Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and precise: avoid informal or incorrect words (e.g. “yapping”) and reduce repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I would often ask my parents to take me so I could play games and make friends there. Because the park had a big playground and open space, I spent most afternoons running around and exploring.

Suggestion: Correct factual or word-choice errors (e.g. ‘Paris’ → ‘parks’) and use clearer linking phrases. Provide one concise reason and one specific example of what you do there, staying within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I live in a busy city and they offer a break from concrete surroundings. For example, I like to sit under a tree and read or watch people walking, which helps me relax and recharge.

Suggestion: Use correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g. ‘bravable’ and ‘greenhouses’ are incorrect here). Give a clear opinion, then two specific benefits with linking words. Avoid repetition and keep sentences grammatically correct.

Example: Yes, I would. More parks would improve the city’s appearance and provide green spaces for relaxation. For instance, they offer places to meet friends and short walking routes that help people de-stress after a long day.

Suggestion: Make the answer more concise and correct wording (e.g. ‘park’ not ‘part’; ‘farmers’ market’ plural). Start with a direct answer, then add two clear preferences with a linking phrase and a short reason.

Example: I don't have a specific park in mind, but I would like to visit parks with mature trees and public art. Also, if there were a weekend farmers’ market, I would enjoy browsing local food and crafts there.

× I really like going out as a child.

✓ I really liked going out as a child.

The speaker is referring to past habitual action 'as a child', so the past tense should be used. Use 'liked' to match the time frame and maintain tense consistency.

× I was always yapping about how I want to go out and play with other kids outside, so I was enjoying going to the park since I was a kid.

✓ I was always talking about how I wanted to go out and play with other kids outside, so I enjoyed going to the park when I was a kid.

Multiple issues: 'yapping' is informal and not ideal; use 'talking'. 'How I want' should be past 'wanted' to match 'was always'. 'Was enjoying... since I was a kid' mixes past continuous with 'since' requiring perfect aspect; simplify to 'enjoyed... when I was a kid.' Ensure consistent past tense for past habitual actions.

× I still enjoy going to Paris because most of the time I live in a city where it's really hard to get a taste of nature.

✓ I still enjoy going to parks because most of the time I live in a city where it's really hard to get a taste of nature.

This appears to be a word choice error: 'Paris' should be 'parks' to match context. Also 'most of the time I live in a city' is present habitual so 'I live' is acceptable. Correct the noun to fit meaning.

× Parks are when I go.

✓ Parks are where I go.

Incorrect clause: 'when I go' refers to time, but speaker needs place 'where I go'. Replace 'when' with 'where' to indicate location.

× If you go to a park, you can be surrounded by trees and people who are enjoying their lives.

✓ If you go to a park, you can be surrounded by trees and people who are enjoying their lives.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It matches conditional structure and present participle usage.

× That just make me feel immediately better and I feel like I can get away from the busy city life.

✓ That just makes me feel immediately better, and I feel like I can get away from the busy city life.

Subject-verb agreement with present simple: 'That' (singular) requires 'makes' not 'make'. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Tense and aspect remain present simple.

× Everybody want to see more parks because it makes the city more bravable.

✓ Everybody wants to see more parks because it makes the city more livable.

Singular indefinite pronoun 'Everybody' requires third person singular verb 'wants'. 'Bravable' is not a standard adjective for cities; likely intended 'livable'. Replace with correct adjective.

× It add more greenhouses and provide places to hang out with friends.

✓ They add more green spaces and provide places to hang out with friends.

Subject mismatch and verb form: 'It add' should agree in number. Use plural 'They add' if referring to parks, or rephrase 'Parks add'. 'Greenhouses' is incorrect term; 'green spaces' is the suitable phrase. Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× When you feel like you have a had a bad day, you can just go to a park and choose.

✓ When you feel like you have had a bad day, you can just go to a park and relax.

Remove extra article 'a' before 'had'. 'Choose' is incomplete—choose what? Use a verb that fits context such as 'relax'. Maintain present perfect 'have had' to describe recent experience.

× No, specifically I have never thought about which part I want to go in the future, but I'm willing to visit any park that has beautiful trees and perhaps some artworks to enjoy.

✓ No, specifically I have never thought about which park I want to go to in the future, but I'm willing to visit any park that has beautiful trees and perhaps some artworks to enjoy.

Use 'which park' not 'which part' to refer to a specific park. Include preposition 'to' after 'go'. Present perfect 'have never thought' is correct for past experience; 'in the future' indicates planning so keep phrase order logical.

× It would be ideal if they were farmers market in the park on weekend, but I can't really name a specific that I want to visit.

✓ It would be ideal if there were a farmers' market in the park on weekends, but I can't really name a specific one that I want to visit.

Use 'there were' for existence (There be issue) and add indefinite article 'a' before 'farmers' market'. Make 'farmers' possessive plural with apostrophe and pluralize 'weekends'. 'Specific that' needs noun 'one' after 'specific'. Also use 'there were' to match hypothetical mood.