Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy and grammar errors (e.g. "spreaded" → "spread"), and keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences). Use a linking phrase for a brief reason or example.

Example: Yes, I do. I prefer an orderly room because I find it easier to concentrate when things are in their place. For example, I always put clothes in the wardrobe and keep my desk clear so I can study without distractions.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct answer, then give concise supporting details in past tense. Correct small grammar slips (e.g. "if I'm done" → "when I was done"). Use linking words like "however" or "although" if contrasting ideas are present.

Example: Yes, I did. Although my mother often helped, I tried to keep my room tidy by putting away my toys when I was done playing and folding my own clothes.

Suggestion: Use present simple consistently and be concise. Replace wordy phrases ("after I'm done finishing") with "after I finish". Mention one or two concrete routines and use linking words for flow.

Example: I clean my study space every morning before I start. After I finish assignments, I put notebooks back on the bookshelf and clear my desk so it's ready for the next day.

Suggestion: Make a clear, direct opinion statement and give a brief, specific reason. Avoid filler words ("obviously, yeah") and long awkward clauses. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect reason and result.

Example: Yes, I think being tidy is important because a messy environment makes it harder to concentrate. For example, when my desk is cluttered I get distracted and waste time looking for things.

× Most of the people would like to keep their things tidy, and among them, I'm one of them too.

✓ Most people like to keep their things tidy, and I'm one of them.

'Most of the people' is wordy and often unnecessary; 'most people' is preferred. 'Would like' shifts meaning to polite desire; simple present 'like' matches the question about general preference. 'Among them, I'm one of them too' is redundant; simplify to 'I'm one of them'. Suggestion: Use 'most people' for general statements and keep parallel, concise phrasing.

× I don't like things being spreaded out and messed up in my room, so I always try to keep my room tidy.

✓ I don't like things being spread out and messed up in my room, so I always try to keep my room tidy.

The past participle of 'spread' is 'spread', not 'spreaded'. Use 'being spread out' for passive continuous state. Suggestion: Memorize irregular verb forms and use 'spread' for all tenses where applicable.

× Obviously my mom used to clean my room as a child as I wouldn't know how to clean my room, but I tried my best to keep it tidy.

✓ When I was a child my mom used to clean my room because I didn't know how to clean it, but I tried my best to keep it tidy.

Mixing 'as a child' placement and 'wouldn't know' is awkward. Use past simple 'didn't know' for a past state. 'Used to' is correct for habitual past. Suggestion: Place time expression at the start and use past simple for ability/knowledge in the past.

× I would put away my toys if I'm done playing with them and also fold my own clothes.

✓ I used to put away my toys when I was done playing with them and also fold my own clothes.

The sentence mixes conditional/modal 'would' and present 'I'm' incorrectly. For past habitual actions, use 'used to' or 'would' with past context and past time reference ('was' or 'were'). Suggestion: Keep tense consistent: for past habits use 'used to' + past time markers.

× I usually clean the study space every morning before I use it, and after I'm done finishing my assignments and reading the notebooks, I would keep them in the bookshelf or at the place where they used to belong.

✓ I usually clean the study space every morning before I use it, and after I'm done with my assignments and notebooks, I put them on the bookshelf or back where they belong.

'I'm done finishing' is redundant; 'I'm done with' or 'I finish' is better. 'Would keep' is inappropriate for routine present actions; use simple present 'put'. 'Used to belong' implies past; use 'belong' for current locations. Suggestion: For habitual actions use simple present and avoid redundant verb combinations.

× after I'm done finishing my assignments and reading the notebooks, I would keep them in the bookshelf or at the place where they used to belong.

✓ after I'm done with my assignments and notebooks, I put them on the bookshelf or back where they belong.

'the bookshelf' can be 'the bookshelf' or 'a bookshelf' depending on context; 'in the bookshelf' is less natural than 'on the bookshelf'. 'Notebooks' is fine plural. Also 'used to belong' incorrectly implies past ownership; use 'belong' for present location. Suggestion: Use 'on the bookshelf' and present tense for habitual actions.

× Definitely it is significant to be tidy as while you're trying to focus on messy rooms, you can't focus on one thing and rather be your mind just tries to be distracted and obviously, yeah.

✓ Definitely it is important to be tidy because when your room is messy you can't focus on one thing; your mind gets distracted.

'Significant' is misused; 'important' is more natural. 'As while' is redundant; use 'because' or 'when'. Tense and phrasing are awkward: 'you're trying to focus on messy rooms' should be 'when your room is messy'. 'Rather be your mind just tries to be distracted' is ungrammatical; use 'your mind gets distracted'. Remove filler 'and obviously, yeah'. Suggestion: Use clear causal connectors and concise clauses for explanations.