; use 'so I can concentrate more' or 'to concentrate better'. Suggestion: Use 'so I can concentrate more' for clarity.