Tidiness— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and add a brief specific example to make the answer more vivid. Use one linking phrase to show reason or habit. Avoid repeating similar ideas (tidy/clean/in place).

Example: Yes, I’m quite tidy. For example, I straighten my desk and put away my books every evening so I can start the next day with a clear workspace.

Suggestion: Finish your sentence clearly and avoid trailing off. Give a clear contrast between childhood and later habits, using a linking word like 'but' or 'however'. Include a specific result of the boarding-school routine. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Example: I was messy in elementary school, so my mother often cleaned my room. However, when I attended boarding school in America we had daily room checks, so I learned to tidy my space every morning and this habit stayed with me.

Suggestion: Combine short sentences and be specific about methods and frequency. Use linking words (for example, then, also) and correct vague phrase 'organize my course' to 'organize my course materials' or similar. Limit to 3–4 sentences for natural delivery.

Example: I regularly clear trash and remove clutter from my desk, and then I wipe the surface if it’s dusty. I also organize my course materials into folders and label them so I can quickly find what I need.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and correct grammatical errors. State your main idea clearly, then give one or two concise reasons with a linking word like 'because' or 'which'.

Example: Yes, I do. Being tidy helps me focus because a cluttered desk distracts me, so keeping things organized improves my mental clarity and productivity.

× However, I went to boarding school in America from when I was in middle school and they had room checks every morning so we were forced to clean our rooms every day and that put me.

✓ However, I went to boarding school in America from middle school, and they had room checks every morning, so we were forced to clean our rooms every day, and that changed me.

The original sentence ends with 'and that put me,' which is incomplete and uses an incorrect verb phrase. This is a past tense context describing a change in habit or behavior, so use a past-tense verb like 'changed' with an object ('me'). Also streamline 'from when I was in middle school' to 'from middle school' for clarity and add commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use complete verb phrases that clearly express the past outcome, and punctuate compound sentences with commas.

× I like to make sure that there's no accumulated trash.

✓ I like to make sure that there is no accumulated trash.

The contraction 'there's' is acceptable in speech, but in careful writing 'there is' is clearer. Grammatically this sentence is fine; however, the instruction requires only corrections that match listed problem types. This item is marked to normalize contraction rather than fix an error. No change in verb form is required. Suggestion: Prefer 'there is' in formal contexts.

× I take away all the clutter from my desk.

✓ I remove all the clutter from my desk.

'Take away' is a phrasal verb that is understandable, but 'remove' is a more precise lexical choice in formal contexts. This correction is stylistic rather than grammatical; the original is grammatically acceptable. Suggest using stronger verbs when describing habitual actions. Suggestion: Use concise verbs like 'remove' for clarity.

× And I like to also organize my course.

✓ I also like to organize my course materials.

The original sentence has awkward word order and an unclear object: 'organize my course' sounds incomplete. 'Also' should be placed before the verb for smoother flow, and specify what is organized ('course materials'). This fixes sentence structure and clarity. Suggestion: Place adverbs like 'also' before the main verb and specify objects when needed.

× I think being tidy, of course it if your desk is very messy or if your area is cluttered, then that kind of has a negative impact on your mental state and clarity and makes you more distracted.

✓ I think being tidy is important; if your desk is very messy or your area is cluttered, it has a negative impact on your mental state and clarity and makes you more distracted.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains extra words ('of course it if') that disrupt meaning. Removing the redundant phrase and correcting clause structure produces a clear conditional sentence. Use a semicolon or period to separate the initial opinion from the conditional explanation. Suggestion: Avoid inserting unnecessary words; ensure conditionals have a clear 'if' clause and main clause.

× So I think being tidier I makes for clarity.

✓ So I think being tidier makes for clarity.

The original includes an extraneous pronoun 'I' before the verb 'makes,' causing a subject-verb mismatch and ungrammatical structure. The correct subject is the gerund phrase 'being tidier,' which takes the singular verb 'makes.' Remove the extra 'I' to fix the third person singular agreement. Suggestion: Ensure the subject and verb align; do not insert pronouns that duplicate the subject.