Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Reduce repetition and fix tense/person errors (e.g. "friends" and "friend"). Use linking words like "and" or "because" to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played there with my friends because we could run around and play games, and I enjoyed being outdoors for fresh air and exercise.

Suggestion: Give a clearer topic sentence and correct phrasing. Use natural collocations ("relaxing in nature", "go with my little brother") and avoid vague phrases like "it changed a lot." Add one specific example of an activity and use a linking word to show contrast or addition.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Now I usually go for walks and to relax in nature, and I also sometimes take my little brother so we can play on the swings or feed the ducks.

Suggestion: Answer directly and organize reasons clearly. Start with a short topic sentence (Yes/No), then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words like "because" and "for example." Avoid awkward phrasing like "for even adults."

Example: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide green space for children and wildlife. For example, more parks would give families places to relax and improve air quality in busy areas.

Suggestion: Be more precise and grammatically correct. Use a clear topic sentence and give one specific example with correct country names and verb forms. Avoid vague phrases like "not really" followed by contradictory details; instead say "I don't have a specific local park, but..." Use linking words like "however" or "for example."

Example: I don't have a specific local park in mind, however I have been interested in visiting some famous large parks abroad. For example, I would like to visit Japan's Ueno Park and Germany's Englischer Garten because they are large, scenic and rich in cultural sites.

× As a child I was very friendly and outgoing social person so I love playing with my friend, friends in the park and I always want to go outside when I'm in home.

✓ As a child, I was a very friendly and outgoing person, so I loved playing with my friends in the park, and I always wanted to go outside when I was at home.

Errors: 'outgoing social person' is redundant (adjective order and redundancy) and needs an article 'a'; 'love' and 'want' should be past tense to match 'As a child' (tense consistency); 'friend, friends' should be plural 'friends'; 'when I'm in home' is incorrect phrase and should be 'when I was at home'. Suggestion: use correct article before singular countable nouns, keep adjectives in natural order without redundancy, make verb tenses consistent with time frame, use 'at home' for location and pluralize 'friends' when referring to multiple people.

× It changed a lot. I like going to parks for walking and relaxing with the nature, but I also go with my little brother, which I enjoy to play with him.

✓ It has changed a lot. I like going to parks to walk and relax with nature, and I also go with my little brother, whom I enjoy playing with.

Errors: 'It changed a lot' needs present perfect 'has changed' to link past to present; 'for walking and relaxing with the nature' is unidiomatic: use 'to walk and relax with nature' or 'to walk and relax in nature'; 'which I enjoy to play with him' has wrong relative pronoun and verb pattern: use 'whom I enjoy playing with' (or 'with whom I enjoy playing'). Suggestion: use present perfect for recent changes affecting present, use infinitive for purpose ('to walk'), use natural collocations ('in/with nature'), and correct relative pronoun and gerund after 'enjoy'.

× Would you like to see more parks in your city?

✓ Would you like to see more parks in your city?

No grammatical error detected that matches the provided problem list. Sentence is correct as written. Suggestion: no change needed.

× We have a lot of parks, but I would prefer more parks because nature is important for everyone, for children, for animals, for even adults need them for relaxing, not just to play.

✓ We have a lot of parks, but I would prefer more because nature is important for everyone — children, animals, and even adults need parks for relaxing, not just for playing.

Errors: 'prefer more parks' is acceptable but repetitive; 'for even adults need them' is ungrammatical: word order and structure incorrect. 'For relaxing' should be 'for relaxing' or better 'to relax'; parallelism needed ('children, animals, and even adults'). Suggestion: avoid repetition, use parallel lists, place verbs correctly, and use 'to' or gerund consistently ('for relaxing' vs 'for playing').

× Not really, but I searched the most largest parks recently which I wanted to go a lot. Some of them was in Germany and Japan if I'm not wrong. I wanted to visit.

✓ Not really, but I searched for the largest parks recently that I wanted to visit. Some of them were in Germany and Japan, if I'm not wrong.

Errors: 'searched the most largest parks' has double superlative and wrong article/word order; use 'the largest' or 'most large' (but correct is 'largest'), and include 'for' after 'searched'. 'which I wanted to go a lot' is awkward; use 'that I wanted to visit'. 'Some of them was' has subject-verb agreement error; use 'were' for plural 'some of them'. Suggestion: use correct superlative ('the largest'), include preposition 'for' with 'search', use 'visit' rather than 'go' for places, and ensure subject-verb agreement.