Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.”), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g. “For example” or “because”). Avoid unnecessary phrases like “This is absolutely a good question” and grammatical errors (use present tense consistently: “I do like” or “I like”).

Example: Yes, I like taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph the sky when it turns pink and cloudy because the colours are dramatic and unusual, and those shots help me preserve memories of special moments.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first, then support it with a clear reason and a brief example. Avoid self-correction and repetition. Use linking words (e.g. “however,” “because,” “for example”) and correct small errors (say “depends on the view” not “depends how the view”). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: It depends on the view; I don't have a fixed preference. For example, I enjoy city skylines at night because of the lights, but I also love peaceful rural landscapes when I want quiet and fresh air.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Say “I prefer views in my own country” and then give specific reasons with varied vocabulary (e.g. “scenery,” “landscapes,” “coastlines”) rather than repeating “unique” and “beautiful.” Fix grammar: “prefer X to Y,” “breathtaking” spelled correctly. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer views in my own country to those abroad because the landscapes—such as its dramatic coastlines and lush forests—are distinctive and varied. For instance, I love the mountain valleys near my hometown because their colours and light change throughout the year.

× This is absolutely a good question and I always take pictures of different views.

✓ This is an absolutely good question, and I always take pictures of different views.

The sentence needs the adverb 'absolutely' to modify the adjective 'good' and a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' to join two independent clauses. Also keep article usage as is because 'different views' is correct. Suggestion: Place a comma before 'and' when joining two complete sentences and ensure adverbs immediately precede the adjectives they modify.

× For example, I like to take pictures of sky when it's really cloudy and pinkish sky.

✓ For example, I like to take pictures of the sky when it is really cloudy and pinkish.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'sky' because we refer to the general sky. Remove the repeated word 'sky' at the end to avoid redundancy and use 'it is' instead of contraction only if desired; both are acceptable. Suggestion: Use 'the sky' and avoid repeating nouns.

× It's so different and unique.

✓ It looks so different and unique.

'It' alone is vague; adding a verb like 'looks' makes the sentence complete and clearer. Suggestion: Include a linking verb to describe appearance or quality.

× So I did like to collect memories for.

✓ So I like to collect memories.

The past auxiliary 'did' is unnecessary here and 'for' at the end is incomplete and incorrect. Use the simple present 'I like' to match the previous statement about habitual action. Suggestion: Use present tense for habitual preferences and avoid dangling prepositions.

× I did, I prefer it depends on my mood.

✓ I did — it depends on my mood.

The phrase 'I did' is incorrect here; the student intended to agree briefly, but this is confusing. Use 'it depends on my mood' as the main clause. Also add a dash or comma to separate the agreement. Suggestion: Use concise agreement phrases like 'I do' or omit them; keep the main clause in simple present.

× No, not actually mood.

✓ No, not exactly my mood.

'Actually mood' is ungrammatical. Use 'exactly' to modify and include a possessive 'my' if referring to mood. Suggestion: Use correct modifiers and include pronouns when needed.

× It depends how the view is.

✓ It depends on what the view is like.

Standard English requires 'depend on' and the phrase 'what the view is like' to describe appearance. Suggestion: Use 'depend on' + noun clause or 'depends on how...' with correct word order.

× And it can be any areas, it doesn't matter.

✓ And it can be any area; it doesn't matter.

Use the singular 'area' after 'any' when referring to a nonspecific location in general, or use 'any areas' with plural context. Also replace comma with semicolon or conjunction to join independent clauses. Suggestion: Match number and use proper punctuation between independent clauses.

× So as long as it's beautiful and unique and breathtaking video view.

✓ So as long as it is a beautiful, unique, and breathtaking view.

'Video view' is incorrect and redundant; likely meant 'view'. Use articles 'a' and commas to separate adjectives in correct order. Suggestion: Use a single noun 'view' and list adjectives with commas.

× I personally prefer in my own country first than other country.

✓ I personally prefer my own country to other countries.

The verb 'prefer' takes the structure 'prefer A to B' or 'prefer A over B'. Do not use 'prefer in'. Also use plural 'countries' for general comparison. Suggestion: Use 'prefer X to Y' and pluralize the compared group when general.

× My country is really beautiful and it has really unique, breath breathtaking views.

✓ My country is really beautiful, and it has really unique, breathtaking views.

Correct 'breath breathtaking' to 'breathtaking' and use a comma between coordinate clauses. Place adjectives correctly and separate coordinate adjectives with a comma. Suggestion: Proofread for duplicated fragments and use commas for coordinate adjectives.

× Like the nature is really unique and really beautiful which is unbelievable.

✓ For example, the nature here is truly unique and very beautiful, which is unbelievable.

Start the sentence more formally ('For example') instead of 'Like' as a filler. Use adverbs 'truly' and 'very' rather than repeating 'really'. Add a comma before 'which'. Suggestion: Avoid starting sentences with 'Like' in formal speech and vary adverbs to sound natural.