Music— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I prefer sad music.”), then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct word choice: say “interested in” not “interesting to,” and use simpler phrasing like “black metal” rather than “black metal sheet music.”

Example: I prefer sad music, especially black metal. This is because many black metal bands write lyrics about dark or depressing themes, and I find that sound and atmosphere match my emotions when I want to reflect or think deeply.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first (Yes/No/It depends), then explain with clear reasons and examples. Avoid contradictory phrasing. Use linking words like “however” or “but” to contrast feelings. Correct grammar: use “doesn’t change my mood” instead of “cannot change my mood.”

Example: It depends — happy music sometimes makes me feel more energetic, but not always. For example, if I’m already in a good mood, upbeat songs make me more excited; however, when I’m really sad, happy music usually doesn’t lift my mood.

Suggestion: Answer directly (No, I haven’t) then give specific details about informal learning. Use correct tense (“I have never taken”) and avoid repetition. Explain what “learned from the scene” means with an example (e.g., attending gigs, watching tutorials).

Example: No, I have never taken formal music classes, but I learned a lot informally. For instance, I attended local gigs, watched tutorials online, and practiced songs with musicians I admire, which helped me improve my playing and understanding of the genre.

Suggestion: Directly answer the question (Yes/No) and keep to the topic of listening while doing other tasks. Avoid long, unfocused sentences. If you also want to mention playing an instrument, link it clearly (e.g., “I sometimes listen while I practice ukulele”). Correct phrasing: “die-hard fan,” “ukulele,” and remove unclear phrases.

Example: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, I usually play and practice my ukulele while listening to tracks from bands I like, and I also listen to music when I study or clean to stay focused.

× I am a person who very interesting to the black metal sheet music.

✓ I am a person who is very interested in black metal sheet music.

The adjective 'interesting' describes something that causes interest; the correct form to describe the person's feeling is the past participle 'interested' used as an adjective. Also the verb 'is' is required for the relative clause and the preposition 'in' is used with 'interested'. Suggestion: Use 'interested in' to express personal interest and include the linking verb 'is' in the relative clause.

× I think that most of the black metal musicians arrange their lyrics with and inspire with the depressed moments.

✓ I think that most black metal musicians arrange their lyrics and draw inspiration from depressed moments.

The phrase 'inspire with' is incorrect here; musicians do not 'inspire with' moments, they 'draw inspiration from' them. Also 'arrange their lyrics with' is awkward; better to say 'arrange their lyrics' or 'write lyrics about'. Suggestion: Use 'draw inspiration from' to indicate the source of inspiration and simplify 'most of the black metal musicians' to 'most black metal musicians'.

× So I think that I prefer to like sad music.

✓ So I think that I prefer sad music.

The phrase 'prefer to like' is redundant and ungrammatical; 'prefer' should be followed directly by the noun or gerund (prefer sad music / prefer listening to sad music). Suggestion: Use 'prefer sad music' or 'prefer listening to sad music' to convey preference correctly.

× If I listen to the happy music, I think that I need the moment that I'm very happy as well.

✓ If I listen to happy music, I think I need to be in a very happy moment as well.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'happy music' in a general statement. 'Need the moment that I'm very happy' is unidiomatic; use 'need to be in a very happy moment' or 'need to feel very happy'. Suggestion: Omit 'the' for general categories and rephrase to 'need to be in a very happy moment' or 'need to feel very happy'.

× But actually when I'm very sad, I think the happy music can, cannot change my mood, can change my situations.

✓ But actually when I'm very sad, I think happy music cannot change my mood or my situation.

The original contains contradictory modals 'can, cannot' and awkward plural 'situations'. Use a single modal 'cannot' for the intended meaning and singular 'situation' or 'mood'. Suggestion: Decide on one modal and keep nouns consistent ('mood' or 'situation').

× Until now, I never taken the music class, but actually I learned music from the scene because I think that the Shin, the music, the scene of music is very exclusive.

✓ Until now, I have never taken a music class, but I actually learned music from the scene because I think the music scene is very exclusive.

Use present perfect 'have never taken' for experience up to now. 'Taken' needs auxiliary 'have'. 'The music class' should be 'a music class' for a non-specific class. 'The Shin, the music, the scene of music' is redundant and ungrammatical; 'music scene' is correct. Suggestion: Use present perfect for life experiences and simplify redundant phrases.

× So I can learn the music with the musicians that I really like. I comprehend the musicians that I really like.

✓ So I can learn music from the musicians I really like. I understand the musicians I really like.

'Comprehend' is too formal and unnatural here; 'understand' is the correct verb. 'Learn the music' is awkward; 'learn music' or 'learn from musicians' is better. The relative clause 'that I really like' can be shortened to 'I really like'. Suggestion: Use 'learn music from' and 'understand' for natural phrasing.

× Even though I am a die hard of the scene of music until today, but I can play the instrument or specific instrument, but actually I can play a an ukulele, one of the little guider that I think that is just the.

✓ Although I have been a die-hard fan of the music scene until now, I cannot play most instruments; however, I can play a ukulele, a small instrument that I think is enough for me.

Using 'Even though' and 'but' together is redundant; choose one conjunction ('Although' or 'Even though' without 'but'). 'Die hard of the scene of music' is unnatural; use 'die-hard fan of the music scene'. The sentence lacked clarity about ability to play instruments; I clarified to 'cannot play most instruments' based on context. 'a an ukulele' has article error and 'little guider' is incorrect; likely meant 'small instrument'. Suggestion: Do not use contrasting conjunctions twice; use correct idioms ('die-hard fan') and correct articles ('a ukulele').