Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy and cohesion. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words to connect ideas. Use correct tense (prefer not preferred), correct verb forms (listening → listening to), and smoother expressions (I don't want to feel depressed). Be specific about what happy music does for you and give one or two concise reasons. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Example: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me focus. For example, upbeat jazz or mellow pop makes me feel motivated and calm, so I listen to it when I need energy or relaxation.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid hesitation fillers (uh, um). Answer directly, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Resolve contradictions (saying happy music both inspires and makes you sad) by clarifying when each happens. Use linking words like however or therefore.

Example: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more energetic and upbeat. However, sometimes upbeat songs can trigger nostalgia and make me slightly sad, so when that happens I choose lively jazz to lift my spirits instead.

Suggestion: Give a clear, structured response: state whether you took formal classes, then briefly explain school experience with specifics. Avoid vague words and hesitations. Use linking words like although or only to contrast school lessons with private lessons.

Example: No, I haven't taken formal music lessons. In primary school we had a basic music subject where we learned singing and simple instruments, but it was general classroom teaching rather than private or professional training.

Suggestion: Organize answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 2–3 specific examples of activities and a time estimate. Correct word choice (hydrogen? → hygiene) and remove repetitions. Use linking words like then, also, and so to connect actions.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while doing my morning routine and housework. I usually play songs from my tablet or speaker while I shower, get dressed, and clean, and I listen for about one to two hours each day because it makes chores more enjoyable.

× I preferred happy music because it's nice to feel delighted when you listening music and I don't want to be.

✓ I prefer happy music because it's nice to feel delighted when you listen to music and I don't want to be depressed.

The student used 'preferred' (past) but is speaking about a general preference, so present simple 'prefer' is correct (Present tense issue also relevant but use Past tense ID 5 per list). 'you listening' is missing the base verb form and preposition 'to'; correct is 'you listen to music'. 'be. Depressed.' fragmented; combine as 'be depressed'. Suggestions: use present simple for general truths, use 'listen to' for verbs requiring 'to', and avoid sentence fragments.

× That's why I'm listening music to feel great.

✓ That's why I listen to music to feel great.

'I'm listening music' is incorrect because 'listening' needs the preposition 'to' and continuous tense implies an action happening now; the intended meaning is habitual, so present simple 'I listen to music' is appropriate. Suggestion: use 'listen to' for the verb 'listen' and choose tense to match habitual actions.

× I like to enjoy my my serenity being tranquility.

✓ I like to enjoy my serenity and tranquility.

The phrase repeats words and uses 'being' incorrectly. 'Serenity' and 'tranquility' are nouns that can be joined with 'and'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and unnecessary gerunds; use clear noun phrases.

× By listening to a happy calm music like playing a jazz, it's make me feel motivated, focus and alive.

✓ By listening to happy, calm music, like jazz, it makes me feel motivated, focused and alive.

Problems: 'a happy calm music' uses an article with an uncountable noun 'music' and adjective order; remove 'a'. 'like playing a jazz' is awkward; 'like jazz' suffices. 'it's make' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; 'it makes' is correct. 'focus' should be adjective 'focused'. Suggestions: remove incorrect articles with uncountable nouns, use correct adjective order, ensure verb agrees with subject, and use adjective forms where needed.

× I. Don't want to spend my time reminiscing using a music.

✓ I don't want to spend my time reminiscing using music.

The sentence has an unnecessary article 'a' before 'music' (music is uncountable) and an awkward period. Also 'reminiscing using music' is awkward but grammatical; better is 'reminiscing while listening to music' if intended. Suggestion: remove 'a' and restructure to 'reminiscing while listening to music' for clarity.

× I feel that happy music gives me a lot of energy when I am listening love or love music.

✓ I feel that happy music gives me a lot of energy when I am listening to love songs or music I love.

'listening love or love music' is ungrammatical. Needs 'listening to' and proper noun phrase 'love songs' or 'music I love'. Suggestion: use 'listening to' plus correct noun phrase.

× Sometimes it inspires me but sometimes it makes me feel sad.

✓ Sometimes it inspires me, but other times it makes me feel sad.

Original is understandable but repetitive; adding 'other times' improves contrast and flow. Suggestion: use connectors to show contrast clearly.

× So what I do is I listen to a happy jazz music, uh that makes me jive whenever I feel sad.

✓ So what I do is listen to happy jazz music that makes me jive whenever I feel sad.

'a happy jazz music' incorrect article with uncountable 'music' and unnecessary 'a'. Also omit filler 'uh' in formal correction. Suggestion: remove articles before uncountable nouns and unnecessary fillers.

× I just uh, uh, avoid listening to a sad music 'cause it will just, uh. It will just.

✓ I just avoid listening to sad music because it will just make me feel worse.

Again 'a sad music' incorrect article. Also incomplete sentence 'It will just.' needs completion; provide likely intended result. Suggestion: remove 'a' and complete the thought; avoid filler 'uh'.

× No, I haven't attended any class or music uh education, but when we started our uh grade school, we already have the music uh subject, but that particularly special ah.

✓ No, I haven't attended any music classes or formal music education, but when we started grade school, we already had a music subject, although it wasn't very specialized.

Tense consistency: 'haven't attended' (present perfect) is fine; 'we already have' should be past 'we already had' because referring to past grade school. 'any class or music uh education' is unidiomatic; use 'music classes or formal music education'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when referring to past events and use natural collocations.

× Plus for individuals, so I consider it as a class classroom learning, not an individual or professional gaining some skills individually.

✓ It was more of a classroom subject for everyone, so I consider it classroom learning rather than individual or professional training.

Original sentence is redundant and wordy with awkward phrases. 'class classroom' repetitive; 'gaining some skills individually' odd. Suggestion: simplify and clarify contrast between classroom subject and professional training.

× I love listening music when I'm doing things first thing in the morning what I do is I just open my tablet and then and also my speaker to play a beautiful songs.

✓ I love listening to music when I'm doing things. First thing in the morning, I just open my tablet and my speaker to play beautiful songs.

Missing 'to' after 'listening'. Run-on sentence; split into two. 'a beautiful songs' wrong article-number agreement; use 'beautiful songs' or 'a beautiful song'. Suggestion: use 'listen to', correct article-noun agreement, and break into shorter sentences.

× Then I do my hydrogen and I want to hear the music while I'm doing my my routine.

✓ Then I do my hygiene and I want to hear music while I'm doing my routine.

'hydrogen' is a wrong word; should be 'hygiene'. 'want to hear the music' better as 'like to hear music' or 'I listen to music'. Duplicate 'my my'. Suggestion: check word choice, remove duplicates, and use natural verbs for routines.

× And also after that I also do my house chores.

✓ After that, I also do my house chores.

Redundant 'And also' at start; remove and place comma for clarity. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary conjunctions.

× It makes me feel. Inspired me to do things.

✓ It makes me feel inspired to do things.

Fragmented punctuation and verb form 'Inspired me' incorrect; combine into 'feel inspired'. Suggestion: use correct adjective 'inspired' after 'feel' and avoid fragments.

× Usually I listen for about one to two hours of my day.

✓ Usually I listen for about one to two hours a day.

'one to two hours of my day' is wordy; idiomatic 'one to two hours a day'. Suggestion: use standard time expressions.