Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more precise and use correct tense and pronouns. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, MMM), correct grammar (I liked, not they do), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because, and). Keep it to under five sentences.

Example: I liked going to parks as a child because they had playgrounds where I played with neighbourhood friends. For example, my parents often packed snacks and we would spend entire afternoons on the swings and slides.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and correct grammar. Use linking words to contrast (however, but) and give a specific reason and brief example. Avoid repetition and incorrect forms (e.g., "I don't go because it's boring").

Example: I don't often go to parks by myself now because I find them boring without company. However, I enjoy going with my siblings because we can play games together and chat while walking.

Suggestion: Start with a direct opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, and because). Be concise and choose clearer vocabulary (e.g., "varied", "attractive to adults"). Avoid vague phrasing like "a different in a different way."

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children to play and improve public health. In addition, parks should be varied—some with playgrounds for kids and others with seating, art, or exercise equipment to attract adults.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear statement about your preferences, then give a specific example with correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid overgeneralisation like "every parks"; say "many parks" or "parks in other countries." Use linking words such as "for example" and give concrete details about what you like.

Example: I like visiting parks whenever I travel to other countries because they show local culture and offer relaxation. For example, Korean parks are very enjoyable—they often have plenty of benches, large modern playgrounds, and well-maintained walking paths.

× Yes, of course they do because there were uh, playgrounds and I used to play with my friends, also meet with my friends, uh, like made some friends there. MMM. Also when I went with my parents, they kept me by something to eat everywhere.

✓ Yes, of course I did because there were playgrounds and I used to play with my friends and meet new people there. Also when I went with my parents, they bought me something to eat everywhere.

The student used the wrong pronoun 'they' to refer to themselves and incorrect verb forms. This is a pronoun error and also involves past-tense verbs. Use 'I did' to answer a past-tense question and keep past tense consistently: 'there were', 'I used to play', 'meet', and 'bought' (not 'kept me by'). Replace 'they' with 'I' when the speaker refers to themselves. Suggestion: maintain consistent pronouns and past tense verbs when talking about childhood memories.

× I can say no really much when it comes to go.

✓ I can't say I go very often now.

The phrase 'when it comes to go' incorrectly uses the base verb after 'comes to'; the correct structure is 'when it comes to' + -ing form, or rephrase. This is a present participle usage issue. Also 'no really much' is ungrammatical; replace with 'very often' and use contraction 'can't' to reflect intended meaning. Suggestion: use 'when it comes to going' or rephrase to 'I don't go very often.'

× There was was my siblings.

✓ I used to go with my siblings.

The original has repeated 'was' and lacks a clear subject-verb structure. This is a sentence structure error. Clarify the action: 'I used to go with my siblings' or 'I went with my siblings.' Suggestion: form a complete clause with subject and verb and avoid duplicated words.

× It's OK because you can enjoy with them and play with them, but by myself I mostly don't go because boring.

✓ It's OK because you can enjoy time with them and play with them, but I mostly don't go by myself because it's boring.

The phrase 'enjoy with them' is missing an object and 'by myself I mostly don't go because boring' lacks 'it is' and misplaces 'by myself'. This is a pronoun and sentence structure issue. Use 'enjoy time with them' and 'it's boring' to make a complete sentence. Suggestion: include the dummy subject 'it' in 'it's boring' and place 'by myself' before the verb.

× I would say yes because it really makes fun and enjoyable for kids, children, but I think they all need to be a different in a different way and that they will put something interesting so that also adults will be pleased.

✓ I would say yes because parks are really fun and enjoyable for children, but I think each park needs to be different and include interesting features so that adults will also enjoy them.

Mixed tense and awkward phrasing. 'Makes fun' is incorrect; use 'are fun'. 'Kids, children' is redundant. 'They all need to be a different in a different way' is ungrammatical. This is a future/tense and sentence structure issue. Suggestion: use plural agreement and clearer relative clauses: 'each park needs to be different' and 'include interesting features so that adults will also enjoy them.'

× I really want to go to the every parks when I travel to the other countries.

✓ I really want to go to every park when I travel to other countries.

'The every parks' is ungrammatical: 'every' is followed by a singular noun without 'the'. Also 'the other countries' is too specific; omit 'the' for general meaning. This is an article and quantifier error. Suggestion: use 'every park' and 'other countries.'

× For example Korean park is so enjoyable because they have a lot of seats and like big huge playground where also we can play.

✓ For example, Korean parks are very enjoyable because they have a lot of benches and large playgrounds where we can play.

Adjectives 'big huge' are redundant and 'seats' is better expressed as 'benches' in parks. 'Korean park is' should be plural 'Korean parks are' for general statement. This is an adjective/adverb usage issue. Suggestion: avoid redundant adjectives, use correct count and plurality, and prefer 'benches' and 'large playgrounds'.