Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler sounds (MMM) and incomplete sentences. Correct verb forms (e.g., 'brings' → 'bring', 'If I were' unnecessary).

Example: It depends on my mood: when I'm sad, I prefer happy music because it lifts my energy and motivates me; however, when I'm very happy, I sometimes choose slower, sadder songs to relax and calm down.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use clear linking words. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Begin with a direct response (Yes/No), then support with a specific reason or example. Use correct subject-verb agreement and smoother phrasing.

Example: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because upbeat rhythms and strong beats stimulate my energy; for example, at rock concerts the lively tempo and crowd atmosphere always pump me up.

Suggestion: Give a clear, chronological answer with correct tense and specific details. Correct vocabulary (what are 'worker classes'?). Use linking words to explain why you attended and what you learned. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I took piano lessons for about three years when I was in high school. I was free after school and my parents encouraged me to try music, so I signed up to learn basic technique and simple pieces.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer (Yes/No) then explain briefly with specific examples. Fix contradictions and clarify your typical behaviour. Avoid trailing off and complete your sentences. Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to show contrast or reason.

Example: Not usually. I prefer to focus on one task because music distracts me: I tend to analyze the production and lyrics, so I find it hard to concentrate on work; however, I sometimes listen to instrumental music while doing household chores.

× If I am sad at that time, I may prefer happy music because it can brings me some energy and passion.

✓ If I am sad at that time, I may prefer happy music because it can bring me some energy and passion.

'Can' is a modal verb and must be followed by the base form of the verb, not a third-person singular form. 'Brings' is incorrect after 'can'; use 'bring'. Suggestion: after modal verbs (can, could, will, may) always use the base verb form.'

× If I were.

✓ (Remove fragment) If I were, ... would I do something? Or complete the sentence: If I were sad, I would listen to happy music.

The phrase 'If I were.' is a sentence fragment and lacks a main clause. Conditional 'If I were' requires completion (result clause) such as 'I would ...'. Suggestion: complete conditional sentences with both clauses.'

× If I am happy, maybe I need some sad music to come down to chill me.

✓ If I am happy, maybe I need some sad music to calm me down.

The verb phrase 'come down to chill me' is unnatural and misorders adverbial particles. 'Calm me down' is the correct phrasal verb meaning 'to relax'. Also 'need' is okay but 'may need' could be better for modality. Suggestion: use established phrasal verbs in correct order: 'calm me down'.'

× MMM, maybe sometimes happy music is always cheerful and don't, don't, don't you know that you know rock?

✓ Maybe sometimes happy music is always cheerful, and rock music, you know, doesn't it?

Original is unclear and has pronoun/auxiliary errors. 'Don't, don't, don't you know that you know rock?' is ungrammatical. If intended meaning is 'you know rock?', a clearer form is 'and rock music, you know, is often energetic.' Also 'don't' doesn't match singular 'rock music'. Suggestion: use clear subjects and matching auxiliaries: 'rock music doesn't...' or rephrase to 'and rock music is often energetic.'

× Yes, that is is that really cheers me up. Feel more excited.

✓ Yes, that really cheers me up and makes me feel more excited.

'That is is that really cheers me up.' contains repetition and wrong structure; 'cheers me up' needs a subject and connecting conjunction to 'feel more excited.' 'Feel more excited' is a sentence fragment; combine into a full clause. Suggestion: join clauses with 'and' and include proper verbs.'

× Like I guess you can see in the concerts the rhythm always is happy and exciting.

✓ I guess you can see at concerts the rhythm is always happy and exciting.

Word order: 'in the concerts' is unnatural; use 'at concerts'. 'The rhythm always is' is acceptable but 'is always' is more natural word order. Suggestion: place adverbs like 'always' after auxiliary or before main verb: 'is always'.'

× Yeah, I have taken the piano classes and worker classes.

✓ Yes, I took piano classes and choir (or music theory/working?) classes.

'The piano classes' is odd—use 'piano classes' without 'the' for general experience. 'Worker classes' is unclear; likely mispronunciation ('vocal' or 'theory'?) If intended 'vocal' or 'workshop' clarify. Also tense 'have taken' vs 'took' depends; simple past is better with time reference. Suggestion: use correct noun and drop 'the' for plural activities, and use simple past when specifying past time.'

× It's about 3 years ago when I was in high school and I don't I didn't have anything to do and I was free at that time.

✓ It was about three years ago when I was in high school; I didn't have anything to do and I was free then.

'It's about 3 years ago' mixes present 'it's' with past time; use past 'It was about three years ago.' Remove extra 'I don't'. Use 'then' for time reference. Suggestion: keep past narrative consistent.'

× So my parents led me to get some study of music, so I just went.

✓ So my parents encouraged me to take some music lessons, so I just went.

'Led me to get some study of music' is unnatural. 'Encouraged me to take music lessons' or 'enrolled me in music lessons' is clearer. Also 'get some study' mistakes verb forms. Suggestion: use collocations 'take lessons' or 'study music.'

× Actually, I just want focus on just one thing, because when listening to the music, maybe I can focus and concentrate on other stuff.

✓ Actually, I want to focus on just one thing, because when I listen to music, it may distract me from other stuff.

Tense and structure: 'I just want focus' missing 'to' after 'want'. 'When listening to the music' should be 'when I listen to music.' The meaning seemed contradictory: clarify that music distracts you. Suggestion: use 'want to focus' and 'when I listen to music' with consistent subject.'

× It may distract me because I like the music very much.

✓ It may distract me because I like music very much.

'The music' implies specific music; general preference uses 'music' without 'the'. Suggestion: drop 'the' for general statements.'

× I just want to analyze the music, like the production, the lyrics and.

✓ I just want to analyze the music, like the production and the lyrics.

Sentence ends with 'and.' It's a sentence fragment; complete the list or remove trailing 'and.' Suggestion: finish the list or end the sentence properly.'