Parks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct pronouns and verb forms, and give one specific detail. Use linking words if adding detail.

Example: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to go every evening with my father because he was a policeman and needed to exercise. I enjoyed jogging with him along the park track, and it became our regular bonding time.

Suggestion: Provide a clear direct answer, correct word choice, and add a specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid vague terms like "landing"; choose precise vocabulary.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially when friends invite me. Because outdoor exercise is popular among young people, I sometimes join a running club there, which is fun and helps me stay fit.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct sentence structure. State your opinion clearly and support it with a specific reason or example. Use linking words (e.g., "however", "because") and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles).

Example: I don't think we need many more parks in my city. Bangkok already has at least one park in every district, so most people have easy access to green spaces. However, it would be helpful to improve facilities in some existing parks.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and elaborate with specific details about why you want to visit (views, features, activities). Use appropriate vocabulary and correct informal words (e.g., "fantastic" not split). Keep it concise and natural.

Example: Yes, I would love to visit the Royal Botanic Gardens in Melbourne because it has beautiful landscapes and a peaceful atmosphere. I hope to see the native plants and enjoy scenic walks there at least once in my life.

× I went to the park every evening with my dad because my dad was policeman so she so he has to practice his training to make his body stronger.

✓ I went to the park every evening with my dad because my dad was a policeman so he had to do his training to make his body stronger.

Errors: incorrect pronoun 'she' used instead of 'he' and incorrect verb tense/auxiliary 'has to practice' in context of past. Also missing article before 'policeman'. Suggestion: Use 'he' for male subject, include the indefinite article 'a policeman', and match past tense by using 'had to' and a simple verb 'do his training'.

× So I will I I enjoy go with my dad to running channel.

✓ So I enjoyed going with my dad to the running track.

Errors: incorrect future/modal 'will' and repeated filler 'I I', wrong verb form 'enjoy go', and wrong noun 'running channel'. Suggestion: Use past tense 'enjoyed' to match 'went' earlier, use gerund 'going' after 'enjoy', and use appropriate noun 'running track'.

× Yes, I go to park sometimes when my friends ask me to go with.

✓ Yes, I go to the park sometimes when my friends ask me to go with them.

Errors: missing definite article before 'park' and missing object pronoun after 'with'. Suggestion: Use 'the park' for a specific/common place and include 'them' to complete 'go with'.

× Nowadays, landing is the popular activity among young people, so it's kind of entertainment.

✓ Nowadays, jogging is a popular activity among young people, so it's a kind of entertainment.

Errors: incorrect word 'landing' likely meant 'jogging', and missing article 'a' before 'popular' and 'a kind'. Suggestion: Use correct verb-noun 'jogging' and include articles: 'a popular activity' and 'a kind of entertainment'.

× So I enjoy running club sometimes.

✓ So I sometimes enjoy going to a running club.

Errors: word order and missing preposition/article. 'Enjoy' should be followed by a gerund phrase 'going to a running club'; place adverb 'sometimes' where it fits naturally. Suggestion: Use 'going to a running club' and position 'sometimes' before verb.

× Even many people say that government should provide more space for park, but in my opinion I think is enough.

✓ Even though many people say that the government should provide more space for parks, in my opinion I think it is enough.

Errors: incorrect conjunction 'Even many people' should be 'Even though many people', missing definite article 'the' before 'government', missing plural for 'parks', and missing subject 'it' before 'is enough'. Suggestion: Use 'Even though' to introduce contrast, include articles and correct pluralization and include the subject 'it'.

× Already in Bangkok have park in every district which people can go easily and.

✓ Already in Bangkok there are parks in every district that people can visit easily.

Errors: incorrect word order and missing dummy 'there' for existence, singular/plural mismatch 'park' should be 'parks', and incomplete sentence ending 'and'. Suggestion: Use 'there are parks' for existence, pluralize 'parks', and rephrase 'that people can visit easily' to complete the thought.

× I saw the park in Melbourne, Australia with nice view and fans, tastic atmosphere so I wanna go there once in a lifetime.

✓ I saw a park in Melbourne, Australia with a nice view and fantastic atmosphere, so I want to go there once in my lifetime.

Errors: missing articles ('a park', 'a nice view'), split/typo 'fans, tastic' should be 'fantastic', informal 'wanna' should be 'want to', and awkward phrase 'once in a lifetime' modified to 'once in my lifetime' fits intention. Suggestion: Use articles where needed, correct spelling to 'fantastic', and use formal 'want to'.