Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be careful with grammar and sentence clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms (e.g., 'I used to be brought' → better: 'My grandmother used to take me'), avoid redundancy ("very good memorable" and "family member"), and limit fillers ("uhm"). Add one specific detail to support your memory using a linking word.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My grandmother used to take me there every weekend, and we would feed ducks by the pond, which made those visits very special. Because of those routines, I still associate parks with family time and relaxation.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and coherence: use correct tense and reduce hesitation. Replace vague phrases ('some chances') with specific ones ('a free afternoon') and use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., 'however', 'although'). Keep answer concise (max 4 sentences).

Example: I still enjoy going to parks; however, I rarely have time now because of my busy work schedule. If I had a free afternoon, I would definitely go for a walk to relive those childhood memories.

Suggestion: Use consistent tense and clearer sentence structure. Avoid repeating words and correct subject-verb agreement ('there aren't many parks' not 'there wasn't... therefore there wasn't...'). Use linking words smoothly (e.g., 'because', 'so') and be specific about reason and expectation.

Example: Yes, I would like more parks. My city has fewer parks than other cities because it is less developed, so I am pleased that several new parks are being built and I hope they will open soon so I can walk there.

Suggestion: Improve grammar, plural/singular agreement and vocabulary. Say 'a new park' (not 'parks') and 'green scenery' or 'green spaces'. Remove filler words and express reasons specifically (e.g., 'because it will have native trees and walking trails').

Example: Yes. There is a new park being built that will focus on green spaces and native plants. I want to visit it because it will have walking trails and peaceful gardens where I can relax and enjoy nature.

× I remembered I used to being brought there by my grandmother.

✓ I remember I used to be brought there by my grandmother.

The phrase 'used to' is followed by the base form of the verb or a passive base form 'be' + past participle. 'Being brought' is incorrect here. Also 'remembered' suggests a past recollection moment; the simple present 'remember' fits better with a habitual past action introduced by 'used to'. Suggestion: use 'I remember I used to be brought...' or 'I used to be brought...'.

× She's really into walking and always brought me along.

✓ She was really into walking and always brought me along.

The sentence mixes present tense 'She's' (she is) with past habit 'always brought'. The context refers to childhood, so past tense should be used consistently. Change 'She's' to 'She was' to match the past reference. Alternatively, keep present for a current truth and change 'brought' to 'brings' but that would conflict with childhood context.

× Umm, that was a very good memorable moment with my family member and I treasure that a lot.

✓ That was a very memorable moment with a family member, and I treasure it a lot.

'Very good memorable' is redundant and awkward; 'memorable' alone suffices. 'My family member' is unnatural; 'a family member' or specify the relationship works better. Pronoun 'that' should be referred back with 'it'. Also combine with a comma and 'and' for correct sentence flow.

× Uh, I do, but because, uh, my packed schedule, I didn't really have an opportunity to actually go for work like I used to.

✓ I do, but because of my packed schedule, I haven't really had an opportunity to go for a walk like I used to.

Missing preposition 'of' after 'because'. 'Didn't really have' places the sentence in past; the speaker refers to ongoing schedule affecting present, so present perfect 'haven't really had' is better. 'Go for work' is incorrect; context is walking, so 'go for a walk' is appropriate. Also remove unnecessary filler words.

× But yeah, if I got, uh, some chances to bring back my old memories, I would definitely, uh, try to walk.

✓ But yes, if I get some chances to relive my old memories, I will definitely try to go for a walk.

The original mixes past conditional 'if I got' with 'would' which is acceptable for a hypothetical but here a more natural first conditional 'if I get... I will...' fits because the speaker is talking about future possibilities. 'Bring back my old memories' is awkward; 'relive my old memories' is clearer. 'Try to walk' should be 'try to go for a walk' for natural collocation.

× Well definitely, I mean my city wasn't as developed as others, therefore there wasn't uh, there aren't many parks around.

✓ Well, definitely. I mean, my city wasn't as developed as others; therefore there weren't many parks around.

Sentence mixes past 'wasn't' with present 'aren't'. Since speaker compares past development, keep past: 'there weren't many parks around'. Also remove redundant 'there wasn't uh, there aren't' and add punctuation. 'Therefore' connects clauses and needs correct agreement in tense.

× However there recently there are uh, parks are constructed and I hope it should it would soon be finished so I could walk in that newly park.

✓ However, recently some parks have been constructed, and I hope they will soon be finished so I can walk in those new parks.

Original has word order and tense problems. Use present perfect 'have been constructed' for recent passive actions. 'Parks are constructed' is awkward. 'I hope it should it would' is ungrammatical; use 'I hope they will soon be finished'. 'That newly park' should be 'those new parks' or 'that new park'. Use plural agreement 'they' with 'parks'.

× I've heard some news about a new parks aiming for, uh, green sceneries are about to be constructed.

✓ I've heard some news about new parks aimed at green scenery that are about to be constructed.

'A new parks' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'parks'; remove 'a' or use 'a new park'. 'Aiming for, uh, green sceneries' is awkward; use 'aimed at green scenery' or 'aimed at creating green spaces'. 'Scenery' is uncountable; 'sceneries' is incorrect in this context. Reorder the clause for clarity.

× I really love of, of environmental friendly place.

✓ I really love environmentally friendly places.

'Love of' is incorrect; use 'love' followed by noun. 'Environmental friendly' should be the adverbial form 'environmentally friendly'. Use plural 'places' to match general preference. So 'I really love environmentally friendly places.'

× Uh, so it would be a very great to walk and relax, uh, in that area.

✓ So it would be great to walk and relax in that area.

'A very great' is unidiomatic; use 'great' or 'a very good place'. Remove extra article 'a' before 'very great' and unnecessary filler words. Placement of commas and fillers should be minimized for clarity.