Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar and natural phrasing, and tighten answer to avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Fix verb forms (use 'I prefer' or 'I tend to listen to') and plural agreement.

Example: I prefer sad music because it helps me relax and focus. For example, when I listen to mellow piano or acoustic songs after a busy day, I feel calmer and can think more clearly.

Suggestion: Be more concise and replace hesitations with smooth linking words. Provide a clearer reason and one brief example. Avoid saying 'first'/'second' unless you give two solid points; here one clear point is enough.

Example: Not really. Happy music usually boosts my mood or makes me feel romantic rather than excited; for instance, cheerful pop songs make me smile but don’t create the adrenaline I get from live concerts.

Suggestion: Correct grammar and use a clearer timeline. Use one or two supporting details about what you learned or enjoyed. Replace informal fillers like 'like' and fix tense/number errors.

Example: Yes. Music classes are compulsory in Thailand, so I started learning basic music theory and singing when I was six. I especially enjoyed learning folk songs and playing the recorder.

Suggestion: Improve verb forms and sentence structure. Start with a topic sentence, then add specific details about when and why, using a linking word. Avoid repeating similar ideas.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while commuting to school on the sky train and during breaks because it helps me relax and clear my mind. For example, I usually play soft instrumental tracks to stay calm before classes.

× I rather to listen to sad music because upbeat songs often make me feel overstimulated and sad music is more soothing and help me relax or think clearly.

✓ I would rather listen to sad music because upbeat songs often make me feel overstimulated, and sad music is more soothing and helps me relax or think clearly.

The phrase 'I rather to listen' is incorrect. Use the modal-like expression 'would rather' followed by the base verb without 'to' (would rather listen). Also there is a subject-verb agreement error with 'sad music is... help me' where 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'sad music'. Suggestion: use 'would rather' + base verb and ensure verbs agree with their subjects.

× No, I don't think so because first, it's not a real situation that is happening to me. Umm second, it usually makes me feel happy or romantic more than excited.

✓ No, I don't think so because, first, it's not a real situation that is happening to me. Second, it usually makes me feel happy or romantic rather than excited.

The sentence mostly uses present tense correctly, but wording 'Umm second' is informal and punctuation needed. Also 'more than excited' is awkward — use 'rather than excited' for comparison. Suggestion: remove filler 'Umm', use commas for clarity, and use 'rather than' for clearer comparisons.

× Yes, music class are obligatory in Thai school system so I've always been taking it sin since I was like 6 and I enjoyed it most of the time.

✓ Yes, music classes are obligatory in the Thai school system, so I've been taking them since I was about six, and I enjoyed them most of the time.

Multiple issues: 'music class are' has number mismatch — use plural 'music classes' with 'are'. Also 'Thai school system' needs definite article 'the'. 'I've always been taking it sin' contains tense and pronoun errors: the correct continuous perfect is 'I've been taking them' and 'since' was misspelled as 'sin'. Use 'since I was about six' (avoid 'like' in formal speech). Ensure pronouns match plural 'classes' with 'them'.

× Yes, I always listening to music when I am traveling to school so on a sky train and during the break because it makes me feel relaxed and helps me clear my mind.

✓ Yes, I always listen to music when I am traveling to school, for example on the sky train, and during the break because it makes me feel relaxed and helps me clear my mind.

The phrase 'I always listening' is incorrect because after adverb 'always' you need the base verb with appropriate auxiliary if needed: 'I always listen' or 'I am always listening' depending on meaning. Here habitual action -> 'I always listen'. Also 'so on a sky train' is ungrammatical; use 'for example on the sky train' or 'such as on the sky train'. Suggestion: use 'I always listen' for routines and rephrase the example clearly.