Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 用词和语法需要改正和简化，同时句子要更自然、精炼。注意单词拼写（tightly → tidy）、主谓一致（will brings → will bring），避免过长的复合句，用一到两句清楚表达观点并加一两个具体细节。可练习使用连接词如 because / so / which makes。

Example: Yes, I like to keep things tidy, especially in my bedroom, because a neat space gives me more energy and motivation. For example, when my room is organized I can focus better and feel happier throughout the day.

Suggestion: 句子结构和时态需要改进，避免口头填充词（uh, umm），用正确的过去时表达习惯（was influenced → was influenced by / I was influenced by my mother）。使用连贯逻辑，给出一两个具体例子（例如被要求整理玩具）。保持一句主句加一两句细节，避免断句。

Example: Yes, I was influenced by my mother, who always liked a tidy home. For example, she often asked me to put my toys back in their boxes and to make my bed every morning.

Suggestion: 表达要更简洁准确，注意时态和频率副词（on weekdays, at weekends / every week）。避免重复（more more）。可以说明具体做法（整理文件、扔垃圾、擦桌子）并用连接词解释原因。

Example: I find it hard to keep my desk tidy on weekdays, so I clean and organize it every weekend. For example, I sort my papers, throw away rubbish and wipe the desk to keep my study space comfortable.

Suggestion: 需要更清晰、有条理地陈述原因，减少填充词并完成句子。使用具体结果说明必要性（更健康、更高效、更有礼貌）。避免重复词（strange strange）和口语拖沓，保持一到两句有力的论证。

Example: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it is a basic habit that affects health and comfort. If you don’t clean up, dirt and food scraps can attract insects and cause bad smells, which is unpleasant for you and others.

× Of course, I like to keep things tightly, especially in my bedroom because I think having a tidy environment will brings you more energy and motivation to do things and you will feel happy every day.

✓ Of course, I like to keep things tidy, especially in my bedroom, because I think having a tidy environment will bring you more energy and motivation to do things and you will feel happy every day.

错误类型: 这是副词与形容词的混淆，原句中用 tightly（副词）来修饰 keep things，而应使用形容词 tidy 描述“things”（名词）。另外 will brings 是虚拟助动词 will 后面不加第三人称 -s，应该用原形 bring。建议：1) 用 tidy 修饰名词短语 keep things tidy；2) will 后接动词原形，将 brings 改为 bring。

× Yes, because it is influenced from my mother. She is uh, she likes the tidy environment, so whenever she wants us to click keep our things clean, she would told us to umm, put the things back to the original place and.

✓ Yes, because I was influenced by my mother. She likes a tidy environment, so whenever she wanted us to keep our things clean, she would tell us to put things back in their original places.

错误类型: 介词和代词/时态用法错误。1) influenced 应搭配介词 by（被…影响），不能用 influenced from；2) 主语应为 I（我）而不是 it；3) She is uh, she likes 冗余，应为 She likes；4) click 是错误词，likely 想说 keep；5) would told 时态错误，would 后接动词原形 tell；6) put the things back to the original place 的介词和单复数不当，应为 put things back in their original places。建议：使用被动结构的正确介词 by，保持时态一致，去掉赘余词并注意单复数一致。

× Well, it is hard for me to keep the place tidy in weekdays, so I will clean it up in weekends and in every week to maintain my works place more more comfortable.

✓ Well, it is hard for me to keep the place tidy on weekdays, so I clean it up on weekends and every week to keep my workplace more comfortable.

错误类型: 时态、介词和冠词错误以及词形问题。1) 在表示常规时间时用 on weekdays/on weekends；2) 原句中先说难以保持但又用 will clean，表达常态应使用现在时（I clean）；3) in every week 改为 every week 或 weekly；4) my works place 非标准，应为 my workplace 或 my work place；5) 重复 more more 删除多余词。建议：用 on 表示在星期内的时间，描述习惯性行为用一般现在时，使用正确的词组成 workplace 并保持简洁。

× I will say yes because being tidy is a really basic habit. If you make lots of umm trash or dust without cleaning it will cause lots of insects and strange strange umm things smells. It's really annoying to others and yours and if you.

✓ I would say yes because being tidy is a really basic habit. If you leave lots of trash or dust without cleaning, it will cause many insects and strange smells. It's really annoying to others and to you.

错误类型: 句子结构、代词和动词选择错误。1) I will say yes 在此类问答中用 I would say 更礼貌且常用；2) make lots of trash 不恰当，应用 leave 或 produce trash/dust；3) 原句缺少逗号，影响从句结构，应为 If ..., it will ...；4) strange strange umm things smells 语序和名词化错误，改为 strange smells；5) annoying to others and yours 错误代词 yours 用法不当，应为 to you。建议：使用常用表达 I would say，选更合适的动词 leave 表示遗留垃圾，修正从句标点与代词为 to you。