Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và trật tự từ; nói câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh từ thừa và sửa lỗi động từ/cấu trúc. Nên dùng 2–3 câu: một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, một câu mở rộng với ví dụ cụ thể. Ví dụ sửa lỗi: ‘I really like taking pictures of different views’ và thay “like” thừa bằng danh sách rõ ràng (e.g. beaches, mountains and rural areas).

Example: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph beaches and mountains because their colours and shapes change with the light.

Suggestion: Sửa từ vựng bị sai và cấu trúc câu; tránh lặp từ; dùng linking words để liên kết lý do. Nên nói một câu chủ đề rồi nêu 1–2 lí do cụ thể và minh họa. Thay các từ sai như “science” bằng “scenery”, “pieces and quiet weakness” bằng “peace and quiet”.

Example: I prefer rural views because the scenery is more peaceful and natural. For instance, I like the quiet fields and rolling hills which help me relax and take better photos.

Suggestion: Làm rõ ý chính và đưa ví dụ chính xác; tránh lỗi từ (ví dụ ‘a Ventile’ không rõ). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu lý do và minh họa bằng ví dụ cụ thể (tên địa điểm đúng).

Example: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new landscapes and cultures to discover. For example, I would love to visit Banff National Park in Canada to see its turquoise lakes and dramatic mountain scenery.

× Yes I do. I am really like taking pictures of different views because I feel it's a very interesting like beach, mountain or rural.

✓ Yes, I do. I really like taking pictures of different views because I find them very interesting, such as beaches, mountains, or rural scenes.

The student used 'I am really like' which wrongly combines be + verb; correct form is 'I really like' (adverb placement and verb choice). 'I feel it's a very interesting like beach, mountain or rural' is awkward: 'feel' is not the best verb here and 'interesting' should describe 'them' (the views). Also nouns need plural forms and proper nouns: 'beach, mountain or rural' should be 'beaches, mountains, or rural scenes' or similar. Suggestion: use 'I really like' and 'I find them very interesting, such as beaches, mountains, or rural scenes.'

× I prefer views in rural areas because the the science is very beautiful beside it bring pieces and quiet weakness. I am really into it.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the scenery is very beautiful, and it brings peace and quiet. I am really into it.

Several word-choice and adjective/adverb errors: 'the the science' is a typo and should be 'the scenery'. 'Beside it bring pieces and quiet weakness' is incorrect: 'beside' wrong preposition, 'bring' should be 'it brings' (subject-verb), 'pieces' should be 'peace', and 'quiet weakness' should be 'quiet' or 'peace and quiet'. Suggestion: say 'the scenery is very beautiful, and it brings peace and quiet.'

× I prefer views in other countries because it brings novelty with me, like a Ventile and Banff National Park.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because they bring novelty to me, for example Vintal and Banff National Park.

Pronoun and noun form issues: 'it brings' should be 'they bring' to agree with 'views' (plural). 'Novelty with me' is unnatural; better 'novelty to me' or 'a sense of novelty.' Also 'a Ventile' likely a mispronunciation or misspelling—assume intended place name (here 'Vintal' used as placeholder) and drop the article 'a' before proper nouns. Suggestion: use 'they bring novelty to me, for example Vintal and Banff National Park.'