Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and avoid repetition and fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or a short memory to support it. Keep it to 1–3 sentences and use past tense when talking about childhood.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I especially remember playing on the swings and having picnics with my family every weekend, which made those visits very special.

Suggestion: Use smoother phrasing and avoid repeating words (e.g., “over there”). Begin with a direct statement, then add a specific reason and one brief detail. Use linking words like “because” or “so” appropriately.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because of the fresh greenery and calm atmosphere. For example, I often walk there to relax and read a book when I need a break.

Suggestion: Complete your idea and give a specific reason or example. Avoid vague phrases like “outing purposes.” State clearly why more parks would help and give one concrete benefit (health, community, children’s play). Keep it concise.

Example: Yes, I would. More parks would provide safe places for families and children to exercise and socialise, which would improve public health and community life.

Suggestion: Be concise and grammatical: use conditional and future forms correctly. State a clear plan and give a specific reason or example of a park you would like to visit. Reduce fillers and correct sentence structure.

Example: Yes. I hope to visit parks in England in the future because they are well maintained and very green; for instance, I would love to see Hyde Park in London and enjoy its lakes and walking paths.

× Yes, I do like to go to parks whenever in my childhood because, uh, in childhood everybody likes to go in the parks.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks during my childhood because everyone liked going to parks then.

The sentence mixes present tense ('do like') with a time reference to childhood, which requires past tense. Also 'whenever in my childhood' and 'in childhood' are unnatural; use 'during my childhood' or 'when I was a child'. 'Go in the parks' is incorrect preposition use; use 'going to parks'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent when referring to childhood events and use 'going to parks' with prepositions removed or corrected.

× Yes, I would say I like to go parks now because of the greenery over there.

✓ Yes, I would say I like to go to parks now because of the greenery there.

The phrase 'like to go parks' is missing the preposition 'to' before 'parks' (preposition error but within present-tense context). The sentence uses present tense correctly for current preference, but the extra adverb 'over there' is awkward; 'there' is sufficient. Suggestion: use 'like to go to parks' and keep present simple for habits.

× The atmosphere over there is so pleasant that I really enjoy.

✓ The atmosphere there is so pleasant that I really enjoy it.

The verb 'enjoy' requires an object; here the object is 'it' (the atmosphere). Also 'over there' is unnecessarily wordy; 'there' suffices. Place the object after the verb to complete the clause. Suggestion: when using 'enjoy', include what is enjoyed: 'enjoy it' or 'enjoy spending time there'.

× Yes, because parks are necessary for outing purposes and.

✓ Yes, because parks are necessary for outings.

The original ends with a trailing conjunction 'and' creating an incomplete sentence; this is a sentence structure error. 'Outing purposes' is awkward; use the noun 'outings'. Suggestion: remove the trailing 'and' and choose concise, natural nouns: 'necessary for outings' or 'necessary for recreational purposes'.

× Yes, I like to go to parks, but in Pakistan there is no that much pretty parks.

✓ Yes, I like to go to parks, but in Pakistan there are not many pretty parks.

This sentence has number agreement and quantifier issues: 'there is' with plural 'parks' is incorrect; use 'there are'. 'No that much pretty parks' is ungrammatical: use 'not many pretty parks'. Suggestion: use 'there are not many' or 'there aren't many' for plural nouns and place quantifiers ('many') before adjectives.

× So that umm maybe in the future I would go to like England.

✓ So maybe in the future I will go to England.

The modal 'would' is used incorrectly for a likely future plan; use 'will' or 'might' for future possibilities. 'Go to like England' contains filler 'like' which is informal and unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'will' for probable future or 'might/would like to' if expressing desire: 'I might go to England' or 'I would like to go to England'.

× So would there they're more pretty or pleasant parks there.

✓ So would there be more pretty or pleasant parks there?

The sentence mixes auxiliary word order and pronouns incorrectly. 'They're' (they are) is not appropriate in conditional/inversion; the intended question likely is 'Would there be more pretty or pleasant parks there?' Also word order should reflect question form. Suggestion: for speculative questions use 'Would there be...?' and avoid repeating 'there' at the end.

× So yeah.

✓ So yes.

'So yeah' is colloquial and fragments the response; as a short confirmatory closing 'So yes' or 'Yes' is more appropriate in formal testing contexts. Suggestion: avoid fillers and use clear, complete responses in tests.