Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문법과 표현을 더 정확하게 고치고, 중복되는 단어(uh, one of one of)와 어색한 표현(refreshful)을 제거하세요. 주제문으로 바로 시작하고, 세부사항은 연결어(For example, On weekends)를 사용해 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예: 주제가 ‘가족 활동’이면 활동 종류, 빈도, 감정까지 간결히 말하세요.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My family often rode bikes there and it was very relaxing. For example, every weekend we would visit a nearby park, cycle for an hour, and then have snacks together. Those outings were a regular and happy part of my childhood.

Suggestion: 답변이 짧고 비문이 있으니 문법을 바로잡고 이유를 논리적으로 연결하세요. ‘because’ 뒤에는 이유를 완성된 문장으로 연결하고, 연결어(However, Instead)를 사용해 대비를 보여 주세요. 구체적인 예시나 대안도 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

Example: Not really. I don’t enjoy walking long distances, so I rarely go to parks because it takes too much energy and time. However, I sometimes visit small green spaces near my home when I need a short break.

Suggestion: 아이디어는 좋지만 단어 선택(‘refreshments’은 부적절)과 문장 연결이 어색합니다. ‘green spaces’나 ‘access to nature’ 같은 적절한 어휘 사용과 because로 이유를 명확히 제시하세요. 문장을 2~3문장으로 간결히 다듬으세요.

Example: Yes, I would. More parks would provide greater access to green spaces and help people relax. Because urban areas often lack nature, having additional parks would improve residents’ well-being and air quality.

Suggestion: ‘Central Park’는 고유명사이므로 정확하게 말하고 반복을 줄이세요. 이유를 구체적으로(예: 명소, 활동, 기대감) 설명하고 연결어(if, because, for example)를 사용해 문장을 명확히 하세요.

Example: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York. I’ve heard it’s a huge and iconic park where people relax, have picnics, and see cultural landmarks. If I get the chance, I’d like to walk around the park, visit the lake, and enjoy a picnic there.

× Yes, when I was younger, uh, our family enjoyed uh, going to park and riding bikes.

✓ Yes, when I was younger, our family enjoyed going to the park and riding bikes.

The noun 'park' requires the definite article 'the' in this context; also 'going to the park' is the correct collocation. Use of -ing form 'going' is correct; add 'the' before 'park' to specify the place. (원문 설명은 영어로 제공됨.)

× It was very refreshful and we can be relaxed.

✓ It was very refreshing and we could relax.

The adjective 'refreshful' is not a standard English word; use the adjective 'refreshing' to describe something that makes you feel refreshed. Also, 'we can be relaxed' is unnatural here—use the past ability 'we could relax' to match past tense 'was'. (원문 설명은 영어로 제공됨.)

× So it was our one of one of our routines.

✓ So it was one of our routines.

The phrase 'our one of one of our routines' is redundant and ungrammatical. The correct English expression is 'one of our routines' to indicate it was among several routines. (원문 설명은 영어로 제공됨.)

× On weekends we went to Hong Kong and enjoyed eating ramen.

✓ On weekends we went to Hong Kong and enjoyed eating ramen.

This sentence is acceptable; no preposition error. 'On weekends' and 'went to Hong Kong' are correct. No change necessary. (원문 설명은 영어로 제공됨.)

× Not really actually. I don't enjoy walking so I don't like going to park because.

✓ Not really, actually. I don't enjoy walking, so I don't like going to the park.

The present tense 'don't enjoy' is fine, but 'going to park' needs the article 'the'. Also the sentence ended with 'because.' which is incomplete; remove the trailing 'because' or complete the clause. Here we remove it and add a comma before 'so'. (원문 설명은 영어로 제공됨.)

× It was use my energy and it is very time consuming.

✓ It uses my energy and is very time-consuming.

Mix of tenses and incorrect verb form: 'was use' is ungrammatical. Present tense consistent with 'I don't like' should be 'it uses my energy'. 'Time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective. (원문 설명은 영어로 제공됨.)

× Uh, actually I don't feel the necessary of going to park.

✓ Uh, actually I don't feel it is necessary to go to the park.

'Feel the necessary' is incorrect; use 'feel it is necessary' or 'feel the need'. Also 'going to park' needs 'the park'. Use infinitive 'to go' after 'necessary'. (원문 설명은 영어로 제공됨.)

× Yes, that's it.

✓ Yes, that's it.

This sentence is fine as a short response; no grammatical correction needed. (원문 설명은 영어로 제공됨.)

× Yes, I think so. Uh, parks gave us more refreshments and greenery, umm, in cities, uh, there are no, there are a few chances to watch greenery and feel the nature.

✓ Yes, I think so. Parks give us more refreshment and greenery. In cities there are few opportunities to see greenery and experience nature.

Tense consistency: use present 'give' when talking generally. 'Refreshments' (usually food) is incorrect; use 'refreshment' or 'a refreshing atmosphere'. 'There are no, there are a few chances' is contradictory and awkward; use 'there are few opportunities'. 'Watch greenery' is unnatural; use 'see greenery'. 'Feel the nature' should be 'experience nature'. (원문 설명은 영어로 제공됨.)

× So I think. That the more parts are there, the better we can feel.

✓ So I think that the more parks there are, the better we will feel.

Split sentence fragments should be combined. 'The more parts are there' has word order errors and 'parts' should be 'parks'. Also use 'the better we will feel' for clarity and correct word order: 'the more X there are, the better Y'. (원문 설명은 영어로 제공됨.)

× Yes, I want to go to the central parks in the USA because I've I have heard about the name of the parks park and.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Central Park in the USA because I have heard about it.

Redundant repetition 'I've I have' and 'parks park' should be removed. 'Central Park' is a proper noun and typically singular in New York City; use 'Central Park' rather than 'the central parks'. Use 'heard about it' to refer back to the park. (원문 설명은 영어로 제공됨.)

× I know that the park is the biggest one in the USA and many people go to there go there when they are in day off and if I have the chance I would go to the Central Park.

✓ I know that the park is one of the biggest in the USA and many people go there on their days off, and if I have the chance I would go to Central Park.

'The biggest one' is likely inaccurate; use 'one of the biggest' if unsure. 'Go to there' is wrong; use 'go there'. 'When they are in day off' should be 'on their days off'. Also drop 'the' before 'Central Park' when using the proper name like 'go to Central Park'. (원문 설명은 영어로 제공됨.)