Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding repetition and grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., 'swing' instead of 'sweeping').

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because it was my favorite activity. For example, I often met other children there and we played on the slides and swings, which helped me make friends and stay active.

Suggestion: Be concise and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and word choice). Use a linking word to connect reasons and add a specific effect or example of how parks help you. Avoid repeating the same idea.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are free and peaceful. For instance, I often take long walks there to clear my mind and reduce stress after a busy day.

Suggestion: Clarify your reasons and use more precise vocabulary; explain what you mean by 'sprouts' or replace it with a clearer idea. Use linking words to expand one clear reason with an example or consequence.

Example: Absolutely. I would like more parks in my city because they improve the scenery and air quality; for example, more green spaces would encourage outdoor activities and make the city more attractive for families.

Suggestion: Tidy up the timeline and avoid contradictions. Start with a clear statement and then give one or two concise reasons using linking words. Use smoother phrasing for past visits and feelings.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Hyde Park in London again. I went there once when I was younger and barely remember it, but I recall feeling relaxed and impressed by how large and peaceful it was, so I want to experience it again.

× Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because it was my favorite activity. When I was a child.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because it was my favorite activity.

The second sentence 'When I was a child.' is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb and cannot stand alone. Combine the fragment with the previous sentence or add a verb to complete it. For example, remove the fragment or rewrite as 'When I was a child, I met a lot of kids.'

× I met a lot of kids and we played together in the parks, especially in the slides and in the sweeping.

✓ I met a lot of kids and we played together in the parks, especially on the slides and on the swings.

Use 'on' with 'slides' and 'swings', not 'in'. 'Sweeping' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'swings'. Also plural 'parks' is acceptable if referring to various parks; keep consistency with context.

× Yes, I still like going to parks because in the parks you don't need to spend money and you can walk for hours and you don't need to buy anything. It's clears my mind after walking in the parks.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks because in parks you don't need to spend money and you can walk for hours and you don't need to buy anything. It clears my mind after walking in the parks.

'It's clears' mixes contraction 'it's' (it is) with a verb that needs to be third person singular 'clears'. Use 'It clears' or 'It’s clear' depending on meaning. Also 'in the parks' can be simplified to 'in parks' for general statements.

× Absolutely. I would like to see more parks in my city because I like the view of the park and my city is known for sprouts, so I think we need to have more parks.

✓ Absolutely. I would like to see more parks in my city because I like the view of parks and my city is known for sprouts, so I think we need more parks.

'The view of the park' suggests one park; for general preference use 'the view of parks' or 'park views'. Also 'to have more parks' is acceptable but 'we need more parks' is more natural. No preposition error beyond article choice.

× Yes, I want to see Hyde Park in London. Actually I saw there before, but I don't remember because it was a long time ago.

✓ Yes, I want to see Hyde Park in London. Actually I have been there before, but I don't remember because it was a long time ago.

Use present perfect 'have been' for experiences at an unspecified time before now. 'I saw there' is ungrammatical; use 'I have been there' or 'I went there'.

× So now I want to go there again because I remember that I was feeling very good in the Hyde Park.

✓ So now I want to go there again because I remember that I felt very good in Hyde Park.

Use simple past 'felt' to refer to a specific past occasion ('I remember that I felt...'). Do not use 'the' with 'Hyde Park' in this context; proper names of parks normally omit 'the'. Also 'was feeling very good' is wordy; 'felt very good' is clearer.

× It was very big.

✓ It was very big.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed; it correctly uses singular 'It' to refer to Hyde Park and past tense 'was'.