Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar (tense and article use), simplify sentence structure, and add one specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then one supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition and filled pauses.

Example: Yes. I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they helped me relax. For example, I often played on the swings and climbed trees with my friends, which made those afternoons very fun and memorable.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and articles, and be specific about what parks offer. Give a concise topic sentence then one or two clear supporting details connected with a linking word like 'because' or 'for example'. Remove redundant phrases.

Example: Yes, I still like going to parks because they help me relax after a busy day. For example, I enjoy walking on quiet paths and sitting by ponds where I can read or think peacefully.

Suggestion: Clarify the main idea and support it with one clear reason and an example. Use correct noun forms and smoother linking words such as 'because' and 'for instance'. Avoid vague expressions like 'organic thing' or repeating words.

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they improve the quality of life and the appearance of the neighbourhood. For instance, new parks would give families safe places to exercise and would make the city look greener and more attractive to visitors.

Suggestion: Be specific and accurate about the place, use correct prepositions and simpler phrasing. Begin with a direct answer, then give one specific detail about why you want to visit, using a linking word like 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid idioms that are unclear (e.g. 'not miss the boat').

Example: Yes. I want to visit a children’s park in Haryana because it has small animal exhibits and many play areas for kids. For example, I would like to see the petting zoo and the colourful playground equipment that my younger cousins enjoy.

× I would like to go park in as child because that feel me relax and uh area where we can play and with the cathedral games that area will feel me relaxation.

✓ I liked going to parks as a child because they made me feel relaxed and were places where we could play; with the carnival games the area felt very relaxing.

The original sentence uses incorrect verb forms and noun forms. 'Would like to go park in as child' should be past habitual 'liked going to parks as a child' (use gerund after 'liked' and plural 'parks'). 'That feel me relax' should be 'they made me feel relaxed' (past tense and correct object structure). Use 'were places where we could play' instead of incorrect structure. 'Cathedral games' seems intended as 'carnival games' or similar; ensure correct noun. Recommend practicing gerund use (verb+ing) for activities and using past simple for past habitual actions.

× Yes, I will. Yes, I will like to go park now because that feel relaxation and that area will provide us very things and there will no any know any crowd area that is park.

✓ Yes, I do. Yes, I would like to go to a park now because it makes me feel relaxed and the area provides many things; there are usually no crowds in that park.

The speaker misused modal 'will' when expressing current preference; use 'do' or 'would like' for present preference. 'Go park' needs preposition 'to a park'. 'That feel relaxation' should be 'it makes me feel relaxed' (present simple for habitual effect). 'Will provide us very things' is ungrammatical; use 'provides many things'. 'There will no any know any crowd area' should be 'there are usually no crowds'—use correct negative structure and plural 'crowds'. Suggest practicing proper modal choices ('will' for future, 'do' for present habits, 'would like' for polite wishes) and prepositions.

× I would like to see more park in my city because that is a beautiful thing and that develop our infrastructure and any people can judge, judge our city with the infrastructure and their park that is a organic thing.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city because that would be a beautiful thing and would develop our infrastructure, and people can judge our city by its infrastructure and parks; parks are an organic part of a city.

The sentence uses singular 'park' where plural 'parks' is needed when referring generally. 'That develop' needs conditional/modal 'would develop' to match 'would like'. 'Any people' is incorrect; use 'people'. 'Judge our city with the infrastructure' should be 'judge our city by its infrastructure'. 'Their park' is unclear; use 'parks' or 'its parks'. Recommend reviewing plural forms and subject-verb agreement in conditional statements.

× Yes, I would like to go and children park in Cathol Catholic state of Haryana that in that park there are many type of animals and there are many children are go to park. I would definitely not miss the boat to go at children park.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to the children's park in the Catholic area of Haryana. In that park there are many types of animals and many children go there. I would definitely not miss the chance to visit the children's park.

Multiple preposition and article errors: 'go and children park' should be 'go to the children's park'. 'Cathol Catholic' seems redundant—use 'Catholic area'. 'There are many type of animals' should be 'many types of animals' (plural). 'Many children are go to park' is incorrect; use 'many children go there' (present simple). 'Miss the boat to go at children park' is an idiom misuse and wrong preposition—use 'miss the chance to visit the children's park'. Suggest practicing correct prepositions ('go to', 'visit') and articles ('the', possessive with children's).