Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is natural and enthusiastic, but it is slightly redundant and a bit long. To improve, keep it within 3–4 concise sentences: start with a clear topic sentence, give one specific supporting detail, and avoid repeating similar phrases (e.g., “every single moment” and “every details”). Use a linking phrase to connect the idea and one concrete example or result.

Example: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. For example, I visited a park last week and captured the lake and flower beds because their contrast of colours looked beautiful. I often use these photos to remember places or share them with friends.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons and an example, but it is somewhat repetitive and the last sentence is slightly awkward. Improve coherence by using linking words (e.g., “however,” “for example”) correctly and by making the example concise and directly connected to your preference. Limit to 3–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “atmosphere” instead of “ambience” if misused).

Example: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the lively atmosphere and striking architecture. For example, the city parks and skyscrapers near my home provide interesting contrasts and photo opportunities. However, I also appreciate rural landscapes for their tranquillity when I want to relax.

Suggestion: Good clear response and honest explanation. To improve, make the structure tighter: state your main point, give a specific supporting detail about Olumo Rock (what you saw or liked), and finish with a brief concluding sentence. Avoid long introductory phrases like “Considering the fact that.”

Example: I prefer views in my own country because I haven’t travelled abroad yet. For instance, I visited Olumo Rock two weeks ago and enjoyed the panoramic city views from the top and the carved pathways below. I hope to see international scenery in the future, but I currently enjoy exploring local landmarks.

× I made sure to record every single moment and every details of the entire space.

✓ I made sure to record every single moment and every detail of the entire space.

'Every' requires a singular noun, so 'details' (plural) is incorrect after 'every'. Use the singular form 'detail'. Suggestion: use 'every detail' or 'all the details' depending on emphasis.

× I would say I prefer views in the urban areas because of the ambience of the areas.

✓ I would say I prefer views in urban areas because of the ambience of those areas.

The phrase 'in the urban areas' is awkward; when speaking generally, omit 'the'. Also 'of the areas' is repetitive; 'those areas' is clearer. Suggestion: drop the definite article for general statements and avoid repeating nouns.

× There are so many tall buildings to look at and very developed parks to also enjoy.

✓ There are so many tall buildings to look at and very well-developed parks to enjoy as well.

Original sentence is understandable but 'very developed parks' is unnatural; use 'well-developed parks'. Also move 'also' to 'as well' for natural word order. Suggestion: use adjectives like 'well-developed' and place adverbs in natural positions.

× For instance, I was at a resort last week in a very rural area this resort was built around.

✓ For instance, I was at a resort last week that was built around a very rural area.

The original contains a run-on and unclear relative clause. Use a relative clause ('that was built around') to link 'resort' and 'rural area' correctly. Suggestion: break into two sentences or use a relative clause for clarity.

× Considering the fact that I've never been abroad, I would say that I enjoy views in different areas in my home country.

✓ Considering the fact that I've never been abroad, I would say that I enjoy views in different areas of my home country.

Use the preposition 'of' with 'areas of my home country' rather than 'in'. This is a preposition choice that affects noun phrases; it fits present perfect context. Suggestion: use 'areas of my home country' for natural phrasing.

× I've been to different regions across the country and one view that I particularly enjoy has to be the Olumo Rock, which I visited about two weeks ago.

✓ I've been to different regions across the country, and one view that I particularly enjoy is Olumo Rock, which I visited about two weeks ago.

'Has to be' is informal and slightly awkward here; 'is' is a clearer linking verb. Also add a comma before 'and' to join clauses. Suggestion: use simple present 'is' for stating a preference and keep punctuation clear.