Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Speak with clearer grammar and correct word choice, use one topic sentence and up to two supporting sentences, avoid filler words (uh, so) and repetition, and use linking words to connect ideas. Be careful with tense and countable/uncountable forms (e.g., “there were a lot of spaces” → better: “there was a lot of open space” or “there were many play equipment”).

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. They had a lot of open space and good playground equipment, so I could run around and play freely. Because of that, I spent most of my afternoons there and have fond memories of that park.

Suggestion: Use correct subject–verb agreement and choose concise, natural phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid excessive hesitations and fix grammar (e.g., “parks has” → “parks have” or “the park has”).

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. They have plenty of open space where I can sit quietly or take a walk, and the calm, safe atmosphere helps me relax after a busy day.

Suggestion: Organize your response: give a clear direct answer, explain reasons with specific details, and avoid repetition. Use correct grammar for negatives (e.g., “there is no park near my house”), and replace vague phrases like “spend my life” with precise ones like “take a walk” or “relax outdoors.”

Example: Yes, I would. There is no park near my house, so I don’t have a convenient place to walk or relax outdoors. More local parks would make it easier for me and my neighbors to exercise and spend time outside.

Suggestion: Be precise and accurate about facts, and avoid irrelevant or incorrect details (e.g., Disneyland is not typically described as having “a lot of rice”). Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific reasons, using linking words to make it coherent. Mention concrete attractions or experiences you expect.

Example: Yes, I would love to visit Tokyo Disneyland in Japan. I have dreamed of going since childhood because I enjoy theme parks and would like to experience the rides, parades, and unique Japanese atmosphere there.

× Yes, I liked going to perks as a child because there has a lot of, they had a lot of space, so you can run around whenever you want and so and there has a good, uh, equipment.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because they had a lot of space, so you could run around whenever you wanted and there was good equipment.

Problems: incorrect word 'perks' (should be 'parks') and subject-verb agreement with 'they had' (correct) but 'there has' is incorrect for past tense; use 'there was'. Modal tense consistency: 'can' should be 'could' and 'you want' should be 'you wanted' to match past context. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary and keep verbs consistent in past tense: 'parks', 'they had', 'there was', 'could', 'wanted'.

× So, uh, I played with them and I spent most of the time there.

✓ So, I played there and spent most of my time there.

Redundancy and pronoun reference: 'played with them' is unclear (who is 'them'?) and repeating 'there' is redundant. Better to use 'played there' or specify 'played with friends'. Also 'most of the time' is natural as 'most of my time' in this context. Suggestion: clarify the object of 'played' or omit it if unnecessary.

× So yeah, I, I had a great memory in that park.

✓ So yeah, I had great memories of that park.

Use plural 'memories' for multiple recollections and change preposition 'in' to 'of' to indicate possession/association. Also drop the extra 'I'. Suggestion: use 'memories of' or 'a great memory of' depending on singular/plural intent.

× Yes, I still like going to parks now because, uh, the parks has a lot of, uh, the space.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because the parks have a lot of space.

'Parks' is plural so verb must be 'have' not 'has'. Also omit unnecessary 'the' before 'space' unless referring to specific space. Suggestion: match plural subject with plural verb: 'parks have'.

× So uh, I can spend my time on my own and I can sit anywhere.

✓ So I can spend time on my own and sit anywhere.

Grammatically acceptable but stylistically redundant to repeat 'I'. Keep present tense 'can' as question asked about now. Suggestion: combine phrases to be more natural: 'I can spend time on my own and sit anywhere.'

× So yeah, it is like quite safe place and uh, so which gives me more relaxation after a busy day.

✓ So yeah, it is quite a safe place, which gives me more relaxation after a busy day.

Missing article 'a' before 'safe place'. Remove filler 'like' and fix clause connection: 'which gives me...' should directly follow the noun it modifies. Suggestion: use 'a safe place' and attach the relative clause correctly.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there has no park nearby my house.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there is no park near my house.

'There has no' is incorrect. Use 'there is no' for singular present. Also 'nearby my house' is nonstandard; use 'near my house'. Suggestion: use 'there is no' and 'near'.

× So like I couldn't get enough space to spend my life, spend my life.

✓ So I can't find enough space to spend my time.

Tense and word choice: context talks about current situation so use present 'can't' not past 'couldn't'. 'Spend my life' is wrong; use 'spend my time' or 'go for a walk'. Also repetition removed. Suggestion: choose appropriate verb and noun: 'find enough space to spend my time' or 'to go for a walk'.

× So this is the like quite difficult for me for a walk because there has no space nearby me.

✓ So it is quite difficult for me to go for a walk because there is no space near me.

Use 'there is no' not 'there has no'. Change awkward phrasing 'the like quite difficult for me for a walk' to 'quite difficult for me to go for a walk'. Use 'near me' not 'nearby me'. Suggestion: simplify and use correct 'there is' construction.

× Yes, I would like to go Disneyland which is in Japan so there has a lot of rice there.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to Disneyland, which is in Japan, so there is a lot to see there.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go'. 'There has a lot of rice there' is incorrect: 'there is' not 'there has', and likely 'a lot of rice' is a misunderstanding; more natural is 'a lot to see'. If 'rice' intended, correct to 'there is a lot of rice'. Suggestion: use 'go to', 'there is', and be precise about meaning.

× So I just want to explore. I have always wanted to visit the the Disneyland since my childhood because it was my dream and so that's why I want to explore this theme park.

✓ I just want to explore it. I have always wanted to visit Disneyland since my childhood because it was my dream, so that's why I want to explore this theme park.

Remove duplicate 'the the'. Use 'visit Disneyland' (no 'the' needed for proper name) and 'since my childhood' is fine. Add object 'it' after 'explore'. Suggestion: avoid duplicate words, use proper articles with place names, and include direct object when needed.