Teachers— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, avoid fillers (umm, like, he he), and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because) to explain why you prefer this teacher. Keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes. My favorite teacher is a private tutor who posts lecture videos on YouTube because his explanations are very clear and detailed. For example, he uses diagrams and real-life examples to make difficult topics easy to understand, which I find more helpful than my school lessons.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (however, because, for example). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like 'measure the education'. Use precise vocabulary such as 'study education policy' or 'work on education reform'.

Example: No, I don't want to be a classroom teacher. However, I would like to study education policy at university because I'm interested in how to improve teaching methods and reform the education system.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence naming the teacher and why they are memorable. Reduce fillers and explain one specific memory or action (for example, sending a letter) using linking words (because, so).

Example: Yes. My elementary school teacher is very memorable because she encouraged me when I struggled with reading. Because of her support, I recently wrote and sent her a thank-you letter to show my appreciation.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then give a specific example and timeframe using clear language. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases ('I was such a basket'). Use linking words (for example, last year) to structure your answer.

Example: Yes, I am. For example, about a year ago I sent a message to my primary school teacher to thank her for supporting me when I struggled as a student. I wanted to express my appreciation because her encouragement made a big difference.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence describing the help, then give one specific example of what they did and the result. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and avoid repetitive words and fillers.

Example: My tutor helped me by always talking things through calmly instead of judging me. For example, when I made mistakes he would explain them patiently and offer advice, so I felt more confident and less anxious about learning.

Suggestion: Start with a clear direct answer, then give one specific reason and an example. Replace vague phrases ('not the best teacher for me') with concrete reasons (teaching style, support). Limit to two or three sentences and use linking words (because, whereas).

Example: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were very supportive and patient. For instance, my primary teachers spent time helping me personally, whereas my high school teachers focused more on exams than individual guidance.

× Yes, I have a private teacher umm umm, and here is our kind of YouTube, but he usually posts like some lecture video and actually he he he he teaching so well.

✓ Yes, I have a private teacher who has a YouTube channel; he usually posts lecture videos and teaches very well.

The original sentence uses 'our kind of YouTube' and repeated fillers and incorrect pronoun/reference. Replace vague phrase with 'who has a YouTube channel' and correct verb forms: 'posts lecture videos' (plural) and 'teaches' for third person singular. Remove fillers and repetitions for clarity.

× I think umm, his teaching skill is better than like my school, my like real school teacher.

✓ I think his teaching skills are better than my regular school teacher's.

Use plural 'skills' to match meaning and possessive form 'teacher's'. 'Regular' is a clearer adjective than 'real', and 'are' agrees with plural 'skills'.

× So yeah, he's.

✓ So yeah, he is.

The fragment 'he's.' is incomplete and ambiguous; expand to 'he is' and ideally complete the thought (e.g., 'he is very helpful') to avoid a sentence fragment.

× No, I don't want to be a teacher, but I think I want to measure the education in the university in the future because I'm so interested about the how can I build the like education and how.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher, but I think I want to study education at university in the future because I'm very interested in how to build education systems.

'Measure the education' is incorrect; 'study education' fits. Use 'at university' and 'interested in' (correct preposition). Change 'how can I build the like education and how' to 'how to build education systems' for correct infinitive structure and clarity.

× And I also like want to rebuild the education system, but I don't want to be a teacher.

✓ I also want to rebuild the education system, but I still don't want to be a teacher.

Remove awkward 'like want' and reorder for natural English. 'I also want' is sufficient and 'still' clarifies contrast.

× Yes, I do umm, I have like such a memorable teacher, umm, and from there umm, they are my umm elementary teacher and are actually sending some like letter for them because I just uh, umm, you know, notice the like how important important.

✓ Yes, I do. I had a very memorable elementary teacher, and I am actually sending a letter to them because I realize how important they were.

Replace tense to past 'had' for past teacher, use 'elementary teacher' singular, correct preposition 'sending a letter to them', and simplify filled phrases. Remove repetition and use 'realize' for clarity.

× Yes, I yes, I am I as I mentioned, I sometimes sorry, maybe like one years ago. I send it the some message for the my primary school teacher and at about like I want to like approach appreciate for them because I've never elementary school. I was such a basket, but student, so I want to make sure that appreciation.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned, I am still in touch. About a year ago I sent a message to my primary school teacher to express my appreciation because I had a difficult time in elementary school and I want to show my gratitude.

Fix tense and number: 'one years' → 'about a year'. Use correct verb forms 'sent' and prepositions 'sent a message to'. Replace unclear phrases 'I've never elementary school. I was such a basket, but student' with 'I had a difficult time in elementary school' for meaning. Use 'express my appreciation' rather than awkward 'approach appreciate'.

× Well, they basically do like try to dialogue with me and they don't, you know, they don't judge without talking with me.

✓ Well, they try to talk with me and they don't judge me without talking to me.

'Do like try' is colloquial filler; simplify to 'try to talk' or 'try to talk with me'. Use 'judge me' (object) and 'talking to me' for correct preposition.

× So they they they every time try to talk and calm down with me and that this like these are these, their attitude makes me like more comfortable.

✓ They always try to talk and calm me down, and their attitude makes me feel more comfortable.

Remove repetitions, use 'always' for frequency, 'calm me down' is correct verb + object, and 'make me feel more comfortable' is the proper expression.

× Umm definitely yes, because my high school teacher is not I think they are not the best teacher for me, but in my primary school teacher they were such like good person I've ever like met in my life and I want to be like like them.

✓ Definitely yes. I don't think my high school teachers were the best for me, but my primary school teachers were some of the best people I have ever met, and I want to be like them.

Correct subject-verb agreement and plurality: 'teachers' plural with 'were'. Remove awkward phrasing 'is not I think they are not'. Use 'some of the best people I have ever met' for natural English and remove repeated 'like'.