Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition (e.g., “uh”, “I mostly prefer” repeated). Also correct small grammar errors (e.g., “it depends on the situation”).

Example: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and energizes me. For example, I listen to upbeat pop when I exercise or need to concentrate, but I sometimes choose sad songs when I want to reflect or relax.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer then a brief, specific reason. Reduce repetition and fix verb forms (e.g., “it lifts my mood”). Use one linking word like “because” to connect cause and effect.

Example: Yes, it does because upbeat rhythms and fast tempos increase my energy. For instance, when I play lively songs while exercising, I feel more motivated and my mood improves.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence about past experience and one specific detail (which classes, how long, what you learned). Avoid trailing off and repetition. Use past or present perfect consistently (e.g., "I have taken music classes since childhood").

Example: Yes. I have taken music classes since childhood, including weekly singing lessons and basic piano at school. Those classes helped me learn rhythm and improve my vocal control.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then give specific examples of activities and why you do it. Remove filler words and correct verb forms (e.g., “I like to listen”, “when I do chores”). Use linking words like “for example” or “such as”.

Example: Yes, I usually listen to music while doing household chores. For example, I play music on a speaker when I clean, cook, or wash clothes because it makes the tasks more enjoyable and helps me keep a steady pace.

× 'So I, well, I mostly prefer happy songs even though sometimes I also listen to the sad music when I'm in the sad mood.'

✓ 'So I mostly prefer happy songs, although sometimes I also listen to sad music when I'm in a sad mood.'

'Singular and plural issue: "the sad music" is incorrect because "music" is uncountable and does not require "the" here; also "in the sad mood" should be "in a sad mood" to indicate a general state. Use "sad music" (no article) and "a sad mood".'

× 'Uh, it's depend upon the situations.'

✓ 'Uh, it depends on the situation.'

'Present tense issue: The verb should be in third person singular present "depends" to agree with subject "it". Also "depend upon the situations" is awkward; use "depends on the situation" for idiomatic phrasing.'

× 'Well, yes, when I'm, when I listen to the happy music or some upbeat music in a uh, it, it makes me fall more energetic and more excited.'

✓ 'Well, yes, when I listen to happy or upbeat music, it makes me feel more energetic and more excited.'

'Third person singular issue and word choice: Use "it makes" (third person singular) and the correct verb phrase "feel more energetic" instead of "fall more energetic." Also drop unnecessary articles: "happy music" rather than "the happy music."

× 'So it, it lift my lift my mood and make me make me more happy.'

✓ 'So it lifts my mood and makes me happier.'

'Present tense issue: Subject-verb agreement requires third person singular verbs "lifts" and "makes." Also use comparative adjective "happier" rather than "more happy," and remove repeated phrases.'

× 'Well, yes, from my childhood onwards, I I regularly went to the music classes and my, and in my school also there are music classes, so I also went there too.'

✓ 'Well, yes, from my childhood onwards, I regularly went to music classes, and at my school there were music classes, so I went there too.'

'Past tense issue: Keep past tense consistent with "went." Use "music classes" without the article and say "at my school there were" for correct word order. Remove redundant words. '

× 'And I love music classes because it's a it's a.'

✓ 'And I love music classes because they are fun.'

'Article errors and sentence structure: The original is incomplete and uses awkward "it's a it's a." Replace with a complete noun phrase; "music classes" is plural so use "they are" rather than "it's." Provide a clear adjective like "fun."'

× 'Well, I'm the person who always like listen to music in my home.'

✓ 'Well, I'm the kind of person who always likes to listen to music at home.'

'Sentence structure errors: Use the idiomatic phrase "the kind of person who" and ensure subject-verb agreement "likes." Use "listen to" and preposition "at home."'

× 'When I whenever I doing some other works or cleaning my room or my home or washing clothes, I always try to listen to music.'

✓ 'Whenever I do other tasks, like cleaning my room or washing clothes, I always try to listen to music.'

'Present tense issue: Use simple present "do" for habitual actions rather than "doing." "Other works" is unidiomatic; use "other tasks." Reorder phrases for clarity.'

× 'I put songs in my speaker and I and I enjoy.'

✓ 'I put songs on my speaker and I enjoy them.'

'Sentence structure errors: Use preposition "on" with "speaker," remove repeated "I," and include the object "them" for clarity. '