Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: You give a clear direct answer and relevant examples, but some sentences are slightly awkward and a little repetitive. Shorten and simplify some phrases, correct small grammar issues (e.g., “make my books stay in order” → “keep my books in order”, “makes my mind being tidy” → “makes my mind tidy”), and avoid repeating the same idea twice. Use a linking phrase to connect cause and effect (e.g., “so” or “which”).

Example: Yes, I enjoy keeping things tidy. When I feel confused or stressed, I clean my room and keep my books and shelves organised, which helps clear my mind and improves my mental health.

Suggestion: Your answer is personal and gives supporting details, but include more coherent structure and correct grammar. Avoid irrelevant astrology remark unless you connect it clearly. Fix grammar issues (e.g., “I guess it it's” → “I guess it’s”, “to be presentable outlooks” → “to look presentable”). Use a linking word to sequence ideas (e.g., “for example” or “also”).

Example: Yes, I did. My mother says I always liked to keep my room tidy. For example, I liked my clothes folded, my things arranged on shelves, and to look presentable, which shows I cared about order even as a child.

Suggestion: Good practical details and organisation strategy, but the phrasing is awkward and wordy. Make the structure clearer: topic sentence followed by specific methods with linking words (e.g., “first,” “also”). Remove tentative language like “I think I usually should like to.”

Example: I keep my study space tidy by placing notebooks and papers on one side so my computer stays in the centre. I always wipe the desk before working and use organisers for pens and markers to avoid clutter.

Suggestion: You present two clear reasons, which is good, but there are grammar and repetition problems (e.g., “tied” → “tidy”, “they have positive attitude” → “they have a positive attitude”, avoid repeating “feel” twice). Use linking words (“first,” “second,” “therefore”) and a concise concluding sentence.

Example: Yes, I believe being tidy is important. First, people often form a positive impression if you look clean and well-kept. Second, it reflects a healthy attitude toward yourself and supports good mental well-being, so overall it helps you feel more confident.

× Yes, I do enjoy keeping things tidy.

✓ Yes, I do enjoy keeping things tidy.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses the verb + -ing form (enjoy keeping). Keep as is.

× For example, when I feel that I'm too confused with some problems or I'm too stressed, I always clean my room, make my books stay in order and make all the shelves organized.

✓ For example, when I feel too confused by some problems or too stressed, I always clean my room, keep my books in order and organize all the shelves.

Problems: 'confused with' should be 'confused by' to indicate cause; 'make my books stay in order' is awkward — use 'keep my books in order'; 'make all the shelves organized' is wordy and unidiomatic — use 'organize all the shelves'. These corrections improve collocation and natural use of present participles and verbs.

× It makes my mind being tidy as well.

✓ It makes my mind tidy as well.

Error: 'make' + object + 'being' is incorrect. Use 'make' + object + adjective: 'make my mind tidy'. Removing 'being' yields correct causative construction.

× It helps a lot with my mental health.

✓ It helps a lot with my mental health.

No correction needed; present tense correctly describes a general effect.

× Yes, I think my mom told me that I always wanted to keep my room clean and tidy.

✓ Yes, I think my mom told me that I always wanted to keep my room clean and tidy.

No correction needed; past tense 'told' and past habitual 'always wanted' are acceptable when reporting childhood behavior.

× I guess it it's because I'm a Virgo if it doesn't make any sense.

✓ I guess it's because I'm a Virgo, if that makes any sense.

Problems: duplicated 'it it's' is an error; word order and phrasing improved to 'if that makes any sense' for natural spoken English.

× I always liked to have clean clothes, to have my things in order in my shelves and to be presentable outlooks.

✓ I always liked to have clean clothes, keep my things in order on my shelves and look presentable.

Errors: 'in my shelves' should be 'on my shelves' for objects placed on shelves; 'to be presentable outlooks' is ungrammatical — use 'look presentable' or 'be presentable'. Also simplify parallel infinitive structure to 'have..., keep..., and look...'.

× I think I usually should like to keep piles of notebooks and papers on one side of my desk so that, for example, my computer is in the center of it and I always clean the surface before I put anything in there.

✓ I usually like to keep piles of notebooks and papers on one side of my desk so that my computer is in the center, and I always clean the surface before I put anything there.

Problems: 'I think I usually should like' is redundant and ungrammatical — use 'I usually like' or 'I think I usually like'. 'In the center of it' is wordy; 'in the center' suffices. 'Put anything in there' is informal; 'put anything there' is clearer. These changes correct modal/auxiliary misuse and improve fluency.

× I also have some organizers for the pens and pencils and markers.

✓ I also have some organizers for pens, pencils and markers.

Article 'the' is unnecessary before plural general items. Also streamline punctuation/wording for natural English.

× I absolutely think that it is necessary to be tied.

✓ I absolutely think that it is necessary to be tidy.

Typo: 'tied' (meaning fastened) is incorrect; intended adjective is 'tidy'. Correct the adjective to match meaning.

× First of all, people judge you by your appearance, so if they see that you are looking clean and fresh, they have positive attitude towards you.

✓ First of all, people judge you by your appearance, so if they see that you look clean and fresh, they have a positive attitude towards you.

Errors: 'are looking' is verbose — use simple present 'you look' for general truth. Missing article 'a' before 'positive attitude'. These corrections fix verb form and article use.

× And second of all, it's just your attitude towards yourself and your mental health.

✓ Second, it's about your attitude towards yourself and your mental health.

'And second of all' is redundant; use 'Second' or 'Secondly'. 'It's just your attitude towards yourself and your mental health' is acceptable but 'about' clarifies meaning and sounds more natural.

× It just makes you better feel better when you feel clean and fresh.

✓ It just makes you feel better when you feel clean and fresh.

Error: duplicated/compressed 'better feel better' is ungrammatical. Correct order is 'makes you feel better'. Remove redundancy for clarity.