Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct small errors. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct word choice (e.g., "means" not "mean"; "surroundings" plural), and avoid redundancy. Add one specific detail about what kinds of views you prefer and why, using a linking word to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I do. I love photographing my surroundings because it helps me preserve memories. For example, I especially enjoy sunset views by the river, which I often hang on my wall or include in my journal to remind me of calm evenings.

Suggestion: Make the response more direct and fix word choice and cohesion. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two concise, specific supporting details linked logically (use linking words like "because" and "for example"). Replace vague words like "sensory" with precise terms (e.g., "atmosphere" or "ambience").

Example: I prefer rural views because the atmosphere is calmer and less noisy than the city. For example, walking among open fields and quiet lanes feels relaxing and refreshing, whereas crowded urban streets often feel stressful.

Suggestion: Answer directly and correct grammar and word choice. Use singular/plural consistently ("country"), correct tense and agreement ("exposes"), and prefer specific examples. Start with a clear statement of your balanced view, then contrast with a specific reason and an example using linking words like "however" or "on the other hand".

Example: I enjoy views both at home and abroad. At home, familiar landscapes and local festivals feel comforting; however, traveling exposes me to new cultures and scenery, such as mountain villages or coastal towns, which broaden my perspective.

× I love taking pictures of my surrounding.

✓ I love taking pictures of my surroundings.

The noun 'surrounding' as used here should be plural 'surroundings' to refer to the area around someone. Use the plural form when talking about the general environment. Suggestion: use 'surroundings' whenever referring to the area around you.

× It's a mean of preserving memories, especially when I get to hang them up on my walls or use them for my journals or even post them to share the beauty that I have witnessed with my people.

✓ It's a means of preserving memories, especially when I get to hang them up on my walls, use them in my journal, or even post them to share the beauty I have witnessed with my friends.

Several word-choice and adjective/adverb issues: 'mean' should be the noun 'means' meaning method; 'journals' should be singular 'journal' when referring to one's personal journal; 'post them to share the beauty that I have witnessed with my people' is awkward—'friends' is more natural than 'people' in this context. Also use parallel structure with the verbs 'hang', 'use', 'post'. Suggestion: use 'means', keep parallel verb forms, and choose appropriate nouns like 'journal' and 'friends'.

× Despite that, you can find beauty in both rural and urban areas.

✓ You can find beauty in both rural and urban areas.

The introductory phrase 'Despite that' is unnecessary and confusing in context because the question asked a preference; removing it makes the sentence natural. This is a present tense statement about general truth; simplify to 'You can find...' Suggestion: avoid inserting unrelated discourse markers.

× I prefer rural areas because the sensory is more peaceful and different from what I see every day in the city.

✓ I prefer rural areas because the scenery is more peaceful and different from what I see every day in the city.

The word 'sensory' (adjective) is incorrect; the correct noun is 'scenery' meaning views or landscape. Use 'scenery' to talk about visual surroundings. Suggestion: replace 'sensory' with 'scenery'.

× For example, I enjoy walking among fields and streets, which feels relaxing and refreshing compared with crowded streets.

✓ For example, I enjoy walking among fields and quiet lanes, which feels relaxing and refreshing compared with crowded streets.

The original mixes 'fields and streets' then compares with 'crowded streets', which is repetitive and creates awkward comparison. Replace the second 'streets' with 'quiet lanes' or similar to contrast with 'crowded streets'. Also maintain consistency: 'walking among fields and quiet lanes' is clearer. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same noun in contrast; choose contrasting words.

× I enjoy views both in my own countries and abroad.

✓ I enjoy views both in my own country and abroad.

Use singular 'country' when referring to the speaker's nation. 'My own countries' implies multiple countries belonging to the speaker, which is incorrect here. Suggestion: use 'my own country' to refer to one's homeland.

× But traveling a long way also exposed you to different sensory and perspective that are exciting to see.

✓ But traveling a long way also exposes you to different scenery and perspectives that are exciting to see.

Tense and word-choice errors: 'exposed' is past tense but the general statement needs present simple 'exposes'. 'Sensory' is incorrect; use 'scenery'. 'Perspective' should be plural 'perspectives' to match 'different'. Suggestion: use present simple for general truths ('exposes'), correct nouns ('scenery'), and pluralize when referring to multiple items ('perspectives').