Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid fillers (uh, umm). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct basic grammar (e.g., "happy songs" not "happy S songs", "sad music" not "sad musics").

Example: I prefer different kinds of music depending on my mood. For example, when I'm relaxed I enjoy upbeat pop songs because they lift my energy, but if I'm feeling down I listen to mellow acoustic tracks because they help me reflect and calm down.

Suggestion: Reduce repetition and fillers, and use linking words to explain why. Replace vague phrases with concrete descriptions (e.g., "the rhythm" or "catchy chorus").

Example: Yes, it does. When I listen to upbeat songs, the strong rhythm and catchy chorus make me want to move, and the positive lyrics usually boost my mood and energy.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first and then add one specific example. Avoid vague phrases like "or something like that"; use past tense correctly and link ideas with words like "however" or "but".

Example: No, I have never taken formal music lessons. However, I often joined school singing competitions and talent shows, for example I performed a solo song in my final year which helped me gain confidence.

Suggestion: Be specific about the type of music and explain how it helps using linking words. Remove fillers and redundant phrases, and keep to two to three clear sentences.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while studying, especially instrumental or lo-fi tracks. This type of music helps me concentrate and creates a relaxed atmosphere, which makes doing math homework less stressful.

× If I'm uh, happy and chilled, I usually love listening happy songs uh over said songs.

✓ If I'm, uh, happy and chilled, I usually love listening to happy songs rather than sad songs.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'listening' and incorrect word 'said' instead of 'sad'. Also use 'rather than' to contrast. Suggestion: learn verbs that require specific prepositions (listen to) and check homophones (said vs sad).

× But when I'm uh, my mood is off or something like that, I mostly prefer umm sad musics because it just.

✓ But when my mood is off or something like that, I mostly prefer sad music because it helps me feel better.

'Musics' is incorrect; 'music' is an uncountable noun, so do not pluralize it. The sentence was also incomplete; provide a complete clause. Suggestion: treat 'music' as uncountable and complete thoughts with a main verb and object.

× Yes, it does uh, whenever I listen to happy music, whenever I listen happy S songs, I start uh feeling the beats and the lyrics which are used in it and I start enjoying it a lot yeah.

✓ Yes, it does. Whenever I listen to happy songs, I start feeling the beat and the lyrics used in them, and I enjoy it a lot.

Need 'to' after 'listen'. 'Listen happy S songs' is incorrect; use 'listen to happy songs'. 'Beats' is fine but 'the beat' or 'the beats' should match; simplified to 'beat'. 'Which are used in it' is awkward; use 'used in them'. Also remove redundant 'start' and fix punctuation. Suggestion: remember 'listen to' and ensure pronoun agreement (songs -> them).

× No, I have never, uh, taken any music classes, but whenever they used to, uh, be any competition at my school or any participation or something like that, I used to make sure that I go and participate for it.

✓ No, I have never taken any music classes, but whenever there was a competition at my school, I made sure I went and participated.

Mixed tenses and awkward phrasing: 'they used to be any competition' is incorrect; use 'there was a competition'. 'Used to make sure that I go' mixes past habitual with present infinitive; use past 'made sure I went'. Suggestion: use 'there' for existence (there was) and keep consistent past tense for past habits ('used to' or simple past).

× Yes, I do. Half of my work is incomplete without music. Whenever I do any homework, school homework, especially math, I make sure I listen to music because I get a very relaxed UH environment while listening to.

✓ Yes, I do. Half of my work feels incomplete without music. Whenever I do any homework, especially math, I make sure I listen to music because it creates a very relaxed environment for me.

'I get a very relaxed environment while listening to' is awkward and missing preposition 'for me' or verb 'creates'. Also 'school homework' is redundant; 'homework' is enough. Suggestion: use 'creates a ... environment for me' or 'I feel relaxed while listening' and avoid redundant words.