Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetitive phrases and correct verb tenses (e.g., 'I keep them' not 'I kept them', 'relive my memories' not 'reply my old memories'). Use linking words like 'so' or 'which' to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel. For example, on holiday I photograph landscapes and street scenes, which I keep as souvenirs to help me relive special moments later.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct sentence structure; avoid awkward phrasing. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give specific reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Remove unclear fragments like 'but their job opportunities and nightlife' — instead say 'and they offer job opportunities and vibrant nightlife'.

Example: I prefer urban views because I enjoy skyscrapers and the busy city atmosphere. For example, cities offer cultural events, job opportunities and vibrant nightlife, so I can go from a café to a park and then to a club in one evening.

Suggestion: Make the answer more concise and varied in vocabulary. Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons connected by linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Avoid long repetitive lists; group related ideas for clarity.

Example: Although I like my home country, I prefer views abroad because travel lets me see different landscapes and architectural styles. For example, visiting another country allows me to experience new cultures and try unfamiliar foods while exploring unique cityscapes and countryside views.

× And I kept them as a souvenir.

✓ And I keep them as souvenirs.

The original uses kept (past tense) while the student describes a habitual action; use present simple keep. Also souvenir should be plural (several photos), so use souvenirs. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and match singular/plural: 'I keep them as souvenirs.'

× And I looked at them when I feel nostalgic and want to reply my old memories.

✓ And I look at them when I feel nostalgic and want to recall my old memories.

Mixed tenses: looked (past) with feel and want (present). Use present simple for habitual actions. 'Reply my old memories' is incorrect collocation; 'recall' or 'remember' is correct verb for memories. Suggestion: use 'look at' and 'recall' for describing habitual actions.

× I think it's a kind of souvenir.

✓ I think they are a kind of souvenir.

Reference issue: 'it' is unclear because photos are plural; use 'they' and match plural 'are'. Alternatively say 'a kind of souvenir' or 'souvenirs'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun and verb agree with the noun's number.

× Cities also offer more cultural events, but their job opportunities and nightlife.

✓ Cities also offer more cultural events, as well as job opportunities and nightlife.

'But' is the wrong conjunction here; it implies contrast. The sentence intends to add items, so use 'as well as' or 'and'. Also 'their' is unnecessary; use 'job opportunities and nightlife' generally. Suggestion: use additive conjunctions for listing positives.

× For example, I can go from a small cafe to a park and then to a club. It is various.

✓ For example, I can go from a small cafe to a park and then to a club. It is varied.

'Various' describes a plural noun (various activities/places); using 'it is various' is unnatural. 'Varied' describes something diverse and is appropriate here. Suggestion: use 'varied' or rephrase 'There is a variety of activities.'

× As much as I love my own country, I prefer views in other countries because I think it is great to have the opportunity to travel to see different landscapes, buildings and have a chance to experience different cultures, not only in meeting people or eating new food, but also in seeing different views.

✓ As much as I love my own country, I prefer views in other countries because I think it is great to have the opportunity to travel to see different landscapes and buildings and to experience different cultures, not only by meeting people or eating new foods, but also by seeing different views.

Several issues: 'it is great to have the opportunity to travel to see... and have a chance' mixes parallel structures; make verbs parallel by using 'to see' and 'to experience.' 'Eating new food' should be pluralized to 'new foods' or 'new cuisine.' Also use 'by' to show means ('by meeting', 'by eating', 'by seeing'). Suggestion: fix parallel structure and prepositions for clarity.