Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 구조적 문제와 문법 실수가 눈에 띕니다. 우선 주제문을 명확히 하고, 시제와 관사 사용을 고쳐야 합니다. 또한 문장을 간결하게 유지하고 한두 개의 구체적 세부사항(무엇을 했는지, 얼마나 자주 갔는지)을 덧붙이면 자연스러워집니다. 예: 주어+과거 시제 사용, 'a/ the' 관사, 동사 형태 수정. 예문을 연습하여 발화 길이를 3문장 이내로 유지하세요.

Example: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. There was a large park called Buckshore Park near my home, and I visited it almost every weekend. I used to play football and ride my bike there with friends.

Suggestion: 불완전한 문장과 중복 표현(‘like I enjoy’, ‘because.’)을 피해야 합니다. 목적(휴식, 일 등)을 명확한 이유와 함께 간단히 제시하세요. 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하고 시제를 일관되게 유지하세요. 예: 주제문 → 이유 → 구체적 상황(언제/무엇을 하는지).

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. When I need to relax or work away from home, I often go to a nearby park because the fresh air helps me concentrate. For example, I sometimes read or answer emails on a bench there.

Suggestion: 부정문을 말할 때는 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고 지명이나 명칭을 정확히 말하세요. 또한 반복을 줄이고 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 'There is no need for more parks'처럼 문법적으로 완전한 문장을 쓰고, 예시 공원들을 자연스럽게 나열하세요.

Example: I don't think we need more parks in my city. Seoul already has many well-known parks, such as Namsan Park, Luxor Park and Buckshore Park, which provide enough green space for residents.

Suggestion: 문장을 끝까지 완성하고 장소 이름과 이유를 정확히 표현하세요. 또한 한두 개의 구체적 이유(특별한 볼거리, 활동)를 제시하면 좋습니다. 연결어(so, because, for example)를 적절히 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

Example: Yes, I'd like to visit Southwest Park in Songzhou in the future because it has many restaurants and cafés nearby. For example, I could spend the afternoon walking in the park and then try different local dishes at nearby eateries.

× Yes, I like going park as a child because near my home there is big park named Buckshore Park so I always going there.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because near my home there was a big park named Buckshore Park, so I always went there.

The student is talking about childhood (past), so verbs should be in the past tense: like -> liked, is -> was, always going -> always went. Also countable nouns require articles and prepositions: 'going park' -> 'going to parks' or 'going to the park'; 'big park' needs an article 'a big park'. Use consistent past tense throughout the sentence and include necessary prepositions and articles. Suggestions: change present tense verbs to past, add 'to' after 'going', and add articles where needed.

× Yes, I still like going parking because. When I need to relax, I like I enjoy working in the park. Then I feel reducing stress so I like the park.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks. When I need to relax, I enjoy sitting in the park. It reduces my stress, so I like the park.

Use correct verb forms and prepositions: 'going parking' is incorrect; use 'going to parks' or 'going to the park'. Remove extra words: 'I like I enjoy' should be 'I enjoy'. 'Working in the park' is odd for relaxation; 'sitting in the park' or 'spending time in the park' fits better. 'Then I feel reducing stress' should be 'It reduces my stress' or 'I feel less stressed'. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× No, I think there are no need for more park in my city because in my city SO has Soul Soup and Luxor Park and Namsan Park. So there are already so many parks in Seoul.

✓ No, I don't think there is a need for more parks in my city because my city already has places like Soul Soup, Luxor Park, and Namsan Park. So there are already many parks in Seoul.

Negative structure and existential verb use are incorrect: 'there are no need' should be 'there is no need' or 'I don't think there is a need'. Countable noun plural: 'more park' -> 'more parks'. Use subject-verb agreement: 'my city already has' is clearer than 'in my city SO has'. Also avoid redundant 'so' and use 'many' rather than 'so many' for more neutral tone. Suggestions: use 'don't think there is a need', pluralize 'parks', and correct word order.

× In my opinion, I'd like to go Southwest Park in Songzhou because there are many restaurants and cafe so going park and eating meal in the.

✓ In my opinion, I'd like to go to Southwest Park in Songzhou because there are many restaurants and cafes, so I could go to the park and eat a meal there.

Missing prepositions and articles: 'go Southwest Park' -> 'go to Southwest Park'; 'restaurants and cafe' -> 'restaurants and cafes'; 'going park and eating meal in the' is ungrammatical—use 'go to the park and eat a meal there'. Use conditional/modal 'could' or 'would' to express desire for a future visit. Ensure pluralization of 'cafes' and include articles where required.