Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm, yeah, like), correct grammar (e.g., 'remind me of'), and keep within 2–4 sentences. Add one specific example of a memorable photo to make the answer more vivid.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of scenery because I like to look back at them after trips. For example, I took a sunset photo at Mount Takao last year that reminds me of a peaceful hike and the people I was with.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, reduce repetition, and use linking words for contrast (e.g., 'however') and a specific reason. Correct informal phrasing ('rural sceneries' → 'rural scenery'). Limit to 2–3 sentences with one clear supporting detail.

Example: I prefer rural scenery because, having grown up in Tokyo, I see skyscrapers every day. However, countryside views relax me and give a refreshing change, for example, when I visit a nearby farm I feel calmer and more connected to nature.

Suggestion: Answer directly and organize with a clear comparative structure. Use linking phrases ('for example', 'in contrast') correctly and use precise vocabulary ('beaches' instead of 'sea, oceans or something like that'). Provide one specific reason for each preference.

Example: It depends on the season. For example, in spring I prefer views in Japan because of the cherry blossoms, while in summer I prefer beaches in Australia because I enjoy swimming and warm, open coastlines.

× Then that picture is umm remind, remind me wha what I did or what I enjoyed and that was quite that is.

✓ Then that picture reminds me of what I did or what I enjoyed, and it really does.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'is remind' and repeated fragments; unclear clause 'that was quite that is'. Correction: use third person singular 'reminds' to agree with singular subject 'that picture' (subject-verb agreement, ID 2 and 27) and add preposition 'of' after 'reminds' (preposition error ID 11). Also simplify the sentence to remove repetition and unclear phrasing. Suggestion: use 'reminds me of' and complete the second clause as 'and it really does' or a clearer comment.

× I generally prefer to see like rural sceneries because I'm from kinda city, uh, I'm from Tokyo, so I really, I'm really used to seeing tall buildings or something like that.

✓ I generally prefer rural scenery because I am from a big city; I'm from Tokyo, so I am used to seeing tall buildings.

Errors: 'see like rural sceneries' is ungrammatical—use 'prefer rural scenery' or 'rural scenes' (adjective/noun choice ID 13). 'kinda city' is informal and incorrect; use 'a big city' (article error and word choice ID 22 and 13). Repetition 'I really, I'm really' is redundant (sentence structure ID 26). Also use full forms 'I am' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'rural scenery' or 'rural scenes' and include an article 'a big city.'

× But instead when I see countryside views, the views umm, make me refreshed.

✓ But when I see countryside views, they make me feel refreshed.

Errors: 'make me refreshed' is unnatural; use 'make me feel refreshed' or 'refresh me' (verb + adjective usage ID 13 and 8). Also 'But instead' is redundant; simply 'But' or 'Instead' should be used (conjunction usage ID 16). Replace 'the views' with pronoun 'they' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: use 'they make me feel refreshed' or 'they refresh me.'

× For example, As for spring, since I really love seeing cherry blossoms, I prefer Japan.

✓ For example, in spring, since I really love seeing cherry blossoms, I prefer Japan.

Errors: 'As for spring' is awkward here; use 'in spring' (preposition use ID 11). Capitalization 'As' mid-sentence is unnecessary (sentence structure ID 26). The rest is acceptable. Suggestion: use 'in spring' to indicate season.

× But uh, As for summer, I prefer Australian sea, oceans or something like that.

✓ But in summer, I prefer the seas or oceans in Australia, or something like that.

Errors: 'As for summer' should be 'in summer' (preposition use ID 11). 'Australian sea, oceans' is ungrammatical and needs an article and correct noun form; use 'the seas or oceans in Australia' or 'Australian seas' (article and pluralization ID 22 and 1). Suggestion: say 'I prefer the seas or oceans in Australia' or 'I prefer Australian beaches and oceans.'