Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), correct tense and phrasing, and add one specific example or memory. Use linking words if you expand (for example, because, so).

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, I often played on the swings and had picnics with my family, which made me feel happy and relaxed because I could spend time outdoors.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, remove hesitations, and add a specific detail about what you do at the park and why. Use a linking word to connect reason and activity (for instance, because or so).

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks on weekends. I usually go with my friends to play football or have a picnic, which is fun because it helps us relax after a busy week.

Suggestion: Respond directly and precisely, avoid repetition and fillers, and provide a specific reason and example of how more parks would help (use linking words such as because or so).

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would make it easier for people to exercise in the morning and meet friends. For example, a small park near my apartment would encourage neighbours to walk and socialise.

Suggestion: Be specific about the park name and location, correct grammar, avoid repetition and hesitations, and give a clear reason why you want to visit (reference a movie, feature, or activity). Use linking words like because or since to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I would love to visit the Namsan Park in Seoul, Korea, in the future because I saw it in a film and it looked beautiful. I am especially interested in its views and walking trails, so I could enjoy sightseeing and exercise there.

× I really love to go to the parks when I, when I want to try because I think that this activity makes me feel happy and, uh, relaxed.

✓ I really loved going to parks when I wanted to try, because I thought that this activity made me feel happy and relaxed.

The question asked about childhood (past), so verbs should be in past tense. Use 'loved', 'going', 'wanted', 'thought', 'made' to match past time reference. Also remove filler repetition and extra commas to improve fluency.

× Yes I do, I still like going to parks umm in the weekend.

✓ Yes, I do. I still like going to parks on the weekend.

Use 'on the weekend' (correct preposition) and keep present simple 'like' to match 'still'. Add punctuation for clarity.

× I often do this activity with my friends and we feel really excited about the activity.

✓ I often go to parks with my friends and we feel really excited about it.

Avoid repeating 'activity' and use 'go to parks' for natural phrasing. Replace second 'activity' with 'it' to prevent redundancy and improve sentence flow.

× I really like to see more parks in my city because everyone can go to the parks easier to umm, do morning exercise or umm, hang out with with their friends.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city because everyone can go to the parks more easily to do morning exercise or hang out with their friends.

Use 'would like' to express desire politely for the future. 'Easier' (adjective) should be 'more easily' (adverb) to modify the verb 'go'. Remove duplicate 'with' and filler sounds. 'Do morning exercise' is acceptable but 'exercise in the morning' is an alternative.

× I think that there are many parks I want to go in the future.

✓ I think that there are many parks I want to visit in the future.

Use 'visit' to collocate with 'parks' rather than 'go'. Keep present tense 'think' and future reference 'in the future' is fine.

× I guess, uh, uh, international park in Korea and Korean, because I have seen this park in the the in the movie and I really want to go this place.

✓ I guess the International Park in Korea, because I have seen this park in a movie and I really want to go to that place.

Add the definite article 'the' before the park name if speaking about a specific park and capitalize proper name. Remove duplicate words and filler 'uh'. Use 'a movie' not 'the movie' unless referring to a specific film. Use 'go to that place' or simply 'visit it' for correct verb-preposition structure.