Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and natural: start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you like keeping things tidy. Avoid unclear phrases and grammar errors. Use one or two supporting reasons with linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') and specific details. Keep responses concise (no more than 4-5 sentences).

Example: Yes, I do like to keep things tidy. I make sure surfaces are clean and items are put away because a tidy home reduces dust and germs, which helps prevent illness. As a result, everyone feels more comfortable and relaxed at home.

Suggestion: Answer directly and correct tense: use 'I used to' for past habits. Remove fillers like 'uh' and repetitions. Give one clear reason and a brief supporting detail, using linking words such as 'because' or 'so'.

Example: I didn’t use to keep my room tidy when I was a child. I often left toys and books on the floor because I preferred playing to tidying up, so my parents and grandparents usually cleaned it for me.

Suggestion: Be specific and organized: state the typical routine or actions you take to keep the space tidy. Use linking words ('if', 'when', 'however') correctly and give concrete examples of what you do (e.g., 'I file papers, wipe the desk, put pens in a cup'). Limit to a few clear sentences.

Example: It depends on where I work. When I’m in the office, I file papers, keep only my laptop and notebook on the desk, and tidy up at the end of each day. At home, I clear clutter, wipe surfaces, and store study materials in a dedicated shelf so the room stays organized.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion with reasons and avoid unclear phrases. Use correct vocabulary ('important' or 'necessary' instead of 'crucial to BTD') and provide specific benefits with linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Keep the answer concise and coherent.

Example: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it creates a healthier environment and reduces the risk of illness. Also, a clean space helps people feel calmer and more productive, so everyone at home can relax and focus better.

× Yes, I like to keep things ready because it hurts to keep the environment safe and secure at home.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it is important to keep the environment at home safe and secure.

The original uses 'ready' and 'hurts' incorrectly. 'Keep things tidy' fits the question. 'Hurts to keep' is ungrammatical; likely intended meaning is 'it is important to keep'. Also preposition 'at home' should follow 'environment' as 'the environment at home'. Use of 'ready' and 'hurts' are word choice and sentence structure errors; corrected version uses proper preposition and clearer verb phrase.

× It helps to prevent from ailments and improve our health.

✓ It helps to prevent ailments and improve our health.

The verb 'prevent' should not be followed by 'from' when directly followed by a noun. Correct form is 'prevent ailments' (prevent + noun). Removing 'from' fixes the preposition error and makes the sentence grammatical.

× We can comfortable more there.

✓ We can be more comfortable there.

'Comfortable' is an adjective and cannot function as a verb. The correct structure is 'be comfortable'. Also the adverb 'more' should modify 'comfortable' in the phrase 'more comfortable'. This fixes the misuse of adjective and word order.

× As far as I remember when I was kid kid, I did not keep my room clean because uh hold the room with a messy look.

✓ As far as I remember when I was a kid, I did not keep my room clean because I used to leave the room messy.

Multiple issues: missing article 'a' before 'kid' and awkward phrase 'hold the room with a messy look'. Use past habitual 'used to' to describe repeated past behavior. This corrects tense usage and improves phrasing.

× My grandparents and parents helped me to clean the room so that is why.

✓ My grandparents and parents helped me clean the room, so that is why.

Remove the unnecessary 'to' after 'helped me' (help someone do something). Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity. The phrase 'so that is why' is redundant but acceptable; punctuation and pronoun use improved.

× Well it depends on the situation.

✓ Well, it depends on the situation.

This is minor punctuation; adding a comma after 'Well' improves sentence structure and natural spoken rhythm.

× If I work at my office and then I keep the all things in manner and proper way.

✓ If I work in my office, I keep all things in order and in a proper way.

Use preposition 'in' with 'office' and remove 'the' before 'all things'. 'Keep in order' is the correct idiom; 'in a proper way' needs the article 'a'. This fixes article and preposition errors and improves collocation.

× However if I am at home then I clean the whole rooms and maintain things.

✓ However, if I am at home, I clean the whole house and organize my things.

Add commas after introductory 'However' and conditional clause for clarity. 'Clean the whole rooms' is ungrammatical; use 'clean the whole house' or 'clean all the rooms'. 'Maintain things' is vague; 'organize my things' is clearer. This corrects conjunction punctuation and noun phrase errors.

× According to my press, activities very crucial to BTD because it helps to create a healthy environment at home and everybody feel relaxed and make feel better.

✓ According to my perspective, these activities are very crucial because they help create a healthy environment at home, and everybody feels more relaxed and better.

'According to my press' is incorrect; use 'perspective' or 'opinion'. 'Activities very crucial to BTD' misses verb 'are' and unclear 'BTD' should be omitted or explained; I replaced with 'are very crucial'. Pronoun agreement: 'they help' (plural subject) and 'everybody feels' (singular verb). 'Make feel better' is incorrect; use 'feel better'. This fixes pronoun agreement, verb omission, and word choice.

× There. It is a hygienic argument for all the members.

✓ In short, it is a hygienic argument for all household members.

The sentence fragment 'There.' is not appropriate; replace with a discourse marker like 'In short'. 'All the members' is vague; 'household members' clarifies meaning. This corrects sentence structure and clarity.