Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and correct common grammar errors (e.g., "used to go to parks", "the environment was nice"). Aim for 2–4 short sentences and include one concrete example (a game or activity).

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. The environment was peaceful and there were many playgrounds where I played on the swings and slides. Also, there were small cafes nearby so my family and I could sit and relax after playing.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give a clear reason with a linking word: start with a topic sentence (Yes/No), then explain why using because/since and provide a brief example. Fix grammar ("I don't like parks nowadays", "my cousins live far away"). Avoid unnecessary fillers.

Example: No, I don't enjoy going to parks now because I usually go alone and my cousins, who I used to go with, live far away. Therefore I prefer staying home where I can relax quietly.

Suggestion: Provide a clear opinion with specific reasons and use linking words (for example, because, so). Use clearer vocabulary ("elderly people", "exercise equipment"). Limit repetition and give one concrete benefit such as health or community interaction.

Example: Yes, I would like more parks because elderly people can exercise and socialize there. In addition, parks with proper exercise equipment and benches encourage community activities and improve public health.

Suggestion: Give a clear response (Yes/No/Not sure) and then expand with a reason or a short plan. Avoid vague phrases and fillers. If unsure, mention a type of park you might like (e.g., botanical garden, riverside park) and why, using linking words like "maybe" or "perhaps" properly.

Example: I'm not sure about a specific park, but I might visit a riverside park in the future because I enjoy quiet walks and scenic views. Perhaps I will go alone for a relaxing day when I have free time.

× Yes, of course I used to go for park in in childhood because I like to go there because environment also nice and there is a lot of uh, games out there.

✓ Yes, of course I used to go to parks in my childhood because I liked going there; the environment was also nice and there were a lot of games out there.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'go for park' (should be 'go to parks') and incorrect article/number (singular vs plural). Tense consistency: student mixed present and past when talking about childhood; use past 'liked' and 'was/were'. Use of 'a lot of' requires plural 'games' and 'there were'. Suggestion: use 'used to' with past verbs, use 'go to' for places, and keep tense consistent when referring to past habit.

× They would say games and uh, so many shops that like uh, cafe like so we go there and we go sit.

✓ There were many shops such as cafes, and we would go there and sit.

Errors: awkward phrasing 'They would say games' and 'shops that like uh, cafe like' are sentence structure and word choice issues. Use 'such as' or 'like' to give examples and 'would' for habitual past actions. Suggestion: simplify and reorder to 'There were many shops such as cafes, and we would go there and sit.'

× No, I don't like park nowadays because uh, there is nobody's uh, with me for going park.

✓ No, I don't like parks nowadays because there is nobody with me to go to the park.

Errors: singular/plural ('park' vs 'parks'), incorrect possessive 'nobody's', wrong preposition 'for going park'. Use 'nobody with me' and infinitive 'to go to the park' or plural 'parks'. Suggestion: use plural when speaking generally ('parks') and correct preposition and verb form.

× Uh, in childhood I go with my cousins and nowadays our cousins are for far away from me.

✓ In my childhood I went with my cousins, but nowadays my cousins live far away from me.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('I go' should be past 'I went'), incorrect preposition/phrase 'are for far away from me'. Suggestion: use 'went' for past habit and 'live far away' to indicate current location.

× So I didn't like umm quietly I sit in home and I enjoy my life.

✓ So I don't like it; I just sit quietly at home and enjoy my life.

Errors: tense mismatch ('didn't like' past vs present context), missing object 'it', wrong preposition 'in home' (should be 'at home'), adverb order 'quietly I sit' should be 'sit quietly'. Suggestion: maintain present tense for current habits and use correct adverb placement and prepositions.

× Yes, of course, a lot of parks in my city because, uh, in old, old peoples or like to go there and they do some exercise and sit and sit and chat with some friends and like uh, they will like that.

✓ Yes, of course; there are a lot of parks in my city because older people like to go there to exercise, sit, and chat with friends.

Errors: missing 'there are', awkward phrase 'old, old peoples' (use 'older people'), redundant 'and like uh, they will like that'. Suggestion: use 'there are' to state existence, use 'older people' (uncountable plural without 'peoples'), and simplify the list of activities.

× So old peoples like to go there and they have more physical pro machines, equipments like that.

✓ Older people like to go there and they have more exercise machines and equipment.

Errors: 'peoples' should be 'people' (plural), 'pro machines' is unclear and likely 'exercise machines', 'equipments' is uncountable 'equipment'. Suggestion: use 'people' for plural, 'exercise machines' and 'equipment' (no plural -s).

× I'm not sure about this because, uh, Parker simplicits and enjoy the views and, uh, and, uh, go for some, I think maybe it's some alone day, but I'm not thinking about that particular park.

✓ I'm not sure about this because parks are simple and nice to enjoy the views; maybe I would go there alone one day, but I'm not thinking about any particular park now.

Errors: many sentence structure and word choice issues: 'Parker simplicits' unclear, repetition, incorrect tense/modal use. Suggestion: rephrase to 'parks are simple and nice to enjoy the views' and use conditional 'maybe I would go alone one day' to indicate future possibility.

× I want to go like that. And now I'm not sure about that.

✓ I would like to go to a park like that, but right now I'm not sure about it.

Errors: 'I want to go like that' is vague and misses preposition; inconsistent tense/modal 'I want' vs 'I'm not sure'. Suggestion: use 'would like' for polite/future desire and 'go to a park like that' for clarity; use 'it' as pronoun for 'that park'.