Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and tense errors (use present simple: I clean, I do laundry).

Example: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it helps me stay focused. For example, I do laundry every weekend and always organize my desk so I can find pens and notebooks quickly.

Suggestion: Answer directly, use past simple consistently, and give one specific example with clear linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing like “use to” vs “used to” and redundant words.

Example: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because my parents insisted on it. For instance, after playing with my Disney Princess toys I always put them back in the box before dinner.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and two concrete methods. Use correct verbs (keep, organize, sort) and clearer linking words (for example, also). Avoid vague phrases like “came my study place tidy” and “unforgettable.”

Example: I keep my study space tidy by sorting stationery into labeled containers so I can find items quickly. I also use sticky notes and a to-do list to track tasks and avoid forgetting important deadlines.

Suggestion: State your opinion clearly, then give 1–2 specific reasons with examples. Use coherent linking words (because, therefore, for example) and avoid unfinished sentences and repetition.

Example: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it increases productivity. For example, when my desk is organized I can prioritize tasks more easily and finish them faster, so I waste less time looking for materials.

× Yes, I like to keep things tidy since I am very well structured and organized person.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy since I am a very well-structured and organized person.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the noun phrase 'very well-structured and organized person'. Use 'a' because 'person' is a singular countable noun. Also add a hyphen in 'well-structured' for correct compound adjective formatting. Suggestion: include the article and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× I usually love to do the laundries and afterward I like to tidy up my closet and also in the weekdays I usually, uh, cleaned up my desk in terms of the stationary things.

✓ I usually like to do the laundry and afterward I like to tidy up my closet, and on weekdays I usually clean up my desk and organize stationery.

'Laundry' is an uncountable noun here, so use 'the laundry' not 'the laundries'. Use 'on weekdays' rather than 'in the weekdays'. Verb tense should be present 'clean' to match 'usually' (habit). 'Stationary' (meaning not moving) is incorrect; 'stationery' (writing supplies) is intended. Reorder to create a clearer sentence.

× Yes, I was organized and well structured as a child because my parents taught me the importance of the cleanliness after I play with my toys.

✓ Yes, I was organized and well-structured as a child because my parents taught me the importance of cleanliness after I played with my toys.

The clause 'after I play with my toys' describes a past habitual action, so use the past tense 'played' to match 'was' and 'taught'. Remove 'the' before 'cleanliness' because 'cleanliness' is an abstract noun used generally. Hyphenate 'well-structured'.

× So I have to clean up the toys after when I play with my friends, such as the playing Disney Princess games.

✓ So I had to clean up the toys after I played with my friends, for example when we played Disney Princess games.

Verb tenses should be past ('had to', 'played') to match the childhood context. The phrase 'after when I play' is ungrammatical; use 'after I played' or 'when we played'. 'Such as the playing' is incorrect; use 'for example when we played' or 'such as when we played'.

× Uh, I came my study place tidy in terms of the functioning as like, uh, sorting the stationary in terms of their functioning so that I can easily find them in an urgent situation.

✓ Uh, I keep my study place tidy by organizing things according to their function, for example sorting stationery so that I can easily find items in an urgent situation.

'Came my study place tidy' is ungrammatical; use 'keep' for habitual state. 'In terms of the functioning' is awkward; use 'according to their function'. 'Stationary' should be 'stationery'. Change 'them' to 'items' for clarity. Maintain present simple for habits.

× And I also like to use the notes as well to keep things unforgettable.

✓ I also like to take notes to help me remember things.

'Use the notes' is awkward; native speakers 'take notes'. 'Keep things unforgettable' is incorrect meaning; use 'help me remember things'. Remove redundant 'also' and 'as well'. Keep present simple for habit.

× Yes, I believe it is important to be tidy because it helps us, uh, increase our productivity such as prioritizing the important things to least important thing.

✓ Yes, I believe it is important to be tidy because it helps us increase our productivity, for example by prioritizing important tasks from most to least important.

'Such as prioritizing the important things to least important thing' is ungrammatical. Use 'for example by' and 'prioritizing important tasks from most to least important' for clear comparison. Use plural 'tasks' and parallel comparative structure 'most to least'.

× And after that we can do the things more if it to the task more efficiently.

✓ After that we can do tasks more efficiently.

The original has redundant and ungrammatical fragments ('do the things more if it to the task more efficiently'). Simplify to 'do tasks more efficiently', which conveys the intended meaning with correct verb and object placement.

× And also it is important to.

✓ And it is also important for maintaining order and reducing stress.

The original is an incomplete sentence with missing information. Provide a complete clause explaining why tidiness is important. Keep structure concise and relevant to the previous point.