Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the response more natural by using past-tense consistently and avoid minor redundancies. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked with a conjunction or adverb (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Keep it within four sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were where I met neighborhood friends and played every afternoon. For example, we used to organize small games under the big oak tree and celebrate birthdays there. Those afternoons are some of my fondest childhood memories.

Suggestion: Be concise and natural: give a direct topic sentence, then one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid repetitive phrases and awkward expressions (e.g., “burn off my energy and calories” is wordy).

Example: Not really — I prefer exercising at the gym these days because it’s more efficient and convenient for my schedule. Therefore I rarely visit public parks except for walks now and then.

Suggestion: Use varied vocabulary and avoid repeating phrases like “it would be nice.” Provide one or two specific benefits with linking words (e.g., “for example,” “moreover”). Keep sentences natural and grammatically correct (use “especially” not “specially”).

Example: Yes — I think the government should allocate funds to create more parks, especially in my city, because they provide safe play spaces for children. Moreover, parks offer adults a place to relax and exercise, which benefits public health.

Suggestion: Polish the phrasing to sound more natural and specific. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a vivid detail linked with a word like “for example” or “such as.” Fix small grammar issues (e.g., “one of their benches” → “one of the benches”).

Example: Yes — I would love to visit parks in Japan. For example, I dream of sitting on a bench in a Japanese park and watching the cherry blossoms fall around me during sakura season.

× I actually like going to the playground when I was young.

✓ I actually liked going to the playground when I was young.

Mixing present tense 'like' with a past time expression 'when I was young' is inconsistent. Use past tense 'liked' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use past tense for actions or states tied to a past time (e.g., 'I liked going...').

× Most of my fondest memories happened in the park.

✓ Most of my fondest memories happened in the parks.

The student refers generally to multiple park experiences as a child; using singular 'the park' can be acceptable if referring to a specific park, but context suggests general parks. This is an issue of present/past reference combined with number. To express general childhood experiences, plural 'parks' is clearer. Suggestion: choose singular if referencing a specific park, otherwise use plural 'parks'.

× At my age now, I prefer staying indoors rather than going to public places like parks.

✓ At my age now, I prefer staying indoors rather than going to public places such as parks.

'Like' is acceptable but 'such as' reads more formal and clearer in comparison sentences. The main tense is present, so 'prefer staying' is correct. Suggestion: use 'such as' for examples in formal speech. (No verb tense change needed.)

× So no, I don't enjoy visiting the playground anymore.

✓ So no, I don't enjoy visiting playgrounds anymore.

The verb + -ing 'visiting' is correct, but article and number choice should match general preference: plural 'playgrounds' fits better for a general statement. Suggestion: use plural when speaking generally about types of places.

× I'd rather burn off my energy and calories in the gym rather than going in the park.

✓ I'd rather burn off my energy and calories in the gym rather than go to the park.

After 'would rather' the base verb form 'go' is used, not the -ing form. Also preposition use: say 'go to the park' rather than 'going in the park'. Suggestion: use 'I'd rather ... than ...' followed by base verbs ('burn... rather than go...').

× Absolutely, it would be nice if the government could set a budget to build parks in each city, specially in my city.

✓ Absolutely, it would be nice if the government set a budget to build parks in each neighborhood, especially in my area.

When expressing a hypothetical polite wish, 'would be nice if the government set' (simple past subjunctive) is preferable to 'could set'. Also 'specially' is wrong here; 'especially' is correct. 'Each city' is odd when speaker is in a city; 'each neighborhood' or 'each district' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'set' for polite hypothetical and 'especially' for emphasis; choose appropriate scope (neighborhood/area).

× It would be nice to see children playing around the swing and the seesaws.

✓ It would be nice to see children playing on the swings and the seesaws.

Use plural 'swings' since there are typically multiple, and correct preposition: 'playing on the swings' not 'around the swing'. 'Playing on' is the standard collocation. Suggestion: use plural and correct preposition for playground equipment ('on the swings', 'on the seesaws').

× Plus it's a good way for the adults to release stress.

✓ Plus it's a good way for adults to relieve stress.

'The adults' is unnecessary; use 'adults' when speaking generally. 'Release stress' is not the common collocation; 'relieve stress' or 'reduce stress' is correct. Suggestion: use 'relieve stress' and omit the definite article for general statements.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to go to in the future?

In questions about future preferences, 'would like' or 'want to' can both be used, but 'would like' is more polite and idiomatic. This is a nuance of future/modal usage. Suggestion: use 'would like' for polite future intentions.

× Yes, and I'm thinking of any parks in Japan.

✓ Yes, I'm thinking of parks in Japan.

'Thinking of any parks' is ungrammatical in this affirmative context; 'any' is used in negatives/questions. Also the conjunction 'and' is unnecessary. Suggestion: say 'Yes, I'm thinking of parks in Japan' or 'Yes, I'm thinking of visiting some parks in Japan.'

× It's a dream of mine to sit in one of their benches and just watch sakura flowers falling from the trees.

✓ It's a dream of mine to sit on one of their benches and just watch cherry blossoms fall from the trees.

Use preposition 'on' with 'bench' ('sit on a bench'). 'Their benches' is awkward—better 'a bench' or 'one of the benches' if referencing parks in Japan. Also 'sakura flowers' is better expressed in English as 'cherry blossoms', and use base verb 'fall' after 'watch' (watch + bare infinitive or watch + -ing both possible; 'watch ... fall' is common). Suggestion: use 'sit on a bench' and 'watch cherry blossoms fall.'