Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fragments and repetition.

Example: I prefer happy music because it boosts my energy and motivation. For example, when I listen to upbeat songs while commuting, I feel more positive and focused, which helps me start the day well.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and correct grammar. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) to explain why and give one concrete example. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, happy music makes me feel more energetic because its fast tempo and cheerful lyrics boost my mood. For example, when I play lively tracks on my phone during my commute, I feel more motivated and awake.

Suggestion: Clarify tense and details, avoid fillers and incorrect words. Give a clear time reference and two specific things you learned. Keep sentences complete and natural.

Example: Yes. I took a violin lesson when I was eleven. During that course I learned how to hold the instrument and use the bow correctly, and I also studied a bit about the violin’s history.

Suggestion: Remove hesitations and improve grammar (subject-verb agreement and word choice). Use linking words to connect activities and reasons; give one clear specific example of a song or playlist.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while commuting and running because pop songs have catchy, uplifting lyrics that make me feel energetic. For instance, I usually play an upbeat playlist with dance-pop and beatbox tracks every morning to wake up and stay motivated.

× I prefer happy music because it keeps my energy and motivation up.

✓ I prefer happy music because it keeps my energy and motivation up.

No grammatical change needed; sentence correctly uses present simple to express a general preference and effect.

× For example, listen to upbeat songs while commuting helps me stay positive.

✓ For example, listening to upbeat songs while commuting helps me stay positive.

Gerund required after 'For example,' to function as the subject of the clause. 'Listen to' (base form) is incorrect here; use 'listening' to show the action that helps you stay positive.

× Positive and focus.

✓ It makes me feel positive and focused.

Original is a fragment lacking a verb and has incorrect adjective form 'focus'. Use a full clause with a verb 'makes' and the correct adjective 'focused' to describe the state.

× Yes, uh choose phone music make me feel more energetic.

✓ Yes, choosing upbeat music on my phone makes me feel more energetic.

Subject must be a gerund phrase 'choosing...music' not 'choose phone music'. Also third person singular requires 'makes' not 'make'. Added 'upbeat' and 'on my phone' for clarity.

× Uh, it's a bit lyrics and fast tempo can improve my mood.

✓ Its upbeat lyrics and fast tempo can improve my mood.

Original mixes clauses incorrectly and misuses 'it's a bit'. Use a noun phrase 'its upbeat lyrics and fast tempo' as the subject; 'its' (possessive) refers to the music/song. Remove 'a bit' or reposition it if needed.

× For example, I usually listening lively tracks while commuting, it's help me more energetic and motivation.

✓ For example, I usually listen to lively tracks while commuting; it helps me feel more energetic and motivated.

Use base verb 'listen' after 'usually' (present simple). Separate clauses with semicolon or period. Use third person singular 'helps'. 'More energetic and motivated' uses adjectives to describe feelings.

× I took a violin lesson, uh, last summer when I was 11 and I learned, I learnt how to hold the instruments and bow robbery, uh, and I uh, learner a little knowledge about the violin history.

✓ I took violin lessons last summer when I was 11, and I learned how to hold the instrument and the bow, and I also learned a little about the history of the violin.

Correct past tense 'learned' used consistently. Use plural 'lessons' if multiple sessions. 'Instruments' should be singular 'instrument' when referring to the violin; 'bow robbery' is incorrect — 'the bow' is intended. 'Learner' is wrong form; use 'learned' and phrase 'a little about the history of the violin'.

× Of course, uh, I usually uh, listen to music while commuting and running and I refer pop music because of it's catchy and uplifting lyrics.

✓ Of course, I usually listen to music while commuting and running, and I prefer pop music because its lyrics are catchy and uplifting.

Use 'prefer' (not 'refer'). Remove extra filler 'uh'. Use possessive 'its' (no apostrophe) for 'lyrics', and 'are' to agree with plural 'lyrics'.

× It's make me feel more energetic.

✓ It makes me feel more energetic.

Third person singular requires 'makes' not 'make'. 'It' as subject demands singular verb form.

× So umm. For instance, I usually listen to a beatbox song in the morning to start.

✓ For instance, I usually listen to beatbox songs in the morning to start my day.

Fragment 'So umm.' removed for clarity. Use plural 'beatbox songs' or 'a beatbox song' depending on meaning; plural fits habitual action. Added 'my day' to complete the idea and improve naturalness.