Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your answer more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples of genres and when you choose them. Reduce hesitation and repetitive phrases. Use linking words (for example, but, depending on) to make it coherent.

Example: I don’t prefer one type over another; it depends on my mood. For example, I listen to sad ballads when I’m reflective, upbeat pop when I want energy, and mellow acoustic when I’m relaxing. So my choice varies with how I feel.

Suggestion: Be specific and avoid repetition and fillers. Give one clear reason and a concise example, with smooth linking. Keep to 2–4 sentences and finish the thought clearly.

Example: Yes, it definitely does — happy music boosts my energy and mood. For instance, when I hear “You Belong With Me” by Taylor Swift I usually start dancing and feel instantly happier, so it helps me relax and have fun.

Suggestion: Keep the structure: direct answer, brief reason, and a clear plan. Remove redundant phrases and combine related ideas with linking words like however or because to sound natural.

Example: No, I haven’t taken formal music classes. I own a guitar but I didn’t have time because of my studies; however, I plan to enroll in guitar lessons when I start university next year.

Suggestion: Answer directly then support with a concise reason and one specific example. Avoid vague words and minor grammar errors (e.g., 'a joyful music' → 'joyful music'). Use linking words like 'especially' or 'for example'.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks, especially chores, because it boosts my energy. For example, upbeat pop songs make washing dishes or cleaning much more enjoyable.

× I listen to all genres of music and all type of music.

✓ I listen to all genres of music and all types of music.

The noun 'type' is countable here and refers to multiple kinds, so it needs the plural form 'types'. Use the plural after 'all' when referring to multiple items: 'all types of music'.

× But uh from sad to happy to a funky to horror to lovely.

✓ But, from sad and happy to funky, horror and lovely songs.

The original is a fragment and lists adjectives without clear structure. Rephrase into a parallel list of noun phrases and use conjunctions and commas correctly. Ensure parallelism: 'from A to B, and C and D' or 'from A and B to C and D'.

× I listen to all type of music and it depends on my mood completely.

✓ I listen to all types of music, and it completely depends on my mood.

Again 'type' should be plural 'types' after 'all'. Also word order is improved by placing adverb 'completely' before the verb 'depends' for natural English: 'it completely depends on my mood'.

× Yes, it definitely does it.

✓ Yes, it definitely does.

The extra pronoun 'it' is redundant and ungrammatical. 'Does' already stands for 'make me feel more excited', so remove the final 'it'.

× Whenever, for example, when I listen to You Belong with Me by Taylor Swift, for example, I always get up from wherever I'm sitting and I just start dancing and I always get so happy and like get.

✓ For example, whenever I listen to 'You Belong With Me' by Taylor Swift, I always get up from wherever I'm sitting, start dancing, and feel very happy.

The sentence is wordy and contains redundant phrases ('for example' and 'whenever' used together) and an unfinished clause ('and like get'). Combine clauses, remove redundancy, use parallel verbs ('get up', 'start dancing', 'feel very happy'), and finish the thought clearly.

× Unfortunately, no, I do have a guitar but I never really got the chance to play it or to learn how to play it because I was always so engaged in studies.

✓ Unfortunately, no. I do have a guitar, but I never really got the chance to play it or learn how to play it because I was always so engaged in my studies.

Main issues: punctuation and article use. Add a period to separate answers, remove the second 'to' for parallel infinitives ('to play' or 'learn'), and add possessive 'my studies' for natural phrasing. The past tense 'got' fits the meaning.

× So I really hope that I have a chance in future since I'm going to university soon, so I will try to take music classes then.

✓ So I really hope that I will have a chance in the future, since I'm going to university soon, and I will try to take music classes then.

Use future tense 'will have' for a future hope and include the article 'the' in 'in the future'. Avoid repeating 'so'; use 'and' for cohesion. Maintain consistent future-time expressions.

× Absolutely, I always listen to music while doing other things, especially when I'm doing some chores because listening to music gives me a boost of energy and I actually enjoy what I'm doing when I'm listening to a joyful music.

✓ Absolutely. I always listen to music while doing other things, especially when I'm doing chores, because music gives me a boost of energy and I actually enjoy what I'm doing when I'm listening to joyful music.

Split run-on sentence into clearer parts. Remove unnecessary 'some' before 'chores'. 'A joyful music' is incorrect: 'music' is uncountable so use 'joyful music' without an article. Also avoid repeating phrases; simplify 'listening to music gives me' to 'music gives me'.