Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar (e.g., 'music' is uncountable). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words.

Example: I usually prefer sad music in my daily routine because its slow tempo helps me relax. For example, when I study or do chores, calm piano pieces help me concentrate and feel more peaceful.

Suggestion: Use a clear topic sentence and avoid hesitation. Use linking words (e.g., 'however', 'for example') appropriately and correct verb forms ('it depends', 'at a party'). Limit to 2–3 sentences with specific examples.

Example: It depends on the situation. For example, at a party upbeat songs make me feel energetic and want to dance; however, when I'm at home they often have little effect on my mood.

Suggestion: Be factual and avoid overstatements (claiming to be a 'professional' if inaccurate). Use correct tense and concise structure: topic sentence, supporting detail (when you started, achievements), and future plan. Reduce fillers like 'uh'.

Example: Yes. I have taken piano lessons since I was five and have performed in several student concerts. In the future I would like to learn the violin to broaden my musical skills.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and give two concise, specific examples linked with words like 'for example' or 'also'. Avoid exaggerated claims ('makes my brain work better')—explain briefly how it helps.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while studying and exercising. For example, calm instrumental music helps me concentrate when I do maths, and upbeat tracks motivate me during gym workouts.

× I prefer listening to sad musics because when they usually have a slow rhythm and whenever I listen to them I can feel more peaceful and do my daily things like easier.

✓ I prefer listening to sad music because it usually has a slow rhythm and whenever I listen to it I feel more peaceful and can do my daily things more easily.

'Music' is an uncountable noun so 'musics' is incorrect; use singular 'music'. Referring back to 'music' uses singular pronouns 'it' not 'they' or 'them'. 'Usually' should modify 'has' so place it before the verb. 'Do my daily things like easier' is incorrect word order and word choice; use 'can do my daily things more easily' where 'easily' is the correct adverb and 'more' forms the comparative.

× Well, it definitely is depends on the situation.

✓ Well, it definitely depends on the situation.

The phrase 'is depends' incorrectly combines the auxiliary 'is' with the main verb 'depends'. 'Depends' already functions as the verb; remove 'is'. Use 'definitely depends' to express certainty.

× For example, definitely when I'm in the party and I'll listen to happy music, I feel more energetic and excited.

✓ For example, when I'm at a party and I listen to happy music, I feel more energetic and excited.

Use 'at a party' not 'in the party'. The original mixes future 'I'll listen' with a general present-tense statement about feelings; for habitual or typical situations use present simple 'I listen' and 'I feel'. Avoid unnecessary 'definitely' duplication.

× So it definitely depends on the situation that I'm on.

✓ So it definitely depends on the situation I'm in.

Use the preposition 'in' with 'situation' rather than 'on'. Also 'that I'm on' is awkward; 'I'm in' is the natural structure. Keep present tense for general truths.

× Yes, of course, I have been to piano class since I was five years.

✓ Yes, of course, I have taken piano lessons since I was five years old.

Use 'have taken' for attending lessons over a period. 'Been to piano class' is possible but less natural. 'Piano lessons' is the common expression and use 'since I was five years old' (include 'old') for the starting age with 'since'. Present perfect suits an action continuing to the present.

× So now I'm a professional piano player and I have taken part in many concerts as a piano player.

✓ So now I'm a professional pianist and I have taken part in many concerts as a pianist.

'Piano player' is understandable but 'pianist' is the correct noun. Keep consistent singular form 'pianist' rather than repeating 'piano player'.

× And uh, I also like to learn violin in a few years.

✓ And I would also like to learn the violin in a few years.

To express a future intention use 'would like to' or 'want to' and include the definite article 'the' with musical instruments: 'learn the violin'. 'In a few years' specifies the future timeframe.

× Yes, actually I listen to music while I am doing maths because whenever I listen to music it makes my brain work better and so the results of my lesson would be better.

✓ Yes, actually I listen to music while I am doing math because whenever I listen to music it makes my brain work better, so my lesson results are better.

Use 'math' or 'mathematics' depending on variety; 'maths' is British but ensure consistency. 'Results of my lesson would be better' mixes conditional 'would' incorrectly; use present 'are better' to state a habitual result. 'Lesson results' is a more natural noun phrase and place comma before 'so'.

× And I also listen to music when I'm going to gym and practicing in it because it makes me feel energetic and excited for practice.

✓ And I also listen to music when I'm going to the gym and practising there because it makes me feel energetic and excited to practise.

Use the article 'the' with 'gym' ('going to the gym'). 'Practicing in it' is awkward; use 'practising there' or 'practising at the gym'. 'For practice' is acceptable but 'to practise' or 'for practice' depending on nuance; maintain consistent spelling (practise/ practicing) by variety. Also use 'energetic and excited' correctly as adjectives describing feelings.