Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more accurate and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, avoid grammar mistakes (tense, possessive, articles), and keep sentences concise (max 4–5). Use linking words to connect ideas and give one or two specific supporting details (what you did there or why you liked it).

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, the Summer Palace near my home in Beijing was my favorite place; it dates from the Qing dynasty and has beautiful gardens and lakes. I used to visit every day after school to walk and play with friends, which made those afternoons relaxing and fun.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and clarity. Give a direct topic sentence, correct verb forms and article use, and avoid exaggerations that sound unnatural. Use a linking word to explain frequency and reason (e.g., because, so). Keep it concise and specific about activities you do there.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. For instance, I often visit Shakespeare Regional Park in Auckland because the natural scenery is beautiful and it helps me relax. I usually go there twice a week to walk and take photos.

Suggestion: Answer directly and correct comparative structure and article use. Be specific about why you want more parks (benefits) and avoid irrelevant details (car purchase) unless it explains accessibility. Use linking words to show plans or reasons.

Example: Yes, I would like to see more parks in Auckland because they improve air quality and provide places for exercise. For example, I hope more regional parks such as ***** Regional Park and Window Home Regional Park will be developed nearby so people can enjoy walking and picnics without traveling far.

Suggestion: Provide a clear direct answer, correct tense and noun phrases, and give a specific reason or description for wanting to visit. Use linking words to connect how you learned about the park and why it appeals to you. Keep sentences natural and concise.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Huang Kim Lake Park and the central area of Hanoi in Vietnam. I saw photographs of Huang Kim Lake in a travel book and the scenery looked stunning, so I want to see the lake in person and explore the city’s cultural sites.

× Of course, I love to go into Park's child.

✓ Of course, I loved going to parks as a child.

Original sentence has multiple issues: incorrect article/possessive use ('Park's child') and unnatural verb choice. The student should use past tense 'loved' to match 'as a child' and plural 'parks' as a general category. Use 'going to parks' rather than 'go into'. Suggestion: use 'loved going to parks as a child.'

× There is a famous park which is called the Summer Palace, built during the Qing dynasty, which is was quite close to my home in Beijing.

✓ There was a famous park called the Summer Palace, built during the Qing dynasty, which was quite close to my home in Beijing.

The time reference 'as a child' implies past tense; mix of present 'is' and past 'built' is inconsistent. Remove redundant 'which is' and use past tense 'was'. Also omit extra 'which' before 'was'. Suggest consistent past-tense: 'There was a famous park called the Summer Palace...'

× Every day after school I go there for a stroll.

✓ Every day after school I went there for a stroll.

Because the context is childhood, use past tense 'went' instead of present 'go'. Keep habitual past structure 'Every day after school I went there'.

× Yeah, it's more or less the same nowadays.

✓ Yeah, it's more or less the same nowadays.

This sentence is grammatical; it correctly uses present tense 'is' to describe current situation. No change needed.

× I enjoying to go to the Shakespeare Original Park in Auckland as the natural scenery is very beautiful.

✓ I enjoy going to Shakespeare Regional Park in Auckland because the natural scenery is very beautiful.

Incorrect verb form 'enjoying' should be base verb 'enjoy' for simple present, and 'enjoy' is followed by gerund 'going', not 'to go'. Also 'Shakespeare Original Park' is likely 'Shakespeare Regional Park' to match later mention; replace 'as' with 'because' for clarity.

× I don't think I can live if if I don't go to Shakespeare Regional Park twice a week.

✓ I don't think I can live if I don't go to Shakespeare Regional Park at least twice a week.

The sentence had a duplicated 'if if' (typo) and sounds unnatural without a frequency modifier; add 'at least' or keep 'twice a week'. The main issue is typo and phrasing; correction keeps conditional structure.

× Yes, I'd like to see more park than my current city, Auckland.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my current city, Auckland.

Use plural 'parks' when speaking generally and preposition 'in' rather than 'than'. The original used 'than' incorrectly; change to 'in my current city'.

× I'd love to go to more Regional Park like the ***** Regional Park and the Window Home Regional Park in the future.

✓ I'd love to go to more regional parks like ***** Regional Park and Window Home Regional Park in the future.

Use plural 'parks' after 'more', and lower-case 'regional' unless it's part of a proper name. Also remove 'the' before names when naming parks in a list. Ensure parallel structure 'parks like A and B'.

× I'll go to these places once I get the new car.

✓ I'll go to these places once I get a new car.

Use 'a new car' rather than 'the new car' unless a specific car already known; future tense 'I'll go' is fine. Use indefinite article to indicate any new car.

× Yes, of course, I'd love to go to the Huang Kim Lake Park and the center of Hanoi CBD in Vietnam.

✓ Yes, of course, I'd love to go to Huang Kim Lake Park and the center of Hanoi's CBD in Vietnam.

Remove 'the' before proper park name unless part of official name. For 'center of Hanoi CBD' use possessive 'Hanoi's CBD' to show the central area of Hanoi's central business district.

× I have seen the Huang Kim Lake on travel book previously.

✓ I saw Huang Kim Lake in a travel book previously.

Use simple past 'saw' or the present perfect 'have seen' with correct preposition and article. 'On travel book' is wrong: use 'in a travel book'. For past time marker 'previously', simple past 'I saw' is natural. If keeping present perfect, say 'I have seen Huang Kim Lake in a travel book before.'

× The scenery was too good so I really want to go there.

✓ The scenery looked so beautiful that I really want to go there.

If referring to the picture in a book, use past/past observation 'looked' or 'was' and maintain tense consistency: 'The scenery looked so beautiful that I really want to go there.' Alternatively make both present: 'The scenery is so beautiful that I really want to go there.'