Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct basic grammar (tense and articles), and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Avoid repetition and keep it to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. My family often had weekend picnics there because the parks were peaceful and had large grassy areas. We would bring homemade food and play games together, which made those days really fun.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and fix grammar (articles, plural/singular, verb forms). Begin with a clear statement, then give one or two specific activities you do now in parks, using linking words such as 'because' or 'so'. Keep sentences short and natural.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Now I usually go with my family on weekends because it is a relaxed place for our child to play. We often draw, have a casual dinner, and enjoy the fresh air together.

Suggestion: Organize your answer: state your opinion, give specific reasons, and use linking words ('because', 'however', 'for example'). Correct sentence structure and avoid run-on sentences. Provide one clear reason why more parks would help and one brief example.

Example: Yes, I would. Our city currently has only two parks, and one of them is very far from my home. More parks would make it easier for people to exercise and relax nearby, for example, families could walk to a park instead of driving.

Suggestion: Be specific about which places you want to visit and why. Remove filler words (uh) and use correct phrasing ('I've heard they are beautiful' rather than 'I listen'). Give a reason or one example of a park you'd like to see.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit parks in Europe in the future. For example, I want to see Hyde Park in London because I have heard it has beautiful gardens and lakes, and it seems like a peaceful place to relax.

× Yes, of course I like to go to parks like with a child.

✓ Yes, of course I liked going to parks as a child.

The sentence is describing a habitual action in the past (when the speaker was a child), so past tense should be used. Change present 'like to go' to past 'liked going' and use the phrase 'as a child' for clarity. Use of 'like with a child' is ungrammatical and replaced with the correct time phrase.

× When we have an holiday or weekend, we go with our family to a picnic, make our lunch or dinner in their parks.

✓ When we had a holiday or weekend, we went with our family for a picnic and made our lunch or dinner in the park.

Several issues: 'an holiday' should be 'a holiday' (article before vowel sound rule) but because this describes past habitual actions, verbs should be past tense ('had', 'went', 'made'). 'To a picnic' is better expressed as 'for a picnic'. 'Their parks' is unclear and should be 'the park' or 'in the park' to refer to the location. Adjusted to past tense for consistency.

× Yes, sure. I like to go a parks now, uh, we'll have a free time or, uh, in weekend we go with our child and family in this place, do some activity like drawing or make a dinner. Enjoy.

✓ Yes, sure. I like to go to parks now when we have free time or on weekends. We go with our child and family to this place, do activities like drawing, or make dinner and enjoy ourselves.

Multiple present-tense and article errors: 'go a parks' should be 'go to parks' (preposition and plural). 'we'll have a free time' is incorrect for habitual present; use 'when we have free time'. Use 'on weekends' not 'in weekend'. 'in this place' -> 'to this place' and 'do some activity' -> 'do activities'. 'make a dinner' -> 'make dinner'. Added 'enjoy ourselves' to be idiomatic.

× Yes, of course, but when our city we have only two parks in the middle of the city and the one the last one and the one is in the very far from my house, when we have a lot of parks, we can go to visit another place.

✓ Yes, of course, but in our city we have only two parks: one in the middle of the city and the other very far from my house. If we had more parks, we could visit other places.

The original sentence has poor word order and tense/confusion. Use 'in our city' not 'when our city'. Clarify 'one in the middle... the other very far' and use conditional 'If we had more parks, we could' to express hypothetical desire. Simplified wording improves clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I want to travel to, uh, uh, European country and visit the, uh, parks in there because I listen, this is very nice and wonderful.

✓ Yes, I want to travel to a European country and visit the parks there because I have heard they are very nice and wonderful.

Use the article 'a' before 'European country'. 'parks in there' should be 'parks there'. 'I listen' is incorrect; use 'I have heard' or 'I heard' to report information. Adjusted verb tense and phrasing to be natural and grammatical.