Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid hesitations and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Replace fillers (umm, uh) with brief pauses and correct grammar (e.g., 'I have a lot of stuff, so I need to store some items in boxes').

Example: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. However, I struggle because I own a lot of belongings, so I often store items in boxes or put them in another room to make the space neater.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give a reason with a clear linking word. Remove hesitations and fix tense/grammar (use 'used to' correctly). Provide a short specific example of your childhood routine.

Example: No, I didn't used to. My mother did most of the housework when I was a child, so I rarely had to tidy my room; for example, she would clean and organize my toys every weekend.

Suggestion: Be precise with vocabulary and use linking words to structure the answer. Correct plural and word choice (e.g., 'storage boxes' not 'package books', 'things' or 'belongings' not 'stuffs', 'a glass jar' for pens). Add one brief reason for your routine.

Example: I keep my study space tidy by using storage boxes for books and a glass jar for pens and pencils. Also, I clean the desk every day so I can concentrate better while studying.

Suggestion: Clarify your position and give balanced reasons with correct grammar and linking phrases. Avoid contradictory start ('No' then positive points). State your view clearly and support it with two specific benefits and one possible downside.

Example: I think being tidy is important because it reduces stress and helps prevent dust and allergens, which is better for your health. However, being too tidy can make you forget where you put some items if you hide them in boxes.

× You, you had to hide them to, uh, boxes or, or room.

✓ You had to hide them in boxes or in the room.

The student used incorrect pronouns and prepositions. 'You, you' is redundant; use 'you' once. 'Hide them to boxes' uses wrong preposition 'to'; correct is 'in boxes'. Also specify 'in the room' rather than just 'room'. Remove filler words and redundant repetition.

× Did you use to keep your room tidy as a child?

✓ Did you use to keep your room tidy when you were a child?

The question is acceptable but 'as a child' is less natural here; 'when you were a child' clarifies the past time reference. Keep 'Did you use to' for habitual past. No tense change needed, this correction improves clarity.

× No, I didn't umm, I guess, uh, my mom did uh, a lot of uh, H housework. So uh, I don't need to keep my room tidy. She did it.

✓ No, I didn't. I guess my mom did a lot of housework, so I didn't need to keep my room tidy; she did it.

Run-on and filler words disrupt sentence structure. Combine ideas with proper punctuation and consistent past tense: 'I didn't need' matches 'my mom did'. Remove extra fillers and the stray 'H'. This makes the sequence of past events clear.

× I use package books to keep my stuffs and I use glass to collect pens and pencils.

✓ I use book boxes to keep my stuff, and I use a glass to hold pens and pencils.

'Package books' is incorrect word order/choice; 'book boxes' or 'boxes for books' is clearer. 'Stuffs' is uncountable; correct is 'stuff'. Use 'a glass' or 'a jar' to mean a container, and 'hold' or 'store' is a better verb than 'collect' for pens. Also add a comma and conjunction for clarity.

× I clean the table every day.

✓ I clean the table every day.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present simple for habitual action. No change needed.

× No, I don't think it's necessary, but I think there are more advantages than disadvantages to be tidy.

✓ No, I don't think it's necessary, but I think there are more advantages than disadvantages to being tidy.

After 'advantages/disadvantages', use the gerund 'being' rather than the infinitive 'to be' to express the general state. The rest of the sentence correctly uses present tense opinion.

× For instance, if you keep tidying it will more clean.

✓ For instance, if you keep tidying, it will be cleaner.

The original misorders words and misuses comparative form. Use comma after the subordinate clause. 'More clean' is incorrect; use comparative adjective 'cleaner' and include auxiliary 'be' to form 'will be cleaner'.

× It's good for your health, but sometimes you forgot where you.

✓ It's good for your health, but sometimes you forget where you put things.

Tense inconsistency and incomplete clause: 'sometimes you forgot' mixes present context with past form; use present 'forget' for general truth. The clause 'where you' is incomplete; add 'put things' or 'put them' to complete the thought.